New Poetry Recommendations

[GuiltyPleasure]

interesting new poem today from a new-to-me poet loserstyx. I always enjoy it when that happens.

 

[LeBroz]

Sunday Review

interesting new poem today from a new-to-me poet loserstyx. I always enjoy it when that happens.

A good call on that one Tess. Though I have mixed feelings about all those slashes:

The gridlock continues well past 2am
until the city/I has/have swept away this mess,
and the one car/thought that took the back roads
reaches it's destination.

But then I thought it works in support of the poet's self-described state of mind.


l8bloom has a hilarious parody in Twelve Days of Kiss-mas. You can tell from the title the inspiration for the parody — I just kept hearing the Muppets singing this one, especially Miss Piggy trying to hog it all. Okay, so it's a bit over the top, but what the hell, it's Christmas — everything's forgivable.


naughtycakes continues her prolific ways with Bitch-Goddess. It might help your understanding to have this little background:

The story goes that Tireseus, when somewhat younger, interrupted two snakes in the act of copulation—a very dangerous thing to do in the ancient world, for snakes hold a good deal of earth magic. He was changed, for this act, into a woman, a harsh punishment in the ancient world (women were viewed as physical aberrations of men, even property), but one with a bit of poetic justice: a sexual punishment for a sexual crime. Anyway, Tireseus continued in this vein of existence for some nine years I believe, until he happened to stumble upon two more copulating snakes, whom he interrupted in hopes of recovering his manhood. This, of course, worked like a charm, making Tireseus quite pleased. Little did he know it would come back to haunt him.

Some time later, Hera and Zeus were fighting (what's new?). The issue at hand was which gender was better off in the sack: men or women. Hera said that men had all the fun; Zeus was incredulous: "It doesn't look like that to me!"

Anyway, to solve the quarrel they decided to ask Tireseus who was better off, since he had experienced sex both as a man and as woman. He reported that women have 10 times the fun. Hera, in her anger, blinded the poor bloke (she never was a very gracious loser, especially if it meant her husband was right). In the ancient world, as we see with Polyphimos' ability to see Odysseus' future, the blind had a certain prophetic ability. Even Christ said something to that effect: the blind shall see etc. Losing one's physical sight usually meant gaining a bit of spiritual sense. Anyway, Zeus felt bad for the old bugger and therefore blessed him with exceptional foresight of the mind.

What a story, eh?

That's it for now. Give 'em a look and see what you think. And remember to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

We've gotten over a foot of snow here — now I wonder where that shovel is — buried somewhere under that damn white stuff, perhaps.

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[l8bloom]

Thanks for the review
Yup, over the top! Tis the season for silliness! http://www.hystersisters.com/vb2/images/smilies/present.gif

:sigh: Must run off to a day full of meetings ... have fun, ya'all ...

 

[naughtycakes]

Hi all, thanks so much for reading my stuff and commenting on it. I have to admit, I've been checking this thread constantly to see what ya'll have to say. I'm not really that prolific, these are poems I've written over the years, some as long as ten years ago. I'm new to this online thing. I've always read literotica for the erotic stories, and just discovered the poetry recently, so I decided to submit mine in hopes it would get my creative juices flowing to write some more. I haven't written in quite a while, so I've got to get on it!

I really like how everybody's so supportive and into the poetry here, it's really refreshing. I did some spoken word when I used to live in Atlanta and even the Fringe Festival there one year but found nobody really gave a sh*t.

Sorry if I flooded you guys with too much stuff at once, I realized later I shoulda spaced it out better - what can I say, I'm a newbie! Happy Holidays to all.... naughtycakes.

 

[DeepAsleep]

Dirty Old Man by Tokuqin is interesting, if a bit prosey for my tastes. Check it out.

Untitled Haiku by wonder_kitty is a short breath of ... something.

Sick - The right wing checks in, via darthjser. This is an "almost" in my book. And I don't think there's anything wrong with stripping.

Pubic Park Studies #1 by Hmmnmmm wins the "lead-pipe subtlety" award for the evening.

S'what I got.

 

[Angeline]

December 18, 2007

There are 18 new poems posted today. Lots of good stuff there that is definitely worth your reading time. I'm off to read them all and will be back with reviews shortly.

There is a treasure trove of good reading in the new poems section at Lit today. I'll just mention my favorites, but I strongly encourage you to read them all, then vote and comment. There's a lot out there well worth your time today.

