Okay... Here it is...

Update as of 8:40 AM 9/9/03

Character..........................Costume.......................Writing?
Mr. Body............................Does it matter?
blacksnake (M.C.)..............Lavender-Paisley Tux
sirhugs..............................Knight Errant
Chicklet.............................Cat....................................Yes
Jenny _S...........................Witch (appropriate)...........Yes
BooMarangue
LustyRusti
Tatelou.............................Princess............................Yes
Bachlem Chaam................Dom
Pop54...............................Pirate (w/parrot)
Overlord............................Jester

Scene: Jenny's rented castle. I see this as being like the castle in Young Frankenstein with a dungeon for Chaam, of course ;), secret passageways, twisting stone stairways and electric lights that seem to go on and off on their own.

It's a dark Halloween night with torrential rain, thunder and lightning.

To make the writing easier, I think we should limit the scenes to just a few rooms: Dungeon, Hallway, Dining Room, Kitchen, Great Hall (where the party begins), A Secret Passageway that runs from the Kitchen to the Dungeon and the Playroom where anything can go on.

And thoughts on this?

Mr. Body ownes the castle and at the beginning of the story he's already dead but not discovered yet. I would suggest he has been stuffed in a closet in the Playroom or something. Anyone have other thoughts?

We need a few people to fill in their costume choices.

I will have the first chapter done tonight. Chicklet will start on Chapter Two after she sees mine. Lou can do Chapter Three if she wants.

Anyone else who wants to write just leave a note.

I will set up an account to post the story when we are done as "AH Holloween Murder Group". If anyone has other ideas let us all know.

Finally, it is a little early we should be thinking of a title for the story too.
 
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Jenny _S said:
Character Costume Writing
Mr. Body Does it matter?
blacksnake (M.C.) Lavender-Paisley Tux
sirhugs Knight Errant
Chicklet Cat Yes
Jenny _S Witch (appropriate) Yes
BooMarangue
LustyRusti
Tatelou Princess Yes
Bachlem Chaam Dom
Pop54 Pirate (w/parrot)
Overlord Jester

Scene: Jenny's rented castle. I see this as being like the castle in Young Frankenstein with a dungeon for Chaam, of course ;), secret passageways, twisting stone stairways and electric lights that seem to go on and off on their own.

It's a dark Halloween night with torrential rain, thunder and lightning.

To make the writing easier, I think we should limit the scenes to just a few rooms: Dungeon, Hallway, Dining Room, Kitchen, Great Hall (where the party begins), A Secret Passageway that runs from the Kitchen to the Dungeon and the Playroom where anything can go on.

And thoughts on this?

Mr. Body ownes the castle and at the beginning of the story he's already dead but not discovered yet. I would suggest he has been stuffed in a closet in the Playroom or something. Anyone have other thoughts?


Sounds like a good start...but why are we all there...do we all know eachother or do we have to get to know one another first....

i'll think some more and then check back
 
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TheOverlord said:
Sounds like a good start...but why are we all there...do we all know eachother or do we have to get to know one another first....

i'll think some more and then check back

I'm not sure it matters. In movie version none of the guests knew each other. The same for "Haunting of Hill House" and "House on Haunted Hill".

I'm working on handling that in the first chapter. When everyone arrives I thought of simply explaining it as a Lit-Together sponsered by Mr. Body who arranged and paid for the whole thing.
 
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Jenny _S said:
I see this as being like the castle in Young Frankenstein with a dungeon for Chaam, of course

Chaam's the only one that gets to use the dungeon?!

:mad: :( :mad: :(
 
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Jenny _S said:
I will set up an account to post the story when we are done as "AH Holloween Murder Group". If anyone has other ideas let us all know.

I would prefer to submit these stories as ourselves, in the Chain Story category. We just title it the same way "Hallowe'en Lit-together" or something Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 etc...That way we each get credit for our chapters.

