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The silence,shattered now, they found him.
Writing Exercise (ten words or less)
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Microwave0ven
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Everyone is great. You just don't realize it yet. --"Night at the Museum"
Jeanx2storm
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my words...
Now the sword was his. His soul was another story.
Now the sword was his. His soul was another story.
Jeanx2storm
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scales...
She put lipstick on and tipped the scales of justice.
She put lipstick on and tipped the scales of justice.
Grushenka
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I'm glad to see the thread revived ( 
Stella for the bump), but there are only a couple real stories in all the entries on the last couple of pages. I'm done with criticism, just don't have time (anyone else want to hand out crit or praise?)
It's not an easy exercise.
Recent posters: Look again at your entry and think hard about whether it tells a real story to the reader (vs. what's in your mind).
Stella for the bump), but there are only a couple real stories in all the entries on the last couple of pages. I'm done with criticism, just don't have time (anyone else want to hand out crit or praise?)It's not an easy exercise.
Recent posters: Look again at your entry and think hard about whether it tells a real story to the reader (vs. what's in your mind).
Jeanx2storm
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Morning coffee. Newspaper. He pulled the trigger. Then she called.
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A levels. A first. A doctorate. But no driving licence.
Equinoxe
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I find this to be a wonderful concept for a writing exercise and have been interested in people's examples, though it is clearly very difficult to write a good story in such few words; I am finding it rather difficult to write one, but I tend to be a rather verbose person (it's a grand tradition of Germanic languages, mind you). That said, here is my meagre offering:
I must agree with Hemingway, though, that "For sale: baby shoes, never worn" is the best thing he ever wrote, but that's not necessarily a compliment. Nevertheless, I do think that line is genuinely brilliant, even if I don't think the same holds true for the rest of his oeuvre.
Grew up, left home, came back; it's not the same.
I must agree with Hemingway, though, that "For sale: baby shoes, never worn" is the best thing he ever wrote, but that's not necessarily a compliment. Nevertheless, I do think that line is genuinely brilliant, even if I don't think the same holds true for the rest of his oeuvre.
Grushenka
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I think the exercise might be easier in German what with all those words that are really several phrases put together.Equinoxe said:
Your entry was fine, but the story's not especially interesting or original. Thanks for trying to stick to the rules, though.
Equinoxe
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Grushenka said:I think the exercise might be easier in German what with all those words that are really several phrases put together.
Your entry was fine, but the story's not especially interesting or original. Thanks for trying to stick to the rules, though.
This is true and would also be true in Scandinavian languages. Although, German literature is not known for its brevity (the opening sentence of my current favourite Kafka story is 116 words, I think, in the original).
I agree with you on my entry, actually; it was a story, but such a boring one and one which is really just a proverb of sorts formed into a narrative.
I wanted to respond, though, and it was all that came to mind; I shall have to think of a more interesting story, this is too good of a challenge.
You're welcome.
