Duleigh
Just an old dog
- Joined
- Dec 12, 2004
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At least they left you a "love letter" My troll jumped on me with a solid 1 before it was up 6 hours without a single word of affection.Ooh I've had my regular hater of my writing complaining that my story was unreadable.
Is it really this bad?
"This is not a contest quality entry. It desperately needs to be proofed and edited. Within a quarter of the way down the first page there were already entire paragraphs full of sentences that aren't sentences, don't make sense, and have baffling punctuation. There are entire exchanges between characters with question marks at the end of each declarative statement leaving the reader to wonder what is going on. I reread the first mess of a paragraph at least three times before giving up and moving on, and the rest of the story is more of the same. It does not read coherently. It makes me wonder if the author's first language is English. It doesn't have to be, of course, but if it isn't, that's only more reason for a set of eyes with a better than tenuous grasp of the English language to proofread this. This story is illegible as it currently stands."
Wow I know I'm no James Patterson, but I thought it an interesting story.
Nice to see the love!
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