We would need a schedule. I want to submit my chapter for the Halloween Contest, and if anyone else does too we would need to submit them between Oct 8th and Oct 22nd. We can write them before then, get them edited and perfect, and then start submitting one after the other.

Here's my proposal:

Chapter Author Date of Submission

--One---Jenny-------10/08
--Two--Chicklet------10/10
-Three--Tatelou------10/12
--Four---------------10/14
--Five---------------10/16


-------------------------------------------------------------

Etc etc etc, depending on how many people write chapters.

To submit something for a contest what we've got to do is say "FOR HALLOWEEN CONTEST" in the notes, but we can put "Chain Story" as the category selection. That way, when the contest is over, our chain story gets moved into the proper category.

Any questions about the Contest? Go here: Contest Info Thread.

Alright, any suggestion/comments on my proposal?
 
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Chicklet said:
I would prefer to submit these stories as ourselves, in the Chain Story category. We just title it the same way "Hallowe'en Lit-together" or something Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 etc...That way we each get credit for our chapters.

We would need a schedule. I want to submit my chapter for the Halloween Contest, and if anyone else does too we would need to submit them between Oct 8th and Oct 22nd. We can write them before then, get them edited and perfect, and then start submitting one after the other.

To submit something for a contest what we've got to do is say "FOR HALLOWEEN CONTEST" in the notes, but we can put "Chain Story" as the category selection. That way, when the contest is over, our chain story gets moved into the proper category.

Alright, any suggestion/comments on my proposal?

Chicklet, that all sounds good to me. That way, each of our chapters will be looked at individually for the competition.

Jenny, I'll be more than happy to write Chapter 3, and as Chicklet suggested, the dates for submissions sound good.

I can't wait to read your first chapter. :)

Lou :kiss:
 
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Tatelou said:
Chicklet, that all sounds good to me. That way, each of our chapters will be looked at individually for the competition.

Jenny, I'll be more than happy to write Chapter 3, and as Chicklet suggested, the dates for submissions sound good.

I can't wait to read your first chapter. :)

Lou :kiss:

Ok... I'm game. We do need to decide on a name for the story though. (God... it could go on forever :rolleyes: )

And no, Chicklet. You can use the dungeon too. ;)
 
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Jenny _S said:
Ok... I'm game. We do need to decide on a name for the story though. (God... it could go on forever :rolleyes: )

And no, Chicklet. You can use the dungeon too. ;)

Okay, good, as long as I'm allowed in the dungeon I'm happy.

A name. Ugh.

I've got a corny suggestion:

Murder Mystery Mayhem


:D


Re: Mr. Body -

That's actually what they called him in the movie, right? Did they call him that in the game? We should decide how similar we want the storyline we're writing to follow the "story" of "clue" before we set about disturbing copyrights = )

-Chicklet
 
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Chicklet said:
Okay, good, as long as I'm allowed in the dungeon I'm happy.

A name. Ugh.

I've got a corny suggestion:

Murder Mystery Mayhem


:D


Re: Mr. Body -

That's actually what they called him in the movie, right? Did they call him that in the game? We should decide how similar we want the storyline we're writing to follow the "story" of "clue" before we set about disturbing copyrights = )

-Chicklet

ROFL...
The name is ok, but should it tie to Halloween? If it doesn't I don't really care.

In the game he is called Mr. Body too. As far as where the story goes, I don't really care. If you read "Maltese Penis" it starts out exactly like the Bogart film and diverged from there. That was an affect I used to give the reader a common ground to begin the story. I sort of thought the same for this one.

In the first chapter, there are no references to the game or the movie at all. There is a castle with some rooms and invited guests showing up for a Halloween party sort of like "The haunting of Hill House". After everyone arrives the body is discovered and then it becomes any kind of mystery you see fit.

Does that answer your question? Chicklet, I'm pretty easy about this. You can take it in any direction you want.
 
Ok...

