annaswirls
Pointy?
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- Dec 9, 2003
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It was definitely a worth while experience.
Although I did not get my way. I thought our Narcissus was too much of a pussy. I wanted a more manly cynical man to play off of. That was really my only frustration in the process, because my mind was kind of stubborn on that point, I could not imagine the character moping about anyone else but himself, I did not see any person being able to change a personality flaw that great just by being married. I guess I am just a cynical lady, married 17 years and know not a damn thing really changes.
Chip and Ep both put out suggestions, general and specific-- both were very encouraging! Tzara came in with the center stanza break (hence the order) for both. I was very impressed-- especially with the Narc stanza.
I did not think about Ep getting first and last say, that is pretty friggin hilarious!
He also took into consideration our schedules. EO did a great job blending his voice to make it a cohesive poem and Chip is a thinker.
I did make some changes to other's lines in the Narc. poem-- I wanted him to refer to Echo as "she" instead of "you" as he did not believe in afterlife, and Echo referred to Narc as You. I made other suggested changes (to sound less feminine) but I don't think our leader liked them. The half line of mine he changed was fine, I did not care at that point, the fade to gray idea in that line was okay, and I was frustrated with a better way to explain what happened to Narc's idea of perfection without sounding cliche-ish.
At any rate, good job, coach, wish I would have thought to put a penis in there somewhere to get us some shape points. And boobies.
Although I did not get my way. I thought our Narcissus was too much of a pussy. I wanted a more manly cynical man to play off of. That was really my only frustration in the process, because my mind was kind of stubborn on that point, I could not imagine the character moping about anyone else but himself, I did not see any person being able to change a personality flaw that great just by being married. I guess I am just a cynical lady, married 17 years and know not a damn thing really changes.
Chip and Ep both put out suggestions, general and specific-- both were very encouraging! Tzara came in with the center stanza break (hence the order) for both. I was very impressed-- especially with the Narc stanza.
I did not think about Ep getting first and last say, that is pretty friggin hilarious!
He also took into consideration our schedules. EO did a great job blending his voice to make it a cohesive poem and Chip is a thinker.
I did make some changes to other's lines in the Narc. poem-- I wanted him to refer to Echo as "she" instead of "you" as he did not believe in afterlife, and Echo referred to Narc as You. I made other suggested changes (to sound less feminine) but I don't think our leader liked them. The half line of mine he changed was fine, I did not care at that point, the fade to gray idea in that line was okay, and I was frustrated with a better way to explain what happened to Narc's idea of perfection without sounding cliche-ish.
At any rate, good job, coach, wish I would have thought to put a penis in there somewhere to get us some shape points. And boobies.
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