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cahab said:
My normal submissions are first person fantasies, but i wanted to give those who know me (or would like to) from the forums an opportunity to read the kind of stuff I write outside of literotica.

Waiting is an SF non-consent story. It isn't very erotic I'm afraid, not being primarily in that genre, but hopefully it is a good read. It is an editor's pick.

The main character in the story features also in a much more down-to-earth way in the novel I'm currently writing; a gold star to the first person who spots the connection in the years to come!
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I like it just bookmarked it.
 
A new Freddie Clegg story...."Military Engagement"

The first part of my latest story is up on the site.....

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=311909

It looks at what happens next to some of the characters from "Market Forces".


Feedback on style, content or characters is appreciated as always.

Also from my side it's the first time that I've written from a woman's point of view (or at least with a woman lead character and writing in the first person - which probably isn't quite the same thing :) ). I'd be pleased to get feedback on whether this works or not.

I hope folk enjoy it.
 
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Becoming a queen

My newest story is about a special girl and her first time.

It has been very well received - Becoming a queen.

Please tell me what you think.

Maharat
 
As you can tell by my post count I haven't posted on this forum before but I have written a number of stories. The latest two stories I have written are BDSM stories involving a woman submitting to a man and finding out it's actually a secret society. I never read "The Story of O" and barely remember the movie but that was my inspiration for these. If you like them please let me know.

Power Plays Ch. 5 Finds our submissive living in a manor being trained for her new life. At this point in the storyline she doesn't even have a name, she is simply called Slut.

Power Plays Ch. 6 Is her big night. The party she has heard so much about is tonight and it is in actuality her initiation!

I hope you enjoy them. Thanks!
 
Well part two of "Military Engagement" is up and I think you'll enjoy it - well at least if you like BDSM fiction, you should!

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=312696


There's a couple of public comments that are fairly unhelpful (plus one supporter - for which thanks, whoever you are) but I'm inclined to leave them there. I don't expect people to censor me so I don't censor other folk's views - what do other authors do with this sort of things?
 
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My New Life

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=310618

I originally submitted this in chapter form. Chapter 1 and 2 both seemed to do fairly well. Chapter 1 getting close to 50,000 reads and Chapter 2 almost at 20,000 reads. However I made the ultimate faux pas of not having them edited or even proof reading them myself. So I went back and re-read what I have written. I ended up revising a few things in both chapters and extending Chapter 1 considerably. Then I lucked out and found an editor to go over them. By then I had written chapter 3. Now all three of the chapters happen in the first day. So I decided to combine them into a new format of Per Day instead of Per Chapter. Now I might be shooting myself in the foot by doing it this way as it ended up being over 5 lit pages long. But we'll have to see how people respond to it now. I hope those that read the original version will find this version more appealing along with the addition of chapter 3.
 
Perchance to Dream

Perchance to Dream

I guess I have graduated from New Author to Seasoned....

Perchance to Dream -
Clarissa is the walking wounded...afraid of life and all its peril and glory. Years after a major trauma her life begins to change... in dreams both vivid and erotic. Is it real? Or is it only wishful dreaming...?​
 
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My very first story here

"She Surrenders To Herself"

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=313287
Lesbian section

Its about a woman and mother, newly single, returning to the ways of her youth, becoming a girl again, and finding that she may have changed in deeper ways.


In reflection, I would have spent more time on this. Some technical stuff, and added some more build-up. But, as the 'preface' says, I was worried that, if I waited, I wouldn't submit it at all.
I have already been thinking about the next 'chapter'

hope you like it!
either way, I'm dying for some feedback!
 
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This is my first story, ever.
I had a lot of fun writing it but…I don’t know how others see it.

I’d prefer your candid perceptions of it (over candy colored remarks).
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=313633

It’s in a Maledom setting.
And it’s a first person account of a man tormenting his repressed but hot ex.

There is whipping and bondage.
As well; it’s done against the backdrop of consensual sex.

It’s about a 20 minute read (4400 words spread over 8 chapters).
The last couple of chapters are where to real action takes place.

I was trying for a sexual power struggle between near equals.
How’d I do?
 
Hey!

I've posted my firstest ever story and i'm really excited to share it with you. The link is here:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=311175

I tried to write a surreal, yet convincing sports/lesbian/drama. It's partly based on a personal experience and I hope i conveyed the sense of fear, nervousness and sex that I felt that special day.