I think everyone has the draft of Part 1 in their PM Box now. I held this to 1000 words, although there is a longer version of about 1800.

This draft needs some polishing but the gist of the thing is there so Chicklet will not be held up for the next part.

I believe I included everyone and got the costumes right.

Comments? Suggestions?

Wicked Witch Jenny won't turn you into a toad for them. ;)
 
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Jenny _S said:
I think everyone has the draft of Part 1 in their PM Box now. I held this to 1000 words, although there is a longer version of about 1800.

This draft needs some polishing but the gist of the thing is there so Chicklet will not be held up for the next part.

I believe I included everyone and got the costumes right.

Comments? Suggestions?

Wicked Witch Jenny won't turn you into a toad for them. ;)

I'd love to see the 1800 words versiion, cause I'm wondering where the sex went to;) :kiss:
otherwise loved it
 
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sirhugs said:
I'd love to see the 1800 words version, cause I'm wondering where the sex went to;) :kiss:
otherwise loved it

LMAO... this is really meant to be an introduction. I think the sex will come along ok (sans necrophilia or bestiality) :D

Edit: Thinking about that comment. I can insert a scene at the very beginning between Mr. Body and Jenny before the party begins. But that seems rather gratuitous.
 
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Jenny _S said:
LMAO... this is really meant to be an introduction. I think the sex will come along ok (sans necrophilia or bestiality) :D

Edit: Thinking about that comment. I can insert a scene at the very beginning between Mr. Body and Jenny before the party begins. But that seems rather gratuitous.

Hmm... what about this:

The party was off to a grand start. Chaam was trying to entice LustyRusti into the cellar dungeon to show her some interesting equipment he’s found. Lusty wasn’t interested and suspected Chaam might have been overly interested in her lamb anyway. Overlord sat on the bar drinking Johnny Walker telling stories and jokes. BooMarangue mingled and laughed while being perused by Sirhugs.

Jenny, being the cheap drunk she is, danced on the bar and did a long, slow striptease. As her bodice opened and her dress dropped to the bar at her feet a pink nipple peek out over her lace bra. Sirhugs, without realizing what he was doing, tried to stuff a one-dollar bill into the waistband of her panties. This drew stares from the other guests and Sirhugs self-consciously stuffed the dollar back in his pocket.
 
I am blown away! I usually get a letter when someone posts here- it's 9:35pm and I'm just now reading almost 2 pages! I'm waaay behind!

I'm new at this... so I'll follow... just a few minor things. I'd rather be Mrs. Danvers than Madame du Farge...she repulses me. and I would like to be like Chap 8 or 9 or beyond to give me time to learn the style/method etc. I'm getting both images of tongue and cheek, and a serious murder thingy... which way are we goin?

My costume is a rusty looking plain high necked black velvet gown... whats underneath can come later. Hair up in a prim knot... for now!

Please Jenny- keep me caught up- I don't want to drag it down and ruin it!

This is gonna be fun!... Hell! It is already!
 
Name questions:

Do we have to keep calling the characters by their long names? I think I'd rather make NSUDemon Demon, for instance, and Jenny_S Jenny...after we state who they are on lit, that is. The initial introduction, and then shortened names? Just cause it'd probably read better.

Tense Questions:

Your first chapter is in present tense. I will *not* write in present tense and usually I click back when I get to a present tense story. Is it okay for all of us to use different tenses and perhaps different POV's for our chapters? I'd like to use 1st person past tense.

Mystery Questions:

Do we know who murdered Mr Body? Do we know why? What exactly do we know, because everyone should know before we write, to make sure everything fits together.

Editor Questions:

Can someone edit each chapter?

-Chicklet

(on my way to read through Jenny's chapter and start ideas for my own)
 
Chicklet said:
Name questions:

Do we have to keep calling the characters by their long names? I think I'd rather make NSUDemon Demon, for instance, and Jenny_S Jenny...after we state who they are on lit, that is. The initial introduction, and then shortened names? Just cause it'd probably read better.

