My 1st submission

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Thank you Kyrie.
Thank you everyone!
If anyone is interested, I can post the short story/email that inspired this poem?
Or I can keep it for us, alone (the animal and me!)

...this adaptation is the best. Although i am not a poet, i feel this version describes the emotion one is feeling. i personally can't say if this could be tweaked much more and still keep the value that you've managed to convey.

Keep up the work. i've heard it gets easier over time. ~smiles softly~

 

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Submitted - Thank You All!

I submitted this today!
Thank you everyone!

Within

My precious creature, my muse
the words, penned for me
stalk and prey on my vulnerability

They burn my eyes
stirring him to life
tempting my desires release

Awakened by words intent
the other me, the animal within
I must retreat.

With an icy, dark stare
my reflection morphs
he whispers

"Don't listen, the words betray her facade of submission"

He fears my weaknesses
surrendering to flesh, unabashed
taking myself, in your name

His fears are unfounded
I will not displease him
I never have!

We stand alone staring
reflection slowly melts from within
he smiles knowingly, authoritatively

Alone at last; naked, throbbing, tortured.