I'm new to writing, but I tried to stay away from the norm when I wrote about my sex - hope it was as effective as I intended it to be!

Please leave me lots of comments so I can improve my writing techniques so that I can share my adventures with you all!

SwingChick69r xxx
 
First time posting a story on Literotica. Was hoping for some feedback

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=313464

It's a Dark Angel Fanfiction dealing with Max going into heat. Reluc/Anal/MF/Mind Control. The story has received pretty decent reviews so far. (4.32 out of 5) so check it out of you were a fan of the show.

I have a pretty low opinion of my own writing, and I know I could improve in a lot of areas. So any reviews, good or bad would be greatly appreciated.
 
Emma is back

The second and final part of, Emma: Passionate Bride, was posted this morning. In this installment, Emma is lost and then found. It is a stand alone read, but the story hangs together better if part one is read first. Thanks to my loyal readers and for their time to comment and vote.

Regards, caprine

Part I: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=310700 graphic sex+violence

Part II: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=314459 graphic sex+graphic violence+non consent/reluctance
 
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New Stories: need feedback

Hello! I've posted a number of stories recently, and while they've gotten good ratings, what I'd really love is to hear how it made my readers feel and what they liked about it!

I'm a brand new writer and I desperately need some deep feedback to get a sense of what I can improve and what people really can relate to. I'm very appreciative of comments or criticism, and while I don't think I have anything which would particularly draw flames, I'm more than willing to *listen*.

Currently I have 3 stories written and 4 more on the way:

(1) A&M - Latex Candy is Sweet: This is my second posting of my first story, "Candi Ch. 01" with a somewhat more evocative name and the second and final part of the encounter. It's hot and heavy, and I've gotten the comment more than once from readers that though they've never been hugely turned on by latex, this story convinced them they should go out and buy some. Mostly it's about a young woman who's determined to impress her boyfriend and who discovers a side of herself that she never knew she had.

(2) An Apple a Day: An interesting anal piece with some strong girl Domme; a nurse finishing up her schooling has a shy young suitor place an appointment at the clinic where she works, and finds herself engaging in a seriously naughty encounter which quickly escalates out of hand. My first attempt at what I call a "Real Life" story, which is one where the goal is to draw the reader into the situation in a way that it seems less fantastic and more like something that could really happen, which gives it that truly exciting spark. I'm told it succeeds only somewhat, and I'd love some help improving it!

(3) Time to Wake Up - Or, How To Arouse a Sleeping Lover: A short piece involving two young lovers and what happens when one simply won't wake up when they need to! Lighthearted and quick, I've gotten the comment surpringly often that one reader or another has done something like this...

Please let me know how these make you feel / think / desire! Your feedback helps me give you stories that better echo your fantasies and feed your dreams.
 
Military Engagement

The third and final part of Sarah's tale is now up:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=315241

Please note that it (and the other two parts) are now relocated to "Non-Consent" following discussions in the Forum as to what was the most suitable section for this.

Many thanks to all that engaged in the discussion that led to that decision.

Cheers.
 
Hurt

For those who enjoy the longer works but fear being left hanging mid-way, the final chapter of Hurt posted today.

It's an unorthodox story, in some ways, but full of sticky wet sex.

From a much-respected fellow-writer, here:

This is what it should be like - deep and thick and dark and delicious; a real story with real characters by a real author. There are so many lovely touches in here, from the moody background to the characters' emotional baggage to the author's sharp insights. it's so refreshing to see a story that's so *adult* and bittersweet, yet still smoldering with sexual heat.
 
With Pride

I'm finally genuinely proud of something I've written.

A Good Student - Part 5

finally posted the other day and I think it's probably the best thing I've ever written. You really don't need the other 4 parts to understand what's going on. It's a guy and a girl - Conner and Emma, He's her poetry instructor and he's having a BDSM affair with her. He's in love with her but afraid to tell her because he thinks she's just in it for the sex. It's very emotional, very hot.

I know that making an announcement like this is tantamount to inviting every troll in existence to come and shit on it, but I don't care. I sweated blood on this one. Something special happened while I was writing it and I think my writing's changed for good for writing it, and I don't fucking care about trolls. I'm proud of this one.
 
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