Tense Questions:

Your first chapter is in present tense. I will *not* write in present tense and usually I click back when I get to a present tense story. Is it okay for all of us to use different tenses and perhaps different POV's for our chapters? I'd like to use 1st person past tense.

Mystery Questions:

Do we know who murdered Mr Body? Do we know why? What exactly do we know, because everyone should know before we write, to make sure everything fits together.

Editor Questions:

Can someone edit each chapter?

-Chicklet

(on my way to read through Jenny's chapter and start ideas for my own)

Ok... The tense on Chapter One is now PAST. The POV doesn't make any difference that I can think of. It changes in novels from chapter to chapter so why not here? Use whatever you want.

As far as the names, we hadn't talked about that. I continued with the long names until it could be brought up and there was a concensus. (Edit) We would need a list of shortened names so they remain consistant throughout.

Who murdered Mr. Body. Isn't that the point? I'm not sure who did. My thoughts are either Jenny killed him, or he isn't really dead and the whole thing is a joke. What is your take on it?

Editor: That should be a yes. I have an editor I use (which I haven't on this yet). Do you mean one editor to edit all the chapters or have each chapter edited by someone? Either way works for me.

I think it most important to have a concensus with everyone as to how the story moves from chapter to chapter so it comes to a logical ending.

Comments?
 
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Jenny, I just read your first draft, and I really like it. It's a great introductory piece for the rest of the story. I love the tone you've set, pretty tongue in cheek, in a very sexy way. SirHugs mentioned the lack of sex in it, I don't think it is neccessary in the first chapter. However, you did hint at sexiness, which you did well. I like that little addendum paragraph that you put in this thread; the one with Jenny doing a striptease on the bar.

The length is good, but I would love to see the longer version.


Originally posted by Chicklet
Name questions:
Do we have to keep calling the characters by their long names? I think I'd rather make NSUDemon Demon, for instance, and Jenny_S Jenny...after we state who they are on lit, that is. The initial introduction, and then shortened names? Just cause it'd probably read better.


I agree, perhaps it would be good to put a list up on here; a definitive version of everyone's shortened names.

Tense Questions:
Your first chapter is in present tense. I will *not* write in present tense and usually I click back when I get to a present tense story. Is it okay for all of us to use different tenses and perhaps different POV's for our chapters? I'd like to use 1st person past tense.


I'm happier with past tense, also. I notice Jenny has ammended her first chapter, I'd like to read this version.

Mystery Questions:
Do we know who murdered Mr Body? Do we know why? What exactly do we know, because everyone should know before we write, to make sure everything fits together.


As Jenny said, I don't think it is that important that we really know. If we do want to discuss possible endings we should do it through PMs, I'd hate to post any potential spoilers on here. I do like the idea of it all being a joke, but an actual murder mystery might be more gripping.

Editor Questions:
Can someone edit each chapter?


Here's where I get pompous and pretentious. ;)
I'd be more than happy to do all of the editing. I'm not a volunteer editor at Lit, but I do edit a lot of stories for others. I myself don't use an editor, maybe it is a bit precious of me, but I like my stories to stay as I write them. I edit my own stuff, until I'm happy with it. I do get a good friend of mine to proofread them for me, but that's just to check for any anomolies in the spelling. Jenny, I don't mean to shun your editor, I'm sure he/she does a good job for you, but I'd much rather do it myself.


Chicklet, I can't wait to read your chapter. Not that I'm being pushy or anything, but I'm itching to get started on mine. ;)

Lou :kiss:
 
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Jenny _S said:
Hmm... what about this:

The party was off to a grand start. Chaam was trying to entice LustyRusti into the cellar dungeon to show her some interesting equipment he’s found. Lusty wasn’t interested and suspected Chaam might have been overly interested in her lamb anyway. Overlord sat on the bar drinking Johnny Walker telling stories and jokes. BooMarangue mingled and laughed while being perused by Sirhugs.

