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By CROM!
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@Waeponwifestre thanks for the feedback on my Free Write Speed write poem.
It is advantageous that you didn’t know Solomon Kane. He, as envisioned by Robert E Howard was a 17th century puritan who wandered the world vanquishing evil in all its forms.
‘…shotgun an loincloth” I got some real Ubi sunt vibes from it - like I said I don’t know much about Solomon Kane but it feels like a real loss of identity that transcends the purely physical items mentioned.’
Great insight. I intentionally wanted to set S.K up to achieve exactly that. And build character depth for a longer poem if one eventuates. I really enjoyed reimagining Kane as a washed up loser, loosing it in prohibition error East LA.
On a broader level, I enjoy challenging what is, what isn’t socially acceptable. Including acceptable as poetry. I like messing with societal cultural norms.
It was cool to see that you dialed in on my use of enjambment.
It’s a theory I’ve been working on. Enjambment affords the ability to be inter-lineal connectors. I feel the same way about the ends of lines in a verse. They are opportunities to somehow subliminally drop down. Or at least I am trying to get back to that way of thinking.
(If I knew how to insert enjambments mid line I’d do that with my Lit poems).
Grammatical features also interest me from a experimentalist point of view. For example the question of how to use grave accents ‘ and apostrophes ‘ historically and perhaps presently is still up for debate. It’s really why day became d’y in my poem’s neighbor characters dialogue. Even though it sucked in effect, it added fun to my coffee.
Mmmm best of all deconstructionalist coffee ‘…cat eat dog white bird world.’ I’m glad you saw it, especially the ‘…white bird world.’ In my poetry scratch at the odd word’s surface and nothing is what it seems.
On, got out too early, got out to late… I agree but well I was od’d on caffeine and outa time. I needed more time and less coffee to make clearer decisions in the end. Probably would have just tripped up anyway.
You're right on point. This is where it potentially was headed ‘…his subsequent nakedness showing his inability to handle [the contradictions of] a chaotic world...’
Many thanks for your feedback. Sometimes I feel misread. But not this time.
It is advantageous that you didn’t know Solomon Kane. He, as envisioned by Robert E Howard was a 17th century puritan who wandered the world vanquishing evil in all its forms.
‘…shotgun an loincloth” I got some real Ubi sunt vibes from it - like I said I don’t know much about Solomon Kane but it feels like a real loss of identity that transcends the purely physical items mentioned.’
Great insight. I intentionally wanted to set S.K up to achieve exactly that. And build character depth for a longer poem if one eventuates. I really enjoyed reimagining Kane as a washed up loser, loosing it in prohibition error East LA.
On a broader level, I enjoy challenging what is, what isn’t socially acceptable. Including acceptable as poetry. I like messing with societal cultural norms.
It was cool to see that you dialed in on my use of enjambment.
It’s a theory I’ve been working on. Enjambment affords the ability to be inter-lineal connectors. I feel the same way about the ends of lines in a verse. They are opportunities to somehow subliminally drop down. Or at least I am trying to get back to that way of thinking.
(If I knew how to insert enjambments mid line I’d do that with my Lit poems).
Grammatical features also interest me from a experimentalist point of view. For example the question of how to use grave accents ‘ and apostrophes ‘ historically and perhaps presently is still up for debate. It’s really why day became d’y in my poem’s neighbor characters dialogue. Even though it sucked in effect, it added fun to my coffee.
Mmmm best of all deconstructionalist coffee ‘…cat eat dog white bird world.’ I’m glad you saw it, especially the ‘…white bird world.’ In my poetry scratch at the odd word’s surface and nothing is what it seems.
On, got out too early, got out to late… I agree but well I was od’d on caffeine and outa time. I needed more time and less coffee to make clearer decisions in the end. Probably would have just tripped up anyway.
You're right on point. This is where it potentially was headed ‘…his subsequent nakedness showing his inability to handle [the contradictions of] a chaotic world...’
Many thanks for your feedback. Sometimes I feel misread. But not this time.
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Both untranslated and a translated translation of the translation (for me 
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