Name the Great Lit. Hooks and Hookers

[Angelique_Coquine]

"Russell had a fetish. I blame his parents for it."

Reasons I loved it:

1) It immediately grabbed my attention - what fetish?
2) I want to know: Why does the narrator blame the parents?
3) I am curious: Who the fuck is the narrator to make such a judgement?
4) I also want to know whether the narrator blames the parents because he/she became addicted to the fetish (interesting) or he/she doesn't like the fetish (more interesting) and wishes it would go away?

My take.

Interesting take on it.

 

[scriptordelecto]

"Russell had a fetish. I blame his parents for it."

Reasons I loved it:

1) It immediately grabbed my attention - what fetish?
2) I want to know: Why does the narrator blame the parents?
3) I am curious: Who the fuck is the narrator to make such a judgement?
4) I also want to know whether the narrator blames the parents because he/she became addicted to the fetish (interesting) or he/she doesn't like the fetish (more interesting) and wishes it would go away?

My take.

I voted for this one as well. In addition to all of the reasons Charley listed, here's the direction my thoughts took.

We've all met people with names that conjured the "What were the parents thinking?" question. Likely it wasn't in relation to a fetish, but the implication is that Russell's name has influenced the outcome of his life.

It leads that reader to wonder about those people they've met. Is there something about them, such as a fetish, that would make them interesting? Has the social response to the name they were given had a profound enough impact on them that they've developed a fetish?

(somehow that became far more verbose than it was in my head )

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

I was being facetious.

I never doubted that. Sorry if I came off sounding like a jerk.

It was the dialog, inner voice in this case that got my attention, but in general, dialog is really a good hook. Especially, for me if it's done naturally.

As for dialogue, I've used direct quotes but they're tricky. One of the best I ever read was the opening to, The Lovely Bones. "My name was Salmon, like the fish; first name Susie. I was fourteen when I was murdered on December 6, 1973."

Indirect stuff (Call me, Ishmael.) is a little easier for me to handle.

Interesting take on it.

AC, CharleyH does not think as others do. Trust me on that.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[Dar~]

For those who liked #8

Lustful Leeves Chap 1

Lustful Leeves Chap 2

Lustful Leeves Chap 3

Lustful Leeves Chap 4

The premise was to do everything listed on the thread what not to do in a porn story and also hit every category. It's hilarious. It also needs more chapters, it's not a complete tale yet...

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Lustful bump.

For those who liked #8

Lustful Leeves Chap 1

Lustful Leeves Chap 2

Lustful Leeves Chap 3

Lustful Leeves Chap 4

The premise was to do everything listed on the thread what not to do in a porn story and also hit every category. It's hilarious. It also needs more chapters, it's not a complete tale yet...

 

[drksideofthemoon]

None of them particularily grabbed me, or piqued my interest. So my vote is none of the above.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

None of them particularily grabbed me, or piqued my interest. So my vote is none of the above.

​

Okay, all right, be that way, see if I care. But I double-dog dare you to come up with some by any Lit writer, except, MllledelaPlumeBleu and Blackshanglan, that do grab your pique.

"Ready to Rumble" Rumple Foreskin

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Last chance to dimple your dot, hang your chad, vote on behalf of deceased relatives, and other forms of voting abuse.

The note above the poll says it'll close: 06-18-2007 at 01:37 AM. I presume, even assume, that Laurel and Manu time (aka Pacific Daylight Savings - US).

The winner can be declared whenever someone feels moved to check the tally after the polls close. If, as expected, everyone else has something better to do, I'll perform the duty sooner or later tomorrow, probably, that's if I don't forget. Tension mounts.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[damppanties]

None of them particularily grabbed me, or piqued my interest. So my vote is none of the above.

​

Okay, all right, be that way, see if I care. But I double-dog dare you to come up with some by any Lit writer, except, MllledelaPlumeBleu and Blackshanglan, that do grab your pique.

"Ready to Rumble" Rumple Foreskin

Yes, I poke him too to come up with something. *poke*

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Yes, I poke him too to come up with something. *poke*

Don't poke him too hard, DP. Deacon Moon bruises easy and tends to heals slow.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[TE999]

One vote for #2.

Don't mind drk--that cattle drive he just finished made him a tad cranky.

 

[damppanties]

Don't poke him too hard, DP. Deacon Moon bruises easy and tends to heals slow.

Rumple Foreskin

He hasn't responded. Maybe I should move the *poke* up to a *whupp*

 

[drksideofthemoon]

He hasn't responded. Maybe I should move the *poke* up to a *whupp*

Shh, I was thinking...of one of your stories to quote...

