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Writing Exercise (ten words or less)

Grushenka said:
Well, you stuck in an ending this time :) . With a ten word limit, why put in a mundane adverb?
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:kiss:

The Monsoons brought her, and took her away again.
 
Stella_Omega said:
The Monsoons brought her, and took her away again.
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Lovely. Love the sound of monsoons with the action. [insert ***gold star*** smilie]
 
Here's my second entry, tried to evoke 'Russian soul'. Can't judge myself, feel free.

Tatiana and the child don’t move. Mother weeps, father reads.
 
Grushenka said:
Here's my second entry, tried to evoke 'Russian soul'. Can't judge myself, feel free.

Tatiana and the child don’t move. Mother weeps, father reads.
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Dostoevskian... :rose:
 
Grushenka said:
Here's my second entry, tried to evoke 'Russian soul'. Can't judge myself, feel free.

Tatiana and the child don’t move. Mother weeps, father reads.
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The contraction makes it eleven if you want to be pedantic about porusski.

The letter falls. Mother weeps. Oblo puts on his boots.
 
gauchecritic said:
The contraction makes it eleven if you want to be pedantic about porusski.
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No, a contraction is one word, and nothing to do with pedantry. Plus I'm the boss here, mate.
gauchecritic said:
The letter falls. Mother weeps. Oblo puts on his boots.
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Derivative (again). Unless you tell me you wrote yours without seeing mine.
 
They were fallen and falling, and all they knew of life was blood and pain and love that dies...

Again, too long, but that's from one of my DF stories. Sums up the whole series in one sentence.
 
Aww, it's a little muff! Genuine Russian mink. I lick.

Rearranged and appropriated as my third entry. :) Oh, OK, co-authored with Stella (my new fella).
 
FallingToFly said:
They were fallen and falling, and all they knew of life was blood and pain and love that dies...

Again, too long, but that's from one of my DF stories. Sums up the whole series in one sentence.
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Um, Ok. But doesn't make me want to read the whole thing. Too many ands; 'fallen and falling' is awkward, more like a tongue twister (and not in a good way :) ).
 
Grushenka said:
No, a contraction is one word, and nothing to do with pedantry. Plus I'm the boss here, mate.Derivative (again). Unless you tell me you wrote yours without seeing mine.
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You go for Russian soul but I'm derivative.

(again) Consistency is all I ask.
 
gauchecritic said:
You go for Russian soul but I'm derivative.

(again) Consistency is all I ask.
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You are a finicky man. Going for a certain style or mood is not derivative. Your last attempt looked as if you were also going for Russian soul, or plainly copying me.

"Consistency is all I ask", how blokey.
 
*drumroll please*

Looking into the garbage she thought, "We don't use condoms."

(As Jim Carrey might say... BRILLIANT!
 
elsol said:
*drumroll please*

Looking into the garbage she thought, "We don't use condoms."

(As Jim Carrey might say... BRILLIANT!
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that's not the end of the story...
 
Stella_Omega said:
that's not the end of the story...
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I'm the kind of writer that likes to let the reader take the story where they would... I know how several of my female friends have reacted to it ;)
 
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