EroticOrogeny
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Thanks - quite interesting. A lot more info than could easily get by googling.
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That's pretty much the gist of it, yes.So the way I read it, the mote is like a fervent, arrogant kiss on the lips, in which I share my desires. Then I back off with the glosa, and offer hints, not so much an apology, but a more subtle sense of my passion with kisses to the throat, the neck, the shoulders. Still as fervent, yet not so blatant. Still as passionate, but more of message that lingers in the telling.
^^ i like this guy! he writes it purty...So the way I read it, the mote is like a fervent, arrogant kiss on the lips, in which I share my desires. Then I back off with the glosa, and offer hints, not so much an apology, but a more subtle sense of my passion with kisses to the throat, the neck, the shoulders. Still as fervent, yet not so blatant. Still as passionate, but more of message that lingers in the telling.
oh well in that case i am definitely sitting next to him to crib.That's pretty much the gist of it, yes.
Yep. I'll need surgery.
Never is a long time, we're starting a trend.
Annie, I'll post an example later today, and tomorrow we can start with a simple exercise.
An example. This Glosa was actually the first published poem by Fernando Pessoa, at the tender age of 14, in July 18, 1902.
I am posting the original version along with the translation, because this particular translation takes some liberties with the form.
The original is a perfect example of poetry bound to the motif, with each line of the Mote being repeated as the last line of each of the Glosa stanzas. Additionally, all Glosa stanzas follow the same a-b-a-b rhyme scheme present in the Mote, as well as a consistent meter of eight syllables per line.
The translation is more concerned with transmitting the spirit of the poem than its structure, and therefore it ignores both rhyme scheme and meter. The first line of the Mote appears as the third line of the first Glosa stanza, instead of being the fourth line, and is slightly altered.
[td]--- Mote
Teus olhos, contas escuras,
SĂŁo duas Ave Marias
D'um rosário d'amarguras
Que eu rezo todos os dias.
--- Glosa
Quando a dor me amargurar,
Quando sentir penas duras,
SĂł me podem consolar
Teus olhos, contas escuras.
Deles sĂł brotam amores,
Não há sombras d'ironias
Esses olhos sedutores
SĂŁo duas Ave Marias.
Mas se a ira os vem turvar
Fazem-me sofrer torturas
E as contas todas rezar
D'um rosário d'amarguras.
Ou se os alaga a aflição
Peço p'ra ti alegrias
N'uma fervente oração
Que rezo todos os dias!
------------------------------------------------[/td][td]--- Motif
Your eyes, dark beads,
Are two Ave Marias
In a rosary of sorrows
That I pray every day.
--- Gloss
When suffering embitters me,
When I feel sharp pains,
Only your eyes, dark beads,
Can console me.
From them love alone burst forth,
With no shades of irony.
Those seductive eyes
Are two Ave Marias.
But if anger should cloud them over
Then I suffer tortures
And I pray with all the beads
In a rosary of sorrows.
Or if grief wells up in them
I ask happiness for you
In a fervent prayer
That I pray every day!
------------------------------------------------[/td]
so,The original is a perfect example of poetry bound to the motif, with each line of the Mote being repeated as the last line of each of the Glosa stanzas. Additionally, all Glosa stanzas follow the same a-b-a-b rhyme scheme present in the Mote, as well as a consistent meter of eight syllables per line
If I got all this right, the 8 syllables and abab rhyme is not a constant. Rather, it is that way since the Mote was that way.so,
any number of lines for the mote? (though i'd keep it short, to 4 for now)
8 syllables per line
abab
each consec mote line takes its place as fourth line/last line in the following verses?
if i have that right, then i can see what happens when i try one out
If I got all this right, the 8 syllables and abab rhyme is not a constant. Rather, it is that way since the Mote was that way.
So whatever you write should match the meter and scheme of your chosen Mote.
Amirite, Teach?
Now, to find me a Mote that doesn't make me want to snort sawdust...
ah, ok... (i'm gonna stick with simplest first, i think)
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Also had a trigger here - in this case the title.The Sun revolving on his axis turns,
And with creative fire intensely burns;
Impell'd by forcive air, our Earth supreme,
Rolls with the planets round the solar gleam.
The Copernican System - Thomas Chatterton
The Sun revolving on his axis turns,
Rockets blast off, our craft gravity spurns
with fire and smoke we rise up high in sky
leave earth behind – who said man could not fly.
Explore wide universe our species yearns,
and with creative fire intensely burns.
Ideas, theories set us free
we still find time to take a cup of tea.
Each cup is covered so tea won’t float
to drift here and there in our space boat
impell'd by forcive air, our Earth supreme
so sip on straw conditions here extreme.
In weightless orbit we now must adapt
we move fast yet by gravity trapped
Rolls with the planets round the solar gleam
our trip proceeds as we pursue our dream
*insert laughing track sound*if it's written online, does it make it an e-mote?
I would like each of you - I'll do it as well - to consider this line and, without quoting it, expand on it. Write a short poem, no more than between 6 and 10 lines, that tells a story or tells of a feeling that could be summarized in that one line. Use any form, meter, style or language you prefer. The idea isn't to gloss that line, but to get your brain in gloss mode, explain and expand, create new images out of it.Come live with me and be my love