Yasashii_Kaze has posted her first three poems at Lit today, and I suggest you read them all. You and End have simple construction and almost feel like poetry exercises and Goodbye could maybe use some editing to avoid some cliched phrasing, but all three poems show a talented writer at work.

To the Ascetics by Paris_Garters is both erotic and thought-provoking, not an easy combination to carry off well, but she does. The poem seems almost too wordy, bristling with ideas and maybe some of it could be trimmed back. But that's just one reader's opinion. Read it for yourself and see what you think.

doctordorothy has Real Love 2004, which is simply a sweet poem. Seemed to me it could use some shaping to make it come across even stronger, but it's definitely a well-written love poem. There can never be too many of those in the world imho.

Vox_'s poem Excuse #34 made me laugh. It skims the edge of erotic but really it's just a fun poem that will remind you about what your mother always warned you!

ElmerGlew flexes his hydrologist's muscles in geothermal, which is short, bubblin hot and a good reminder that metaphor is a poet's good friend. (Should have a red H for Hot! Hot! Hot!

Paris_Garters has two other poems up today, both are wonderfully written and each seems to play off the other. I don't recall having read For Danny before. It's wonderful writing and if it seems somewhat obscure at first read, read it again. Poetry isn't always meant to be easy. And then compare it with her wonderful Danae, a langorous, sensual piece that first appeared here in the Ekphrastic Poetry Challenge. And while you're at it, consider the non-erotic/erotic classifications for these two poems. Kinda makes you wonder why we have them at all, doesn't it?

And here's an official welcome to poetry submissions for Biffalo_Buff, who has posted on the forum a few times but never submitted poems at Lit until today. Anti-Poetic is my favorite, but don't miss Archeology (which should be resubmitted to a poetry journal imo) or Sparring, which is just one very funny metaphor. Great writing all round. I look forward to more from this poet.

And finally, don't miss AnonAndAnon's Sweet little gaggle of lines, a sweet little poem that captures a universal experience (well, for poets) and knows its own limitations. A fun read that made me smile.

That's it for me today. There are other poems I might have commented on were I not so overwhelmed with the riches of today's offerings. Take some time to meander through today's new poems. You won't be disappointed.

Peace,
Angeline

 

[LeBroz]

Wednesday's Review

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Looks like all the Wow! poems happened yesterday. There're but 7 new postings today and I feel like only one deserves mention.


ElmerGlew presents us with another of his from the 5/5 thread, mount. While not quite as strong as yesterday's posting, it is subtle but could be better if, instead of starting with, "the woman," it were changed to "the filly." As it is written it's too obvious, too predictable.

That's it for today unless more get posted later. You can check them all out and see for yourself whether what I'm saying is true. Just remember to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[colddiesel]

"On Green Dolphin Street" by Tristesse2 is easily the best offering on Thursday. A deceptively straight forward obsevational piece which makes a very clear image. Elmer Glew and hmmm also have poems but both seem a little forced .Trying too hard to be 'original' perhaps.

 

[champagne1982]

There are eleven new poems today, Friday, the 21st of December.

I know there are good poems today. I just haven't got the right frame of mind to enjoy them. Maybe it's the terrible news I got yesterday, maybe it's because of the anniversary of friends' passing, maybe it's because I have had enough of this year. It's likely a combination of these and because I started at the bottom of the list and had to report one of the poems I found there.

If someone has a positive review I beg you, include it on this thread.

I wish you all a far better season than I can see at the moment, this is no place to be and I pray I can find a way through it and that I'm granted the time to do so.

Be well and safe and have a happy holiday.

 

[foehn2]

There are eleven new poems today, Friday, the 21st of December.

I know there are good poems today. I just haven't got the right frame of mind to enjoy them. Maybe it's the terrible news I got yesterday, maybe it's because of the anniversary of friends' passing, maybe it's because I have had enough of this year. It's likely a combination of these and because I started at the bottom of the list and had to report one of the poems I found there.

If someone has a positive review I beg you, include it on this thread.

I wish you all a far better season than I can see at the moment, this is no place to be and I pray I can find a way through it and that I'm granted the time to do so.

Be well and safe and have a happy holiday.

