Self-rightous SOB

Quick outline

Lexium;

Here is an outline I pulled together quickly. Let me know what you think. Dissect it, move it around; do what you want with it until you have a story you'd get excited reading.

-T
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Start:

Incestuous orgy scene in backyard. Nighttime. Use this to set tone the story, to establish that the backyard is supposed to be a safe, private place. Introduce main characters, the attitude and the atmosphere. Drop hint that all is not as it seems.

Key point 1:

Daughter has sex in backyard with friend. The neighbour spies on them. Mother comes home, sees boy leaving. Mother and daughter talk about it. Everything is cool; this is nothing out of the ordinary here. Daughter confides in mother that she felt strange this time, as if something was wrong. They attribute it to being the first time they've ever done something like that in broad daylight.

Key point 2:

Daughter loses her babysitting job. The neighbour does not want a slut hanging around her children. The daughter tells her mother what happened. Apparently the next-door neighbour has been spying on them.

Key point 3:

Mother confronts the next-door neighbour. The husband is friendly, but the wife is not. She reveals that she knows all about the sick and twisted things that her daughter likes to do after school, and she has proof. She tells the mother to get the hell off of her property.

Key point 4:

Rumours spread like wildfire through the close-knit community. Mother's children become ostracized. It is hell on them all. The postman, a friend of the mother's, tells her about all of the nasty things he's been hearing about her family. Most people do not believe the neighbour, but she is adamant. The longer she keeps on talking, the more people will be swayed.

Key point 5:

The mother has a plan, and it involves the postman. The neighbour has had a crush on him for many years. The mother wants him to seduce her in a place where they can be videotaped. The neighbour is homely, and the postman definitely is not interested. The mother knows that the postman is interested in her daughter and in her. They strike up a bargain; both the daughter and the mother will service him in return for seducing the neighbour. The postman remains unswayed. The daughter and mother have a wild sex session with him and each other, and tell him that this session was only an appetizer. The main course will be served after the setup goes through. The postman can't wait to get started.

Key point 6:

Over the next month the postman manages to seduce the neighbour. They have sex often in various locations. It is hard to get good film footage. (Drag this out -- rising tension.) Eventually, the neighbour becomes confident enough so that she goes to the postman's home. He is a kinky bastard and has set up his bedroom as a mini studio. The mother manages to get prime footage taken from behind a two-way mirror.

Key point 7:

The tapes are circulated to key people in the community. Rumours are all around. The neighbour still denies them. Her husband suspects her of infidelity but has no proof. The neighbour turns on the mother and her children, sure that they had something to do with the rumours being spread. They plead ignorance. The neighbour reveals that she knows about the incestuous nature of the family's backyard outings. She has been spying on them for a very long time, apparently. She threatens to go to the local newspaper with this if the rumors don't stop. The mother admits nothing, but is very worried. (The stakes have just been raised.) Meanwhile, the neighbour has begun to like regular, kinky sex. She needs this now. She looks forward to her meetings with the postman every third day.

Key point 8:

The neighbour craves the postman's cock. On the mother's instruction, he denies it to her. The neighbour is like a junkie going into withdrawal. She needs rough sex! Her husband at home doesn't cut it. Things are too hot for her in the neighborhood, so she has to go elsewhere for her fix. She starts crossing town, and going to some of the seedier establishments. There, she buys sex. The mother has been following her around, assuming that she might do something of this sort. She has a camera with her to take pictures. She eventually convinces the postman to make arrangements to meet the neighbour at a certain biker bar on the Eastside of town. The neighbour is ecstatic, and doesn't think that anything is amiss. When she gets there, the postman is present along with 10 of his buddies. They close the bar for the night, and get ready to party. (Big rape scene on the pool table. Total use, all three holes, plus hands. Keep trauma high, but level of violence low.) The mother is in the projection booth recording the whole thing for posterity. She is particularly happy when the neighbour stops screaming and crying and starts moaning and groaning. She starts enjoying what's happening to her. She goes from being a used hole to a woman being thoroughly fucked and enjoying it. It's a really hot video.

End:

The next day the mother pays the neighbour a visit. She talks to the husband. The story the woman is putting around is that she was sexually assaulted. The mother wishes to see her and to express her condolences. She goes up and talks to the neighbour. The neighbour is in the file moved. She threatens to ruin the mother and her family. She issuer that the mother sent her up, and the postman was get on it. She threatens to have the postman arrested and the bar shut down. At this time the mother removes a videotaped from her purse and slide to to the neighbour. She tells the neighbour to watch it at her own convenience, but she recommends to wait until her husband is out of the house. With that she turns and leaves.

