Shameless plug

[starrkers]

I'll check it out...

Thank ye, kind sir.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Thank ye, kind sir.

I loved it...RVC'd it...but where was the Beaver?

 

[starrkers]

I loved it...RVC'd it...but where was the Beaver?

Hiding in his lodge

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Hiding in his lodge

The slackard...

I have to admit, it was an odd choice for us on the top half of the planet, we are smack in the middle of our summer.

 

[starrkers]

I"ve just got back from a snow fight with the kids.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

I"ve just got back from a snow fight with the kids.

LOL!!, Okay this is going to sound stupid, but I've never thought of Oz getting snow...

 

[starrkers]

Apart from a few selected areas, Oz doesn't.

 

[jomar]

I loved it...RVC'd it...but where was the Beaver?

Did someone mention Beaver? A lovingly restored 1967 DeHavilland Beaver, perhaps?

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Did someone mention Beaver? A lovingly restored 1967 DeHavilland Beaver, perhaps?

A great aircraft....

 

[jomar]

A great aircraft....

I couldn't resist since my current AV is a Beaver (obviously) and it's featured in my new Chase Cooder - Bush Pilot! story.

You've probably been in one if I remember correctly (I know you knew some pilots).

 

[drksideofthemoon]

I couldn't resist since my current AV is a Beaver (obviously) and it's featured in my new Chase Cooder - Bush Pilot! story.

You've probably been in one if I remember correctly (I know you knew some pilots).

A couple of Beavers, a few single Otters, and a lot of Twin Otters...aka Twotters...

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Now I'm confused. I thought this was a Beaver

 

[starrkers]

My first ever poem has posted. It's not long, it's not even erotic. But I'm all kinda proud that I wrote something that I think is OK.
It was inspired by a thread about Hiroshima Day and how so many teenagers have no idea what August 6 commemorates (the atomic bombing of Hiroshima), or when Pearl Harbor was attacked (or why)...
Doomed Youth
Don't feel compelled to read it or anything, but I'd really like to know what you think.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

My first ever poem has posted. It's not long, it's not even erotic. But I'm all kinda proud that I wrote something that I think is OK.
It was inspired by a thread about Hiroshima Day and how so many teenagers have no idea what August 6 commemorates (the atomic bombing of Hiroshima), or when Pearl Harbor was attacked (or why)...
Doomed Youth
Don't feel compelled to read it or anything, but I'd really like to know what you think.

RVC'd it.

A very short, and very moving piece of work. I thought it was very well done.

 

[Varian P]

Allow me to preface by saying I don't 'know' anything about poetry. I seldom read it, because I seldom 'get it.' But, for what little they're worth, my thoughts:

"Doomed Youth" seems a dense, provocative piece. The language is simple, but you succeed in conveying a lot, because your images so perfectly draw on intense, complex, and immediately-accessible human experience.

For me, the power of your poem comes from these lines:

A poppy or a paper crane
...

No trench line nor atomic bomb
...

A picnic and a holiday
...

Their juxtaposition, what they say about each other, works beautifully.
I thought the other lines were weaker, relatively speaking--more abstract, a bit over-explanatory--but still, as a whole, I think it's a strong piece.

-V

 

[starrkers]

Thanks, folks.
Varian, shhh, don't let anyone hear, but I don't often "get" poetry either, that's why I rarely attempt to write it.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Thanks, folks.
Varian, shhh, don't let anyone hear, but I don't often "get" poetry either, that's why I rarely attempt to write it.

Well, in my opinion, your poem was a success, and I hope you try writing some more in the future.

 

[NymzanSusauren]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=717987&page=submissions

 

[sr71plt]

The problems off the top, NS, in doing some comment work on your "story" include (1) that it's not really a "story"--it's already 10 parts into a novel (finished or not? It's hard to comment on part of work) and (2) you say not to bother reading the first part because you're no longer happy with that. You might get fuller response on a shorter piece that you think you are happy with.

With your insistent asking (and because the novel looks interesting from the story blurbs), I normally might take a look at it--but I've just sent off a review of a full novel to an author and am now wrapping up a review of an extra long nonfiction chapter for a publisher--and I'd dearly like to be writing up a couple of story ideas of my own.

The length, not knowing if it's now finished, and your saying not to bother with the beginning of it may be as much an impediment to others here to get involved with it as to me.

It looks like it is mostly being voted very well. So, if you enjoyed writing it, all is probably good with it. Readers haven't commented much on the two novel-length works I have posted here either--and the longer works don't seem to get as many readers as shorter ones do. Yours is probably doing as well as any here.

 

[starrkers]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=717987&page=submissions

If you started your own thread, you might get more reads.
It's kinda buried here in amongst my dross.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

It looks like it is mostly being voted very well. So, if you enjoyed writing it, all is probably good with it. Readers haven't commented much on the two novel-length works I have posted here either--and the longer works don't seem to get as many readers as shorter ones do. Yours is probably doing as well as any here.

I dunno, my Montana Summer series is fairly long, 290,000 words, and attracts a fair number of reads.

 

[sr71plt]

"I dunno, my Montana Summer series is fairly long, 290,000 words, and attracts a fair number of reads."

Ah, then you'd be the perfect one to read NS's novel and provide comments.

(But it's likely that the category is the key factor here. "Montana Summer" is in incest/taboo, which has a vastly greater number of readers than the Gay Male category of NS's novel and one of mine posted to the site. The reader numbers on my one incest/taboo story also monumentally dwarf the reader stats for my stories in any other category.)

 

[drksideofthemoon]

"I dunno, my Montana Summer series is fairly long, 290,000 words, and attracts a fair number of reads."

Ah, then you'd be the perfect one to read NS's novel and provide comments.

(But it's likely that the category is the key factor here. "Montana Summer" is in incest/taboo, which has a vastly greater number of readers than the Gay Male category of NS's novel and one of mine posted to the site. The reader numbers on my one incest/taboo story also monumentally dwarf the reader stats for my stories in any other category.)

I dunno. There has been very little sex in the last few chapters, but it still generates a lot of votes (over 500 for the last chapter) and a lot of email.

I will agree that the incest was the reason for the series initial success, but people seemed to have gotten hooked on the story itself, and the story itself has had to carry the load, and doesn't rely on eroticism.

But, it's been stated before that Montana Summer is an abberation.

(And I apologize to Starrkers for the threadjack)

 

[sr71plt]

Then there's the point that "Montana Summer" has been up for a year longer than NS's and two years longer than my two novels here.

Then again, maybe it's that "Montana Summer" is an unusually terrific story--which comes back to you being a good one to help NS out here if he/she thinks readership/comment/votes need to be bolstered.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Then there's the point that "Montana Summer" has been up for a year longer than NS's and two years longer than my two novels here.

Then again, maybe it's that "Montana Summer" is an unusually terrific story--which comes back to you being a good one to help NS out here if he/she thinks readership/comment/votes need to be bolstered.

Well, yes and no. The first chapter of Montana Summer was posted a little over two years ago. Chapter 15 was posted a couple of months ago, and the final chapter (16) will be submitted sometime tomorrow.