Jenny, being the cheap drunk she is, danced on the bar and did a long, slow striptease. As her bodice opened and her dress dropped to the bar at her feet a pink nipple peek out over her lace bra. Sirhugs, without realizing what he was doing, tried to stuff a one-dollar bill into the waistband of her panties. This drew stares from the other guests and Sirhugs self-consciously stuffed the dollar back in his pocket.


I love it, but I think I would discretely inhale the odour first..... then later, the temptation to taste it might be too great.
 
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sirhugs said:
I love it, but I think I would discretely inhale the odour first..... then later, the temptation to taste it might be too great.


LMAO...
 
Lou,
I agree with the things you say. The names are a pain in the butt to type too. This is something that can be fixed along the way during the editing process.

Alternative endings are fine with me. I threw those two out for discussion. If anyone has other endings. We should look at them in PM with the members doing the writing.

I believe Kenzie will do a chapter too, BTW.

I've already changed the tense to past. I agree that present tense is much too hard to maintain.

As far as an editor I don't care who does the editing. It does make sense to have someone in the group doing that job. Bringing an outside editor up to speed and keeping him/her informed simply adds another dimension to the job.
 
Do we have to keep calling the characters by their long names? I think I'd rather make NSUDemon Demon, for instance, and Jenny_S Jenny...after we state who they are on lit, that is. The initial introduction, and then shortened names? Just cause it'd probably read better.

Well you can't call me Dani, cuz that's the sweet side of Mrs. Danvers- who no longer exists- just plain 'Danvers' is ok w/ me...

and as far as the editing, I don't care. I do my own, and I edit some here at Lit, but if anyone sees something not right I don't mind a "hey, Boo..." be glad of it, actually!
 
BooMerengue said:
Well you can't call me Dani, cuz that's the sweet side of Mrs. Danvers- who no longer exists- just plain 'Danvers' is ok w/ me...

and as far as the editing, I don't care. I do my own, and I edit some here at Lit, but if anyone sees something not right I don't mind a "hey, Boo..." be glad of it, actually!

This raises another question. Do you really want to expose your real name in the story? Also, would the reader identify "Danvers" with BooMarangue? I can see a shortened version of the screen names, ie., BooMarangue becomes Boo. But I'm not sure real name exposure is acceptable to everone.

Thoughts?
 
Jenny _S said:
This raises another question. Do you really want to expose your real name in the story? Also, would the reader identify "Danvers" with BooMarangue? I can see a shortened version of the screen names, ie., BooMarangue becomes Boo. But I'm not sure real name exposure is acceptable to everone.

Thoughts?

real name exposure? Mrs. Danvers is the evil housekeeper from Rebecca, by duMaurier. Thats who I'm dressed as... I'm confused... but its your story and I have never played it before so I leave it up to you! The reader- down the road- is probably not gonna know who Boo is anyway... who really does even now? lmao at this thought... would you call Madame deFarge Boo?? "Boo DeFarge" rolling.............:eek:
 
BooMerengue said:
real name exposure? Mrs. Danvers is the evil housekeeper from Rebecca, by duMaurier. Thats who I'm dressed as... I'm confused... but its your story and I have never played it before so I leave it up to you! The reader- down the road- is probably not gonna know who Boo is anyway... who really does even now? lmao at this thought... would you call Madame deFarge Boo?? "Boo DeFarge" rolling.............:eek:

Well, you didn't offer me a costume so I picked Madame LaFarge (from Tale of Two Cities) at random. It can be changed as you wish.
 
Jenny _S said:
Well, you didn't offer me a costume so I picked Madame LaFarge (from Tale of Two Cities) at random. It can be changed as you wish.

It doesn't matter- I'm gonna have to bow out anyway... theres just too much goin on here for me to commit... but I'm reading! lol Can't wait to see!
 
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