The neighbour calls on the mother a few hours later. She is totally defeated. She wants to know what the mother wants in return for her silence. The mother has a few ideas:

1 -- Show the mother how she's been spying on them in their backyard so they can fix the problem. She wants to know where the hole is.

2 -- Go around to the neighbours and tell them that she was lying about the mother and her daughter. If she can spread rumours, she can rectify this situation.

3 -- Apologize to her daughter. She has been really hurt. That apology is to take place in front of the mother of the children the daughter used to babysit for.

4 -- She is to submit to a good old-fashioned spanking delivered by each member of her family. They are the ones who had been hurt by all of this, and they are the ones that will take it out on her ass, literally. Of course, it is to be filmed.

If the neighbour does not agree to this, the digital video that has been taken will end up cut, edited, and broadcast via broadband over the Internet within half an hour. The tape is of very good quality, and they can make a hefty bit of change from selling it to streaming web sites. The neighbour agrees to all of the terms.

The family lines up, ready to have at her. The mood in the backyard is festive. Start of another family outing. The postman arrives, sees the neighbour bent over, and shudders. He has seen enough of that fat ass to last him 10 lifetimes. He has come for his main course; the mother and daughter aren't stingy. They give him an extra large helping.
 
Lexium;

A few notes about the previous outline:

1- Sex scenes can be stuffed wherever appropriate. I recommend 1 every three points.

2- Change whatever elements don't suit you.

I've been calling the story "A Neighbourhood Watched," kind of a twisted slant on those benign Neighbourhood Watch programs. Other ideas include the following:

A Mother's Revenge
A Mother's Wrath
Do Unto Others ...
Revenge is Suite
The Postman Delivers Revenge
Special Delivery
You Got Mail
A Neighbour's Mistake
The High Cost of Nosiness
A Queen Deposed


You see where I'm going with all of this. Anyway, that's it for me tonight. I'm looking forward to getting your feedback!

Regards,

-T
 
That made me feel alot better, just reading it. I really would like you to write it out. It fantastic. Exactly what I needed to hear. Please write the story.

BTW, my daughter and I have helped each other out in times of need, but we don't normally go at it. I'm interested in hearing from women, who like myself, have incestuous relationships without the on set of violence. I've been raped before, but not physically hurt. Rape is about hate, not about sex. I was lucky, and did nothing but tell him no, and to stop. I didn't tell the police, but I did tell my friends, who hurt him badly. I thought I would enjoy seeing him hurt, but I didn't like it at all. That's why I shy away from the violent stuff. You can have rough sex, and even cause a bruse or two without it being hateful.
 
lexium said:
That made me feel alot better, just reading it. I really would like you to write it out. It's fantastic. Exactly what I needed to hear. Please write the story.

BTW, my daughter and I have helped each other out in times of need, but we don't normally go at it.

<SNIP!>

I've been raped before, but not physically hurt. Rape is about hate, not about sex. I was lucky, and did nothing but tell him no, and to stop. I didn't tell the police, but I did tell my friends, who hurt him badly. I thought I would enjoy seeing him hurt, but I didn't like it at all. That's why I shy away from the violent stuff.

Okay, My G/g action stays. Now, seeing how you feel about rape, do you want me to change the story resolution? If the 11 on 1 rape scene at the end disturbs you, I'll try to find some other way of wrapping things up. I kept the postman idea, as you can see!

How about names? Do you have a set of names and descriptions for me, or do I choose the minimalist approach?

What do you think of the ending?

-T
 
I've been calling the story "A Neighbourhood Watched," kind of a twisted slant on those benign Neighbourhood Watch programs. Other ideas include the following:

A Mother's Revenge
A Mother's Wrath
Do Unto Others ...
Revenge is Suite
The Postman Delivers Revenge
Special Delivery
You Got Mail
A Neighbour's Mistake
The High Cost of Nosiness
A Queen Deposed

Lexium;

What title do you prefer for the story?

-T
 
You can keep the rape scene. I've had requests from readers for that sort of thing. Remember that the woman would be sore after the gangbang. The girl-girl thing is fine. You could use it also as away the mother consoles her daughter. It sounds like a lot of writting, but I think will be well worth it in the end.
 
lexium said:
You can keep the rape scene. I've had requests from readers for that sort of thing. Remember that the woman would be sore after the gangbang. The girl-girl thing is fine. You could use it also as away the mother consoles her daughter. It sounds like a lot of writting, but I think will be well worth it in the end.

The soreness is why she told her husband she'd been assaulted. No way to hide it.

Still need names and descriptions of the principals, or the go-ahead to avoid using them at all.