Sorry, c., about your bad news, bad frame of mind and the (sad) anniversary. You know we all love you anyway. I'm usually too busy these days to spend much time here, but I took your request to heart, and found a gem. It is... Rendezvous by woz8822. I'm not usually impressed by "erotic" poetry, but the language in this one was startlingly crystal-bright. Like this:

"She was shimmering summer fog moist..."

Not a disappointment, and the best poem in the lot, so far today, as far as I can see.

Other good pieces that other people will enjoy. I didn't, so much, but then, I'm an asshole. I thought Panty Sniffin' Blues was pretty good, especially given the disclaimer that it was intended to be a song.

And "'Twas the Night Before Yuletide," Lubrican's effort, was cute and engaging, but the rhythm bothered me.

The others were not horrible at all, just didn't grab me. There's always something for everyone. So it goes.

Hope I helped fill in for ya, c.

 

[LeBroz]

There are eleven new poems today, Friday, the 21st of December.

I know there are good poems today. I just haven't got the right frame of mind to enjoy them. Maybe it's the terrible news I got yesterday, maybe it's because of the anniversary of friends' passing, maybe it's because I have had enough of this year. It's likely a combination of these and because I started at the bottom of the list and had to report one of the poems I found there.

If someone has a positive review I beg you, include it on this thread.

I wish you all a far better season than I can see at the moment, this is no place to be and I pray I can find a way through it and that I'm granted the time to do so.

Be well and safe and have a happy holiday.

Sorry to hear of the way things are going for you. Hope the worst is behind you now and the season brightens for you and brings a measure of good cheer so that the new year can be the best you've seen.

Will come back here shortly and post my limited recommendations. I did see a couple of note.


foehn2 has a couple up today, a sweet little love poem, free hugs, and most especially I like for its construction, Electing You which, despite its title, is not about politics. He does a fine job with enjambment. Here's just one example I like:

Don't have to say any
thing, you don't have to
respond. i love you,
and somehow, that's enough.

I see what the punctuation says but you can still read it a couple ways, both very pleasing; follow the punctuation or ignore it — that's the added benefit of actually seeing the poem and the way enjambment can add meaning to the words.


ElmerGlew does it again today with another posting from the 5/5 thread, ritual. This one leaves so much to the reader's imagination. Things you might wonder about is if broken dishes are there literally or just figuratively, is he coming home late and why, was there an argument or is he so late he missed dinner? The poet's given free rein to the reader's imagination. Enjoy.

That's all that struck a nerve for me. Now I see foehn2 has made his own contribution. Looks like we've covered them all pretty well. So now go ahead and see what you think; just go and read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.


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[LeBroz]

Saturday's Review

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Only two (2) poems posted today, both deserving of your read.


ElmerGlew gives us a brief read that seems to be inspired by plate tectonics in his hertz. If you think you are slow, imagine the slowness of planetary geology.

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tungtied2u gives us what sure sounds like another workday morning rush in Malaise. It's always worse in the winter when you have to scrap the frost {or worse} off your windshield.

It's easy today — check 'em both out. Back to the drinks and other Christmas cheer. Have a Happy & a Mary — go ahead, she's not my type anyway.

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[Syndra Lynn]

doctordorothy deserves a nod for All Meet where Roads End.

As I stood in the church I felt the past
Coil its fingers around me cold and fast-
Fog and mist, fire and earth,
Breath and spirit pushing through earth.
Ice blue lips and beating chest,
All meet where roads end at Final Rest.

And what of life that lie between,
The sands of time the tide washed clean?
Was it blown away to dust,
Bone to ash and sword to rust?

I enjoyed this very much.


And this one by strongbutgentle made me deliciously wet.

Licorice thin, erotic whip
Snapping quick against her hip
Welts of red on glistening skin
Quiet moans, the smell of sin

thank you and welcome to lit!

 

[Angeline]

Tuesday, December 25

Merry Tuesday and Happy Christmas. I hope you are all having a wonderful day and enjoying it safely and with as little stress as possible. My big extravaganza (and quite a lovely one it was) was last night. Today I have a new digital cameral, lots o other goodies and nothing to do but rest my poor old back, which I fully intend to do. Tomorrow, too.

However, poetry goes on. Like life. Someone here recently said that living is poetry. I think it was bijou and I think I paraphrased very loosely, but I agree with her. And there are only a very few (4) new poems, so you can just live most of your poetry today (and for many of you it will be richly textured poetry), but if you have a few quiet moments, you can:

Begin with a prosey piece, the tears and laughter we share by a good friend to this forum, steve porter. This is not writing filled with poetic devices or the elegant twists and turns some writers here can shape, but steve has a valuable lesson to pass on. A poem that can convey the notion of celebrating love even at the moment of lovers' parting is valuable and poetic. Always good to see a steve porter poem.

