one of my stories

[openthighs_sarah]

I thought Dad’s Friend was an amazing title. It really made me want to read it as my dad has friends and I thought I could relate to it immediately.

I like to find the little gems within any thread, and I think I've found it here. I'm still not quite sure it was worth it, though.

 

[Guest]

I beg to differ. You posted a request for feedback. If you did not want feedback, you should not have asked for it. Feedback means ripping a story apart, there's simply no other way to discuss the good points or the bad points without doing so.

ok, I'll remember that from now on.
Btw, plausible= believable.

 

[KillerMuffin]

No, plausible and believable are synonyms, not equal. Plausible means that it could happen. A person does not need to believe that something could happen to recognize that it's plausible.

Plausible means apparently true, or likely.
Believable means that it's capable of elicting trust. You can recognize that something is likely to happen or "could happen" without trusting that it did.

So, plausible != believable.

You ought to purchase a dictionary.

Toodles.

 

[Guest]

You ought to purchase a dictionary.

Toodles.

I have one, thanks for your concern. By the way, can you pm me a list of your credentials?

 

[DarlingNikki]

I have one, thanks for your concern. By the way, can you pm me a list of your credentials?

For fuck's sake.

The teacher picked up her chalk and wrote her name on the blackboard for the class.
(Plausible and believable.)

The teacher took off all her clothes and started masturbating in front of the class.
(Plausible but unbelievable.)

The teacher sprouted wings and flew out the window.
(Implausible and unbelievable.)

It's pretty simple, really. My credentials are: Ownership of a Webster's Diction ary and Common Sense.

 

[openthighs_sarah]

I have one

Plausible, but not believable.

 

[SexyChele]

I have one, thanks for your concern. By the way, can you pm me a list of your credentials?

I'm sorry, but this is seriously funny! You've been around here since 1992 and you don't know Muffie's "credentials"?

 

[Guest]

I'm sorry, but this is seriously funny! You've been around here since 1992 and you don't know Muffie's "credentials"?

other than her high post count, no. Where did she graduate from? What degrees?

Sarah, that was almost funny.

Nikki, teachers dont always make sense themselves.

 

[DarlingNikki]

other than her high post count, no. Where did she graduate from? What degrees?

Sarah, that was almost funny.

Nikki, teachers dont always make sense themselves.

So... you feel that someone needs to have graduated from a certain place with certain degrees to know something as simple as the difference between plausible and believable... yet you don't place much faith in teachers. Which is it?

 

[KillerMuffin]

I have one, thanks for your concern. By the way, can you pm me a list of your credentials?

If you want my Literotica credentials, check the awards page. Don't turn green. However, giving you a complete list of credentials implies two things, one, that I want you to know my name, and, two, that I consider you a worthwhile enough writer to prove myself to you.

That's a big fat no on both counts.

I have no interest in getting another stalker. I have no interest in a rude egomaniac like yourself.

There are things that are blindingly obvious without a complete list of credentials. One of them is whether or not someone knows what they're talking about in the field of writing. You either take my word for it or you don't. I could really care less either way. Why not, you might ask? Because, dear boy, you're completely insignificant. You're fun to poke at with sticks because you jump around like an indignant, scalded cat. Other than the amusement factor, you've proven yourself to be a waste of time.

Why would I want to deal with anyone who doesn't have the emotional fortitude to listen to anything but glowing accolades about himself and his writing? Would you want to deal with someone that turns into a boor if you don't tell him how much of a genius he is? Would you want to deal with this person? Of course not. Neither does anyone else.

 

[Guest]

If I may add a few things?

Your paragraphs are most confusing - it is difficult to follow this story because of your writing style.

Dad's Friend

Rebecca had always been precocious and her body developed rapidly. When she was 15, grown men would mistake her for 21.

Young Rebecca had just turned 19. But as her body was lush and well-developed, she was often mistaken (especially by her father's friends) as being much older.

Becko, as her friends called her, dressed conservatively. Its not like she had a choice, her father was strict. He was a lawyer and was concerned about his reputation. He knew she was sexual. She had watched him showering on numerous ocassions.

Rebecca, or Becko, as her friends called her, was under her father's strict control. As a single parent and a successful attorney, he was very concerned about his (and her) reputation.

Lately that worry had dramatically increased. He recently discovered his sweet young daughter had been peeking into the bathroom, watching him shower!

One day while her father was on a fishing trip, Becko took photos of herself in erotic poses. She went through 2 rolls. Since daddy would be gone for the weekend, Becko decided to prance around the house nude. Much to her surprise, her dad told his friend Trevor to stop by and check on things. There was a knock on the front door. It was him.She invited him in, now wearing a skimpy dress.

To Becko's delight (and her father's dismay) business required him to be out of town for the next several days. Worried about his daughter, he asked one of his friends to stop by and check on her during his absence. Trevor, a partner in his firm, immediately agreed.

Alone in the house, Becko pranced happily naked while the stereo blared. Shaking her trim little ass, she touched her hard nipples and kicked up her heels. As she twirled she spied the instant camera in the bookshelf.

Grinning, she grabbed, posed, and fired a pic of her pretty tits. Leaving it on the table to develop, she bent over and flashed a picture of her exposed ass. Next she sat on the couch and spread her legs, taking three more.

She quickly went through one roll and loaded another, dispensing of the second set in rare form. Then, curling up comfortably on the couch, she proudly examined the pics of her naked body.

They sat down and chatted. Becko flirted and revealed some cleavage. She was 19 and craved the attention of an older man.
She noticed a bulge in Trevor's pants. "Would you liek to see pics of me? I developed them yesterday" the young vixen asked.

As she sat, idly toying with her pussy, Becko was startled by the loud knock on the front door. She grabbed a robe, covered herself, and then cautiously opened up to reveal a well-built gentleman.

"Hello Rebecca. Your father asked me to check up on you tonight."

"Oh! Hello Trevor." Her body immediately responded to this handsome older man. "Won't you come in?"

"Well, I really can't stay. I just wanted to make sure you were ok."

"For a moment? I think I'm a little - scared - to be all alone," she lied, managing a wounded look.

Trevor agreed to stay for just a bit, and sat down on the proferred couch. As she left to get him a drink, he couldn't help but notice the pictures scattered across the coffee table. His eyes widened and his cock firmed as he realized they were of a completely naked Rebecca.

God, she was gorgeous. Those firm tits, smooth skin, sweet pussy. Fuck. Finding a picture of her backside he groaned, realizing he'd love to sink his cock into her tight little ass.

(and so on).......how would you end the story?

Feedback is welcome so post away.

This story isn't terminal - it just needs connecting material. It's almost as if you only have an outline - just fill in the naughty details!

 

[Guest]

I'm reading this story again in the cold, cruel light of day this hungover morning.

All it needs is a "wow chicka wowa" soundtrack and it's set for the next great porno flick.

 

[lovechild27]

Ya know..the name Becco is really...weird.

It sounds like a scary clown name.

 

[KillerMuffin]

All it needs is a "wow chicka wowa" soundtrack and it's set for the next great porno flick.

*giggle snort*

 

[Gabriel_Lee]

That De Sade guy sure knows how to get feedback. I'm most impressed, but I don't think I'll be taking notes.

 

[Shugahhhh]

Thanks Sean

This thread is fucking hysterical.

Man, you really don't see anything like this on Lit anymore, do you.

Well, it needed to be bumped for the rookies.

 

[Guest]

This thread is fucking hysterical.

Man, you really don't see anything like this on Lit anymore, do you.

Well, it needed to be bumped for the rookies.

Oh.

I really miss some of those people. (Thanks for the bump.)