Also need a title.

-T
 
I like "A Neighbourhood Watched", but you can call it what you like, just let me know when you're finished. I can work on some other stuff. It really does make me feel better. Who says fantasy isn't real story telling?
 
lexium said:
I like "A Neighbourhood Watched", but you can call it what you like, just let me know when you're finished. I can work on some other stuff. It really does make me feel better. Who says fantasy isn't real story telling?

A Neighbourhood Watched it is. Names and descriptions; yes or no? So far I have "Karen's" name and vitals, her nameless beau's appearance, and "Rob's" name. That's it.

-T
 
lexium said:
You can name them whatever you like.

Saw this AFTER I posted. Sorry 'bout that. Well, I got everything I need. I'm outta here!

G'night.

-T
 
Keep us posted

Tatewaki said:


Saw this AFTER I posted. Sorry 'bout that. Well, I got everything I need. I'm outta here!

G'night.
-T

Hey Tatewaki (and Lexium), this sounds like it will be a great story. As an author and afficianado of bi-incest stories myself, I can't wait to read the story. So please keep us informed as to when it will be posted. (I've subscribed to this thread so I'll get the message...

:devil:

SlyFox

p.s. if you're interested in reading some of my work the url is:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=66423
 
Re: Keep us posted

SlyFox said:
So please keep us informed as to when it will be posted. (I've subscribed to this thread so I'll get the message...

Will-do.

-T
 
lexium said:

I'm pretty sure that I couldn't right this story. I want to go over and rip her eyeballs out. Noisy witch!

I'm a noisy witch? :confused:

It's amazing at one can find when they do a search on their name as a SUBJECT instead of an author. :(

And you thought I'd edit your stories with open arms after reading this?
 
Tiggs said:


I'm a noisy witch? :confused:

It's amazing at one can find when they do a search on their name as a SUBJECT instead of an author. :(

And you thought I'd edit your stories with open arms after reading this?

I did ask for your assistance, but that quote was taken from a description of a story idea. Placing it here would make it appear that I was referring to you personally. I'm not offended by you and have no reason to attact you. I do think it's unfair for you to make that referance. I do think that you are a better writer and that I could benefit from you with you. I'm sure that you are smart enough to know that.

BTW, I saw your pics. You are definately more gusty than me. I would fear exposure, but I did like your pics.

I thought maybe you would PM me back.
 
You think it's unfair that I made what reference? My name was pulled into this thread. I didn't even know it exsisted until early this morning. What did I do that is so unfair? I apologize for thinking your comment was towards me. The context it was in, and the recent flow of conversation made it seem like the "noisy bitch" comment was about me...
 
Tiggs said:
... The context it was in, and the recent flow of conversation made it seem like the "noisy bitch" comment was about me...

Absolutely not. There is nothing to be noisy about on this board. I do like your comments, they make us think a little bit more about our story ideas. That's not being noisy, that's being helpful. The context inwhich the text was extracted was part of a story idea. The witch that I was referring to is my neighbor. I've seen your pictures, so I know you are not her (very nice BTW :) ). She invaded the privacy of my family, and I was really ticked off. Going over the idea for a revenge story made me feel better. BTW, she doesn't know what hit her yet :) Just to let you know.

I can make any comments for you directly. I do think that I can benefit from you. Yes, I'm still asking ;)
 
lexium said:

I can make any comments for you directly. I do think that I can benefit from you. Yes, I'm still asking ;)

:eek: I am sorry I hadn't gotten back to the PM sooner. I quite honestly forgot I had it sitting there since I hadn't had recent notices for PMs. If you'd like to have something edited (are you looking for an opinion on story flow/content, or are you wanting grammar/spelling errors checked?) feel free to mail me at Tiggi77@aol.com. I have MS Word 97 if you wish to mail a document to me, or you can simply copy your story into the body of the e-mail.
 
Lexium;

I'm going to back-burner this story for a bit. I have to get a move on with a couple of other stories I'm doing. Need to finish Synder and Ashe Ch. 2 and 3, as well as Ember and Ashe Ch. 7.

Sorry, but I hope you understand.

Warmest,

-T
 
Do it! I just had one on today called Daddy's Little Dancer. Same type of person you described, businessman, goes to a strip club for a business dinner and runs into his daugther. Short, but kind of fun. My fiancee seemed to be into those kinds of stories(not the incest part of it) so if you do it, let us know.
 
bearlee said:
My fiancee seemed to be into those kinds of stories(not the incest part of it) so if you do it, let us know.

Just a short note to let you know that the story is half done.

-T
 
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