Chain Story - Bathtubs and Broomsticks

[StillStunned]

I was making up an imaginary confabulation so as not to offend any real Duchesses. I had considered Lady Godiva, but that would have been too obvious on an erotic literature site.

Also about six centuries too early.

 

[AlinaX]

There isn't currently a Duchy of Newcastle, so go with that.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Also about six centuries too early.

I thought we were dealing with the undead here; didn't you know that Godiva (God-Diva) was really an immortal vampire princess?

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Need to get to the castle and start shooting. ~check

Need to get Lucy (and Mina) into the mix with the cast (Lucy needs some sort of plan). ~check (wonderful scene for this, very happy)

Need to establish Adamir and how he works. ~check

Need to strengthen the bond/wavelength between Lucy and Mina. ~ check

Need to work with the discontinuity established of a crescent and a full moon on the same night. ~check (all good)

Want a strong opening hook. ~check (I think)

Need to get some sex in, three chapters in, the readers want some sex. ~ch-ch-check! (starts with het sex and ends with girl sex, although i need to figure out the details of the girl sex)

 

[AlinaX]

That's a lot of checks for a Slovak setting...

 

[StillStunned]

Need to work with the discontinuity established of a crescent and a full moon on the same night. ~check (all good)

Did I screw up in my chapter?

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Did I screw up in my chapter?

She paused by a tall window and looked out across the rolling countryside. Although it was light inside, outside the sky was midnight blue, with a crescent moon balanced on the horizon. The stars seemed impossibly bright and close, like white pinholes against the dark.

The uniformed woman placed the trolley in the limo's boot, then moved to stand beside the director. Adamir was looking at the sky, the ruins, the crescent moon, holding his hands up as if to frame pictures.

Four chimes carried across the cold air, followed by a slow, sonorous count to twelve. Midnight. Far overhead, the new moon ventured a glance through a gap in the clouds before hurrying off into hiding again.

Crescent and new (not full sorry) on the same night I believe. I wasn't sure if that was intentional (since there are some elements of magic going on here) so I went with the magic angle.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

That's a lot of checks for a Slovak setting...

(facepalm)

 

[StillStunned]

Crescent and new (not full sorry) on the same night I believe. I wasn't sure if that was intentional (since there are some elements of magic going on here) so I went with the magic angle.

Well, it's not *entirely* new, because then it wouldn't be visible at all. I pictured it all along as a sliver of a crescent, perhaps 12-24 hours after new.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Well, it's not *entirely* new, because then it wouldn't be visible at all. I pictured it all along as a sliver of a crescent, perhaps 12-24 hours after new.

I see. Well how I have it makes a great scene (at least I think) that ties in chapter 1 as well. I'll post it in a few days and y'all can have at it.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Well, it's not *entirely* new, because then it wouldn't be visible at all. I pictured it all along as a sliver of a crescent, perhaps 12-24 hours after new.

Reminds me of a line from a bit of doggerel I once wrote about a dead poet:

". . .
And still searched for a rhyme,
While in peace he rest,
That would be so sublime
As to liken her breast
To the nearly-full moon.
. . . "

 

[pink_silk_glove]

I'm up to about 4k and I'm quite liking it. Mina is also taking shape and I'm getting fun ideas for her. I had made plot notes that had Lucy driven to get the story and pulling excited Mina along with her, but after skimming through the previous chapters, I realized that Lucy should be more nervous and Mina is the confident adventurous one barging ahead and getting them into trouble. Now it works much better.

The logistics are all there. I just have to flesh out a couple more scenes. I think the first draft will weigh in between 6k and 7k. Barring disaster I should have it ready by next weekend.

Oh yeah, and I think I'm adding a third sex scene.

The important thing is that the plot really does move.

 

[AlinaX]

Thanks for the update! So excited...

 

[StillStunned]

Looking forward to reading it!

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Eagerly awaiting your chapter with unapostrophied bated breath!

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Hit a speed bump last nite. Hard drive died. HUGE relief this morning through help of my bro on the phone, managed to recover my data (fist pump) but now have to re-install my OS on new hard drive.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

It's good to hear you have a new "hard drive" to inspire your erotic writings. Have fun inserting your "hard drive" into the right "slot".

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Up to 7.5k. Just have one paragraph that I'm struggling with in wardrobe, and then I have to write the final sex scene which I have notes for. Then the draft will be ready for final edits.

I shouldn't bother telling you this. I'm such a tease. : P

 

[Tio_Narratore]

We want sex acenes! And we want them now!

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Mina's dialog is the best.

"That redhead is so hot!" Mina leaned close and whispered into her ear.

"Not now, Mina," Lucy hissed back.

"She actually makes me wanna sub. Not many girls make me do that."

"Stop it!"

She has a stud on her tongue," she winked.

"Mina!"

"Wut?"

"You're being a complete and total little strumpet."

"Why thanks," she bubbled.

 

[StillStunned]

If it's the same redhead as in my chapter, then yes, she's hot!

 

[AlinaX]

I was listening to a History Hits podcast about Bond Girls and they talked about how red hair was reserved for villains.

ETA: Betwixt The Sheets, 11/4/23 w/ Dr Lisa Funnell

 

[StillStunned]

It's a classic trope. Perhaps it's because redheads get so fed up of people teasing them, they just turn against society.

 

[Erozetta]

It's a classic trope. Perhaps it's because redheads get so fed up of people teasing them, they just turn against society.

It's 'cause our fuse comes pre-lit.

 

[StillStunned]

My wife used to have a T-shirt that said "God gave me red hair as a warning to expect trouble".