SunOfHotMom
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I would like some feedback on what I wrote so far. I think its a hot mom son taboo story. Its my first time. just want some feedback.
mom son taboo
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Malcolm_79
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I'd love to read it
SunOfHotMom
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This is what i got so far
he following story is complete fiction, and everyone is over
Greg was 67-year-old man. Retired, widowed and with several owned properties. He was a father of 2 and a grandfather of 3. His oldest daughter was Annie 46 at the time. She was also into real estate like him with 1 son who was 25 at the time. About 4 years ago Annie had been through 2 abusive relationships back-to-back and had also gone through a miscarriage. Greg like everyone else thought it was most likely from her abusive boyfriend Frank at the time. However, Annie kept that pain to herself. Over the last 4 years Annie had grown much closer to her son Tommy. They had been hanging out at each other's places more often. Seeing movies, dinner, going out of town. Most recently they had been spending a lot of 3 day weekends at his private cabin. When he had asked Tommy told him they had been enjoying hiking together as part of working out. Both Tommy and Annie did keep themselves in great shape. However, when Greg had asked his friend who lives nearby, he hardly seen them in town or on the hiking trails. So why would they lie about hiking? Why would they spend all the time indoors? Greg had also got annoyed with them always using the cabin and not giving other family a chance to use it. For some reason, Greg felt he should check things out for himself. He decided to go the very night day to see them for a check in.
After a few hours' drive, Greg had come to the gravel driveway of his private cabin tucked away in the woods. The furthest cabin was 5 miles away. It was almost sundown and he could see the fireplace was burring well. Greg didn't know what to expect, or why he felt he had to see what they were up to. He did know he would get at least a good meal since his grandson was a great cook. Greg got out of his SUV and walked to the front door of the cabin. He could hear 80s hard rock being played in the living room. He decided to give a knock. No one answered. He tried once more. Then he decided to use his key. After all it was his cabin. As he opened the door the no one was in the living room or the connecting kitchen. He looked down the hall where the bedrooms are at. The one in the middle had the door closed but could hear something but couldn't make it out do to the 80s rock playing loud and his bad hearing. He reached for the stereo to turn it down. As he did, he could hear his daughter grunting in distress it seemed like. He moved a fast as he could in his old state to the door. The sound of his daughter grunting grew more intense. He opened the door with force. All he could see was his grandson Tommy with his mom's black high heels on his shoulders. Tommy was trusting into her like a mad man. Greg was baffled and his heart sank to his stomach. His first thought was. It looks like his raping her!
"Tommy what the hell are you doing!?" Greg shouted at his grandson.
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he following story is complete fiction, and everyone is over
Greg was 67-year-old man. Retired, widowed and with several owned properties. He was a father of 2 and a grandfather of 3. His oldest daughter was Annie 46 at the time. She was also into real estate like him with 1 son who was 25 at the time. About 4 years ago Annie had been through 2 abusive relationships back-to-back and had also gone through a miscarriage. Greg like everyone else thought it was most likely from her abusive boyfriend Frank at the time. However, Annie kept that pain to herself. Over the last 4 years Annie had grown much closer to her son Tommy. They had been hanging out at each other's places more often. Seeing movies, dinner, going out of town. Most recently they had been spending a lot of 3 day weekends at his private cabin. When he had asked Tommy told him they had been enjoying hiking together as part of working out. Both Tommy and Annie did keep themselves in great shape. However, when Greg had asked his friend who lives nearby, he hardly seen them in town or on the hiking trails. So why would they lie about hiking? Why would they spend all the time indoors? Greg had also got annoyed with them always using the cabin and not giving other family a chance to use it. For some reason, Greg felt he should check things out for himself. He decided to go the very night day to see them for a check in.
After a few hours' drive, Greg had come to the gravel driveway of his private cabin tucked away in the woods. The furthest cabin was 5 miles away. It was almost sundown and he could see the fireplace was burring well. Greg didn't know what to expect, or why he felt he had to see what they were up to. He did know he would get at least a good meal since his grandson was a great cook. Greg got out of his SUV and walked to the front door of the cabin. He could hear 80s hard rock being played in the living room. He decided to give a knock. No one answered. He tried once more. Then he decided to use his key. After all it was his cabin. As he opened the door the no one was in the living room or the connecting kitchen. He looked down the hall where the bedrooms are at. The one in the middle had the door closed but could hear something but couldn't make it out do to the 80s rock playing loud and his bad hearing. He reached for the stereo to turn it down. As he did, he could hear his daughter grunting in distress it seemed like. He moved a fast as he could in his old state to the door. The sound of his daughter grunting grew more intense. He opened the door with force. All he could see was his grandson Tommy with his mom's black high heels on his shoulders. Tommy was trusting into her like a mad man. Greg was baffled and his heart sank to his stomach. His first thought was. It looks like his raping her!
"Tommy what the hell are you doing!?" Greg shouted at his grandson.
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Duil2
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If you'd like someone to beta read it for you, I can send you my email address so you can send it on for comments. There are the bones of a good story here, it may have just begun in the wrong place. Naturally I can't comment on the ending as it's been removed.
The parts that are still here have alot of telling at the beginning rather than showing us. For example instead of telling about her abusive relationships you could write a scene of her having to leave and possibly come back to her father temporarily. As you introduce the characters you can give some description to the reader but perhaps have her circumstances revealed through dialogue.
I also think it's unusual to have it from the father's perspective when he isn't involved with the taboo behaviour. Have you read many of the stories here in the T/I category? If not, I'd suggest it to get familiar with what tends to get good reaction. Good luck, anyway.
The parts that are still here have alot of telling at the beginning rather than showing us. For example instead of telling about her abusive relationships you could write a scene of her having to leave and possibly come back to her father temporarily. As you introduce the characters you can give some description to the reader but perhaps have her circumstances revealed through dialogue.
I also think it's unusual to have it from the father's perspective when he isn't involved with the taboo behaviour. Have you read many of the stories here in the T/I category? If not, I'd suggest it to get familiar with what tends to get good reaction. Good luck, anyway.
SunOfHotMom
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Yeah. It's one story that connects to the rest. Her moving back in is a no go. Since in the story she's supposed to be rich. But sure send me a email. Also the point is that he is in a way being cucked.