If you're reading from the bottom up like me, you'll next come to Dirty&Damaged by RoniB, who is submitting to Lit for the second time with this poem. It's not a pretty Christmas message, it has some vagaries and could use some language changes and cutting back. It does however have a very strong voice with a tone that shifts from anger to bargaining to unrepentance. There's definite talent here and if this writer continues to study and write, her poetry will continue to improve.

Then we have the first of today's two "Christmas" poems, Christmas Time in Shady Pine, USA by seannelson. This is a well-written narrative piece, a story with a bitter ending. In my opinion, the poem could use some shaping, but it's a good piece of writing with some very strong narrative features.

The second Christmas poem is ceremony by ElmerGlew, a fine poet and citizen of the world, who originally wrote this poem for the December Contest here on the forum. It's quirky and surreal with an ending that leaves much open for the reader's interpretation. It is excellent writing from word one. If you haven't seen it yet, it's a must read. If you have, maybe read it again.

Read, vote, comment, peace, good will toward women (and men). Here's a mistletoe kissy cause you're such a lovely group of misfits. I misfit right in.

 

[LeBroz]

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A year older and a day grumpier. Hey, I'm coming off a two-day wine and food fest high where the main key ingredient was sugar. Never saw so many glazes on so many different dishes and desserts. All screaming, here a pound, there a pound, pound, pound, pound. Quick, hide the scale till 2008.

Let's see if there are any pleasing low-fat, low caloric offerings in today's 11 poem posting.


NiceGuyInVa treats us to a fun, light, airy, rhyming piece in The Well Aged Lady which keeps the Boomers in the forefront, like the Energizer Bunny™, we just keep going and going and going...


Okay then, too light and easy? Well try another of ElmerGlew's offerings in today's posting of superman with the usual offering of unusual language and images:

to where your elk-like femur, the curl of rib
that solid nursery, the pelvic cradle
all revel erotic as a dissected starfish

hmmnmm has a nice pleasing scene on display in his Wintry Scene from the bridge. Just one cautionary note — you may trip up on slushless. Make sure you can say it now {do it without saying slushlish instead} before reading the poem, then go ahead and give the poem a try.


That's it for today's sugar-induced ramblings. There are still 7 others to peruse that may tickle your tummy or melt your butter. Go ahead, you know you want to do it — go on and read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[WickedEve]

Thursday

Hello to everyone. Hope you all had a wonderful holiday.
There are 21 new poems for Thursday. Five of them are by RoniB, which I read. Interesting poems. Not really sure how much I like them or not, but worth checking out.

Nose Job
She’s but a stick-em-up kinda gal,
“Let’s skip the forey play.”
Without the shtick she wants the stick
Without any delay.

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About half of the new poems (10) are by vixen_2006. If you're a fan, then please read and comment.

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Please as I do by passionate_ness gives us a poem or a short story or something. I only made it through the first sentence. "I am being aroused by the slightest thing these days, if the wind blows wrong I can feel my coochie get those tingling waves." I kind of wish my coochie had tingling waves. I do get those in my legs, if I don't move them often enough. Circulation problems. I guess it's best that my coochie is tingle-free.

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Spanky Is Confused by xavier1123
Odd poem. Give it a read.

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My pick of the day:

[your name here]
by 4degrees©

scissors amore'
open and snap closed
cut my cock to shreds
ribbons of skin
that drip with you

 

[LeBroz]

Christmas Forgot

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No one covered Christmas Eve's offerings {though Syndra did a couple from Sunday then}. I was just making up for lost time when I came across this worthy mention from a brand new Litster poet, gary046. Give his post, To Care, a read and see if it doesn't remind you of Boo's writing. Go on, you know you want to do it!

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[champagne1982]

There are 20 new poems this Friday the last of 2007. My review today reflects my solitary opinion. If you would like to add a comment or a recommendation about the new poems I hope you contribute to the thread.

Have a wonderful day and weekend everyone.

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DireLilith doesn't want our opinions through the public feedback portal, if you feel inclined to send her a message about her audio poem, Fuck My Ass Audio Poem, you can do it through her email.

