Chain Story - Bathtubs and Broomsticks

[pink_silk_glove]

Check your inboxes, folks.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

It is done. (whew)

 

[StillStunned]

Good luck!

 

[Tio_Narratore]

I went to the chain stories category today to get the latest chapter, and my chapter 1 wasn't there. Anybody know why?

 

[StillStunned]

It's there when I look.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Yes, it is there.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Be so kind as to send me a link to your list; it still doesn't show for me.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Never mind. I found it from the main page. When I went through my profile page it didn't show up. Thanks.

 

[AlinaX]

All chapters listed here:
https://www.literotica.com/authors/AlinaX/lists?listid=21258096

 

[AlinaX]

Ch. 4 up tomorrow.

 

[AlinaX]

~ (scowling at 1-star vote) No Merry Christmas for you, cruel anon! ~

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Mine was at 4.8ish with 7, 8 and 9 votes ... the 10th vote bombed it to 4.4. : P My other story got hit from 4.48 to 4.44 too. Judging by the timing, it was probably kelliezgirl but who cares?

 

[Erozetta]

Taking this in a different direction, I'm about 6,500 words into my chapter.

 

[Erozetta]

Not even a draft, just an idea:

I wanted to link back to this post because I think I'm gonna end my chapter where this scene could potentially begin, and I really like this "just an idea" scene.

 

[Erozetta]

Document updated in blood red with the roughest of first drafts.

I can tell you right now I'm gonna need help de-Americanizing speech.

And I wrote it 99% on my phone, so there might be wrong words in addition to misspelled words.

 

[StillStunned]

Sorry it's taken so long, but I've been through part and added some comments. I'll try and do more later this week.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

I'm a bit busy now, but I'll read and comment later this week.

 

[Erozetta]

I'm a bit busy now, but I'll read and comment later this week.

Hold off until the weekend. I should have the updated version up by then.

 

[StillStunned]

Hold off until the weekend. I should have the updated version up by then.

One thing that struck me when I was reading that there's an awful lot of exposition to begin with. Obviously readers will be more tolerant going into Chapter 5, but I'm wondering whether even a line or two of dialogue at the start might add a bit more life. Even just a simple one-two between Lucy and a random crew member.

 

[Erozetta]

I am not going to have the first revision up today. Should have it up by Monday.

 

[Erozetta]

I didn't say *which* Monday... (document updated)

 

[StillStunned]

I didn't say *which* Monday... (document updated)

All Mondays are the same. That's why feel so endless.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

 

[StillStunned]

I'm afraid I won't be able to give any feedback any time soon. I've just finished beta-reading 13k words for someone else, and on top of my professional editing that's left me pretty drained for now.

 

[AlinaX]

I'm working through it in, um, fits and spurts... and being my usual annoying self in the comments.