Chain Story - Bathtubs and Broomsticks

[Omenainen]

I live in a time zone that lets me observe the early hours of my stories going live. I’ve never even made it to hot with straight 5’s

 

[StillStunned]

I'm one hour behind you. I've seen it twice: this chain story chapter (which took several days, if I remember correctly), and Pas de Trois, which got to something like 23 5*-votes before the first 4* dropped in.

It's thoroughly nerve-wracking, though. You just sit there waiting for that one score that isn't a 5, and when it comes you feel awful.

 

[AlinaX]

I had a final chapter that sat on 5 for about a year, but only 20 votes.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Some years ago I found myself becoming more concerned with scores and moved to writing privately for fun and commissions. This is the first story I've published here in quite a few years. I'm reasonably pleased with my score, but even more pleased with the chapter myself.

 

[AlinaX]

I've wanted to write a Bathory story for years, but never found a way to do the subject justice until this group effort kicked off.

 

[Erozetta]

I've wanted to write a Bathory story for years, but never found a way to do the subject justice until this group effort kicked off.

Same.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

I've wanted to write a Bathory story for years, but never found a way to do the subject justice until this group effort kicked off.

And I'm pleased to be part of the group effort. Thanks to all for making it possible.

 

[StillStunned]

I've wanted to write a Bathory story for years, but never found a way to do the subject justice until this group effort kicked off.

She was a fascinating character, that's for sure, in a fascinating period of history.

 

[Plathfan]

The phrase ‘bated breath’ goes back to Shakespeare, possibly earlier.

Shakespeare coined the phrase in The Merchant of Venice (Act I, Scene III)

With bated breath and whispering humbleness
Say this: “Fair sir, you spet on me on Wednesday last;

 

[AlinaX]

~ (holds tongue) ~

 

[Plathfan]

I have given suck, and know
How tender ’tis to love the babe that milks me.

 

[lovecraft68]

Say this: “Fair sir, you spet on me on Wednesday last;

So Shakesepeare is the originator of Hawk Tua?"

 

[pink_silk_glove]

So I have about 1000 words. Don't let the low count fool you, it's tons of notes and a couple of semi-fleshed scenes. I have a pretty strong outline and I have good scenes in my head.

I have a question. What might Lucy's role in the movie be? A servant? A political rival? An Advisor? A nun? A vampire slayer? Anything else? It doesn't really matter to me, but what sparks the imagination to help the next writer(s) take it further?

 

[Erozetta]

So I have about 1000 words. Don't let the low count fool you, it's tons of notes and a couple of semi-fleshed scenes. I have a pretty strong outline and I have good scenes in my head.

I have a question. What might Lucy's role in the movie be? A servant? A political rival? An Advisor? A nun? A vampire slayer? Anything else? It doesn't really matter to me, but what sparks the imagination to help the next writer(s) take it further?

I think the original thought was a servant? Or at least that's what I pictured for the honey scene.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

I think the original thought was a servant? Or at least that's what I pictured for the honey scene.

A vampire hunter disguised as a servant? :0

 

[Erozetta]

A vampire hunter disguised as a servant? :0

I can absolutely work with that.

 

[StillStunned]

Is there a role that Adamir would cast her in for her English accent?

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Perhaps a "gift" from the Duchess of Stoke-upon-Tyne to a sister noble?

 

[AlinaX]

Don't mess my head like that.

 

[StillStunned]

Young Englishwoman whose father settled in the area after service in the Austrian Empire (to add a link to "Carmilla"). Fallen on hard times after her father's death, and is taken into service by the Countess as a lady-in-waiting.

 

[AlinaX]

There used to be a Duke of Newcastle, but not currently. Margaret Cavendish was a sci-fi author as well.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Which way would you prefer I mess up your head?

Is this better?

Blessé me Mither fer I have grinned. It’s bin a forthright of ages and aeons since me last confusion, end long I’ve bin led down the primrosest path tween devilfish and their deeperbluesea.

Yea, 13 times hath that audacious Ausustrian girl dared me heed the longpast participles of her audeamus et gaudeamus and risk readying meself for the sin and din of battled sexes reviberating in untolden measures of unfolden pleasures when thighs will be undone. And yes, me trice-holied Mither, it was meself who did the dark deeds in thought and word and meself alone who bends in blame while yet inflamed by her sways and bends. Mea culpa, mea culpa, mea maxwellhouse cuppa, and by Java! By Joe! I’ll take her in tow to the theater’s back row at the end of the show to atone her with a very-firm-purpose of Amen-meant as we strive and scrive and shrive for a simultumultuous organasum!

And what then, Mother-confessor, wouldst thou have of penisance from me, a most denoted pairisonher?

 

[AlinaX]

Which way would you prefer I mess up your head?

You can have Stoke-on-Trent or Newcastle upon Tyne (or Newcastle-under-Lyme), but mixing them is almost physically painful.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

I was making up an imaginary confabulation so as not to offend any real Duchesses. I had considered Lady Godiva, but that would have been too obvious on an erotic literature site.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Okay, I think I have a complete outline. I like how I'm handing it off. I'll start fleshing in scenes and see if anything changes. When something looks good enough I'll share it for feedback.

I doubt that I'll have it ready in the 30 day guideline but I've cleared some major hurdles.