Feelin Saucy by swallowedscream is a great poem to read, it's even better to listen to.

emaalr's Between the raindrops has a wonderful look and feel of rain sliding over glass. It's good.

I'm an unabashed steve porter fan so, I can't get past a steve porter poem without recommending you visit it, too. Go read The Curse of Cassandra and find out why you should.

Go with l8bloom and spend time Walking in snow near Alberta. She conveys exactly what a walk in the foothills can be when you're with someone who loves the outdoors as much as you.

 

[Angeline]

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Go with l8bloom and spend time Walking in snow near Alberta. She conveys exactly what a walk in the foothills can be when you're with someone who loves the outdoors as much as you.

I'll second this. I think it's a must read. Really sensual and evocative.

 

[twelveoone]

I'm an unabashed steve porter fan so, I can't get past a steve porter poem without recommending you visit it, too. Go read The Curse of Cassandra and find out why you should.
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I'm not a Steve Porter fan (that is my disclaimer) but this is a treasure, a bit too long and thick for average literotica readers but this is real poetry folks, a rareity - I second this.

My pick of the day:

[your name here]
by 4degrees©

scissors amore'
open and snap closed
cut my cock to shreds
ribbons of skin
that drip with you

Not quite my pick of the week, close, 4degrees is always interesting and writing longer poetry - I second this - scissors amore' what a cut-up, that guy.

Compliments to the NPR group
for a change

 

[Angeline]

January 1, 2008

Good morning poets and Happy New Year. 2008 just sounds wrong to me. In my mind it's still 1980, 1970. Well, never mind that. I hope you are all feeling no (or little) pain this morning. There are actually four new poems posted today for you to read, vote and comment on, and why not start the new year off with some poetry?

doctordorothy has what seems, at first, to be a rather pedestrian poem in See Thru Me, with a (mostly simple) rhyme scheme and lots of prosiness. I'd do some cutting back, but there's some wonderful language in this poem, especially in the second strophe. I don't know doctordorothy though I've read a few of her poems here, but I hope she keeps writing and growing. This poem shows her potential.

Three of today's poems are from l8bloom, a poet I'm liking more and more as I read more of her writing. Tuesday night lingerie shopping seems the least successful of the three to me, as if it would make a better erotic story than a poem. There are some clever turns of phrase, but overall too much prose for me. Tit Fucking is, of course, a muy popular poem/story topic here at Lit. Over the years I've seen some very good poems on the subject and very many mediocre to awful ones. l8's take on the subject is predictable, I guess, but also spare with some good phrasing and an ending I like. I think that "yours' in parentheses in the last strophe is unnecessary and interrupts the flow of the poem, but maybe that's me. Trophy Wife is my favorite of hers today. There are what I think are a few typos and I don't get (sort of) what "Strip Chocolate" is, but again I see her ability to be precise and come up with a really punchy ending. Good poem, especially if you read it aloud and try to imagine the narrator's voice.

My pick of the day is This place blows by the sometimes curmudgeonly twelveoone. It's spare and seemingly simple, but (and this is what I like in much of his poetry) it is very open to interpretation. How should the reader define "blows"? "Shingles"? "I AM JUST"? And the ending, given some of the discussion on the forum of late, is pretty damn funny. Made me laugh, anyway. There's a lot to learn in this little poem about word choice and line breaks. It deserves at least three reads so you can see the variety of interpretations open to you.

Peace and stay warm and safe today.
Angeline

 

[l8bloom]

... I don't get (sort of) what "Strip Chocolate" is...

http://www.gourmetgiftbaskets.com/images/products/Valentines-Day-Gift-Basket/Strip-Chocolate-Board-Game.jpg

NIB, never used. I expect I'll post it for sale on eBay. Or you can have it ...

L8.

 

[Angeline]

http://www.gourmetgiftbaskets.com/images/products/Valentines-Day-Gift-Basket/Strip-Chocolate-Board-Game.jpg

NIB, never used. I expect I'll post it for sale on eBay. Or you can have it ...

L8.

Yes, I kinda thought something like that. And you're sweet to offer, but ut looks like a creativity stifler to me although that paint looks rather interesting.

 

[Angeline]

So I just discovered (thank you person who pmed me) that there were more poems posted after I did the reviews today. I'll check them out later tonight because I'm in the middle of making dinner. So more recommendations to come.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Body paint its greatly over rated