SimonDoom Review Thread

[SimonDoom]

Perhaps @joy_of_cooking could book a review slot in the queue, with the actual story to be specified once you're ready?

That's fine with me.

 

[AG31]

Well, I'd be delighted if you'd critique any one of my stories except the vanilla ones (Idyll, Stairway to Heaven, and Undressing). Use the description to decide which one. None are longer than your limit.

How did I not see this thread???

 

[AG31]

O.K. I'm going to resurrect this, and I'm going to actually do it this time.

To start, I'm going to pick an old Literotica story from the past, which is popular and well-regarded, and which I like, and I'll write about what I think about it and why. I hope by doing so I'll give a taste for how I handle reviews. People can see my story-reviewing philosophy in practice. Showing, not just telling. They can then decide whether they think my review might be worthwhile.

Then I will accept proposals from those who want their stories reviewed. I will promise no more than one review per month. I will start by going back through the list of suggestions I've received and contact those authors and see if they still want the reviews done. I reserve the right to mix up the order rather than adopt a strict "first in first out" system to maximize the interest of the subject matter and also to use my reviews as a way of further explaining my philosophy of how to read stories.

Looking forward to it!!!

 

[joy_of_cooking]

Oh, cool! Yes, put me in and let me know when I'm next up so I can tell you which story. Thanks, @SimonDoom !

 

[ElectricBlue]

I really hope this thread doesn't devolve into a thread of people reviewing Simon's reviews. The guy shouldn't have to justify his every opinion.

Exactly. @SimonDoom has a hard enough time keeping me off his case elsewhere, so in a gentleman's agreement that he doesn't know about yet, this is his "safe place". SimonsReviewWorld +1 .

 

[AG31]

Well, I'd be delighted if you'd critique any one of my stories except the vanilla ones (Idyll, Stairway to Heaven, and Undressing). Use the description to decide which one. None are longer than your limit.

How did I not see this thread???

Here are a few more caveats. The simple one is to please also avoid "An Enigma." I've got problems trying to depict the kind of scuzzy villain I remember from movies like Robin Hood. No sense in re-visiting it at this point. Also avoid "The Recurrence." It's in the pipeline with a new version.

EDIT: Here are the stories I'd like you to review:
https://literotica.com/s/twelve-maxbridge-street (this has more plot/char at the very end)
https://literotica.com/s/vignette-01-2
https://literotica.com/s/vignette-02-3
https://literotica.com/s/submission-132
https://literotica.com/s/after-the-idyll

The other one is that I'm the lady who's been advocating for giving "simple erotica" more artistic respect. If I'm not mistaken, @SimonDoom, you take great delight in interesting plots and well developed characters. So if you spend time critiquing my stories for not having enough plot and character I won't be offended, but you will have wasted your time.

So what am I looking for? Please see my new post on why simple erotica should not be judged on the same criteria as regular fiction: How Obvious!

- I'm looking for feedback on how well I evoke an erotic experience (in this case, of surrender). Many people say that something is not erotic unless you know the MC's personality and their thoughts. (In my stories those would be distractions.) So if that's who you are, no need to comment on that front.

- I'm looking for all the diddley squats.... Are there repeated words? Is something not clear? Does something sound klutzy?

I have gotten lots of useful feedback from people who also said I needed to elaborate on character or plot. So it can be done.

My stories are relatively old (2 to 3 years), but I keep finding ways to improve them. My first is on its 9th version. It's very easy to update on Smashwords. Unless I've accumulated a significant number of fixes, I don't clog up the pipes here on Lit., but very recently I got so much useful feedback for The Recurrence that it's now in the Lit. pipeline for a new version.

So, I can see how you might want to skip me. But I hope you don't.

 

[Bazzle]

Am I stressed that I might be Mr February review? Yes.

 

[FifthEstate]

Simon,
I have always respected your opinion on the forums and while our kinks probably don’t totally align, I’d be hugely appreciative to receive your review of chapter 1 of my most recent series. It’s a an E/V story that has IR themes which are obvious from the title: I Found My Wife’s Black Dildo Pt. 01. It’s received a pretty warm welcome from readers, but I’m curious how someone who doesn’t necessarily have proclivities towards the themes would objectively review it. I know you’re very busy with your own stuff and reviewing others works, but if/when you get to it, I’d really look forward to the feedback.
Fifth