 

[drksideofthemoon]

​

Okay, all right, be that way, see if I care. But I double-dog dare you to come up with some by any Lit writer, except, MllledelaPlumeBleu and Blackshanglan, that do grab your pique.

"Ready to Rumble" Rumple Foreskin

This is the third sentence from Dampy's Love Lost...and is my favorite line from any Literotica story...

The thousands of separate twinkling lights scattered like so many diamonds of a broken necklace, a fitting parallel to the shards of her own aching heart.

 

[damppanties]

Ok, that's a dud. It's not even a full sentence. It's a fragment.

That's it.

*poke*

 

[Jubal_Harshaw]

What about this one?

A tear rolled down her cheek. She stared for a long moment. Another tear fell, then another. Then it was like rain.

 

[angelicminx]

Current first line in the novel my mother and I are collaborating on:

The day she killed Mercedes Brueder, Misty’s life was forever changed.


Whatcha think? Is it enough? Do you want to know more?

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

AND THE WINNERS ARE!​

Voting for BEST LITEROTICA HOOK, an event second only in social significance to the day W.C. Fields drank a glass of water, has come to an end. That an unspecified number of AH'ers bothered to nominate their own openings and those of other Literotica writers, then vote 48 times on the finalist, says something, no doubt, but I haven't a clue what it might be.

So without further ado and/or do-do, here are the "AH'er's Choice" for best opening line in a Literoitca story.

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THIRD PLACE:

Lustful Leeves, by AngelicMinx

Russell had a fetish. I blame his parents. I mean, really... what were they smokin' the day he was born? They named him Russell Leeves? In my opinion, that was just asking for trouble. hell free" card.

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FIRST PLACE (tie)

Lassoing the Moon, by SelenaKittyn

She was going to hell. There was no getting around it—do not pass go, do not collect $200, she was going straight to hell without a

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White Trash, Ch. 1, by Jomar

Yeah, I fucked her.

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For those who finished out of the money, feel free to blame the format and the formatter...

Rumple Foreskin

 

[TxRad]

Oh well, I guess it's time to get back in the skirt and check out the local street corner. Happy hooker to the bitter end....

 

[jomar]

AND THE WINNERS ARE!​

Voting for BEST LITEROTICA HOOK, an event second only in social significance to the day W.C. Fields drank a glass of water, has come to an end. That an unspecified number of AH'ers bothered to nominate their own openings and those of other Literotica writers, then vote 48 times on the finalist, says something, no doubt, but I haven't a clue what it might be.

So without further ado and/or do-do, here are the "AH'er's Choice" for best opening line in a Literoitca story.

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THIRD PLACE:

Lustful Leeves, by AngelicMinx

Russell had a fetish. I blame his parents. I mean, really... what were they smokin' the day he was born? They named him Russell Leeves? In my opinion, that was just asking for trouble. hell free" card.

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FIRST PLACE (tie)

Lassoing the Moon, by SelenaKittyn

She was going to hell. There was no getting around it—do not pass go, do not collect $200, she was going straight to hell without a

--

White Trash, Ch. 1, by Jomar

Yeah, I fucked her.

==

For those who finished out of the money, feel free to blame the format and the formatter...

Rumple Foreskin

I am honored to be in such esteemed company as SelenaKittyn, and the rest of the contestants, for this (essentially third place) first place prize. Not knowing whether to laugh or cry, please let me say that I am humbled that my modest hook was self-selected among all the thousands of hooks on Lit to be in this poll.

And as for the story containing the winning sentence, White Trash, Part 1, well, it certainly stands on its own as a down and dirty, gritty stroke story. But the discerning reader will note the undertone of sadness, of yearning, of loss, of choices made that were not of our dreams. Yes, if you squint your eyes while reading WT, Part 1, and don't think too hard, it is much more than it seems.

Then you might be drawn to WT, Part 2, which has its own catchy start. This chapter is a direct continuation of the first chapter, and, as the first, while it stands alone as a stroker, the advanced reader will be drawn in by the male's ambivalence and increasing fondness for his drunken sex partner. The humor in this chapter abounds as the lovers satisfy their lust in the rustic setting of his single-wide.

Thank you, thank you, (*prayer bow*) and thank you.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Jomar, the obvious sincerity of you humility is whelming. By the way, you might want to check out Shang's thread on irony.

Tx, when you're back in working clothes and standing "down by the corner" keep your distance from those super-size south Texas mudholes.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[jomar]

Jomar, the obvious sincerity of you humility is whelming. By the way, you might want to check out Shang's thread on irony.

Tx, when you're back in working clothes and standing "down by the corner" keep your distance from those super-size south Texas mudholes.

Rumple Foreskin

I did. I mentioned the Golf Gods toy with me.