LIDiver
Thalassophile.
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I’ll check out yours, tell me if u like mine, please.
https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence
https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence
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I really enjoyed it. It was very sexy, but I also liked the realism (“It chafed like a bitch”) and the development of the characters. It’s the same thing I aim for in my writing because it’s much more erotic to know not only what is happening, but why it’s happening and to whom.Hi all!
First time writing a short story (about 9k words) in the BDSM category. Explores the relationship between a domme and a sub on their first encounter.
Mistress Beatrix
Would love to hear some feedback - what worked, what didn't etc...
Had a lot of fun writing it! Hope you enjoy it
I realize this post sounds like pandering!I’ll check out yours, tell me if u like mine, please.
https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence
I'm on the first page. I feel the power of anime coursing through my veins. The aesthetic opening narration about something from everyday life that will tie back into the main theme by the end (I assume). Cutting to an alarm clock and our protagonist reluctantly getting out of bed, getting into uniform, bantering with their wholesome parental figures, heading out the door, and running out Only thing missing is a piece of bread in Jun's mouth and a J-pop OP that starts after he heads out
Thanks, I tend to agree but the site owners seem to have a policy that re-categories things if they have a picture in no matter what category you choose as the author.I believe people are expecting visual art more so than stories accompanied by photographs. Its a shame the two aren’t separated into two different categories.
At least there isn’t a huge drop off in ratings due to the sad trolls in Loving Wives. I learned that the hard way! (“Tory’s Emergence” if you’re interested.)
https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence
I like the premise. Very readable, although finding minor grammatical mistakes isnt my strength. Has a fun little conclusion. Maybe a bit short overall, but that's just my preference. The Daddy thing isnt my bag, but I get it and it didnt detract from the entertainment for meHi everybody! My second story (first under this account) was published here a little while ago, and I would be so grateful if you'd take a look at it.
It's about two good Friends-With-Benefits meeting for a catch-up in a coffee shop after a while apart. With their obvious affection/lust for each other, things quickly escalate .
Just for information, the female friend Erin loves calling the male Narrator "Daddy", but this is NOT an incest story - it's just her pet name for him. (I thought I'd mention it here, in case that's not your thing)
Here's the link: https://literotica.com/s/double-shot-1
Your feedback is honestly really welcome.
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