What have you posted recently?

Motherfucker! Man, that pissed me off; I have no idea where that slip-up came from.
You were handling a lot in that story though. I liked the allusion of walking the rooms as also a walk through their lives. One comment... I would have put the hallway at the end instead of the start. The juxtaposition of them on the floor as newlyweds and then cutting to him closing the door would have been a coup de grace.
 
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