New Poetry Recommendations

[fridayam]

Please don't.

If the attention whores are taking over it feels like the ultimate death of this thread. It's sad, but since nobody else is contributing, I guess it's inevitable. We all have time issues, and I am as guilty as everyone else for not contributing.

It is sad though.

 

[oggbashan]

I noticed this one on the New Poetry list: The Titty Poem

I started me thinking and perhaps encouraged me to write more poetry myself.

Og

PS I was looking to see if my new poem was there. It was.

 

[SweetOblivion]

We could hold a Remembrance Sunday mass for the thread

I give up.

Or we could continue to celebrate the wonders of poetry here, such as the delightful 'Morning with Meliha' posted today by Vrosej10.

Sweet O.

 

[vrosej10]

Thanks for the kind words SweetOblivion!

I recommend Hypothetical Twitter Hipster Haiku3 by CeliaisAliena. Whilst more pseudohaiku than haiku it is hilarious so I don't think it particularly matter. Also good and humourous was Sock Fetish by Sockloverz. I am not entirely sure it was meant to be funny but it was (humour being such a subjective thing). Give em a read.

 

[twelveoone]

Good going you two, good to see this back. If somewhat anemic
Good to see the twit back, one of Literotica's finer writers. trust me, really
I think he's on my list of faves
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=504435

I didn't leave a comment, I hate postcards

( I also forgot how to format this correctly )

Leave a comment, and tell him some big number bastard is back, I owe him too.
That should put a smile on his face.

 

[SweetOblivion]

Intrigued

And Second Hand Japanese - by al-Ussa has curiously intriguing cultural assonance today. S.O.

 

[vrosej10]

I thought Daughter of the Crossroads by Sandyb and Succubus by Avasogently were brlliant especially the later which I plan to reread. Neighborhood Clouds by Hmmnmm and I Write...Therefore I Am by Seannelson are definitely worth a good read. I find Hmmnmm a complex poet who requires a lot of the reader but his stuff is worth the effort.

To those I haven't mentioned, take heart. These are just my opinions.

 

[twelveoone]

I find Hmmnmm a complex poet who requires a lot of the reader but his stuff is worth the effort.

Testing....
OK, why?

 

[twelveoone]

Good to see the twit back, one of Literotica's finer writers. trust me, really
I think he's on my list of faves
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=504435

Ok, don't trust me


to walk a line, fine
(I think it read)
an internal rime, no big deal
however he mirrors it 2 more times in this little piece, in each case varying the way that little time duration is introduced by the first comma
lips slip the s on the end of lip cause that same little pause
I don't care that much for hovering, but this guy shows me a little subtle trick - he knows what he is doing

OK now you tell me, why?

 

[PandoraGlitters]

Mr. twelve, the link was broken. Could you please tell us the poem's name or fix the link? I would love to read it.

 

[twelveoone]

I thoughtSuccubus by Avasogently were brlliant especially the later which I plan to reread. .

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=504714

this one my be the best of the week, if you like that sort of thing (I did) although I can't make what they are doing with the lines. It has a rhythm that I like.

As imaginary swells of violins cue up passion, the urge toward penetration.

Anti-erotica, not at it's finest, but you gotta love the "imaginary swells of violins"

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Today when I was over in New Poems, I thought I saw a couple of 14ers, (that's 14 lines) presented as blocks o'text. You will help your case immensely (which is getting other people to read it) IF you use stanza breaks. You might also reconsider the form as some might confuse it with a sonnet and have their expectations raised. An age old trick is to get the audience to lower
their expectations, meet it, and then hit 'em with your best shot. Wham! you got 'em.
And now you know why half of the poets around here hate me, referring to technique as 'tricks'. How bloody unpoetic!
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I fixed the link (I hope)
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=522221&page=submissions

this guy is a poet
he knows a lot of tricks

why I once saw him pull a snake out of a hole
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=268584

 

[vrosej10]

Testing....
OK, why?

He doesn't spray his meaning around like dog piss. You gotta dig for it. I like the random surrealism in his work.

 

[butters]

Testing....
OK, why?

Good to see the twit back, one of Literotica's finer writers. trust me, really
I think he's on my list of faves
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=504435

Ok, don't trust me
*snip*
OK now you tell me, why?

He doesn't spray his meaning around like dog piss. You gotta dig for it. I like the random surrealism in his work.

ahem, 'scuse me guys but in future would you mind debating the recommendations in the To Keep the Review Thread Clean thread? ta muchly

 

[vrosej10]

ahem, 'scuse me guys but in future would you mind debating the recommendations in the To Keep the Review Thread Clean thread? ta muchly

Sorry, my bad.

 

[vrosej10]

There some good stuff up today.

Danae by CeliaiasAliena is truly remarkable and a must read. I swear reading it was like getting an electric shock whilst sitting in a wet chair. Read, read it now! Here's the link:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=505728

Cavul82's up to some good stuff. I recommend the poet and his toolbelt and Rising Tide, but his/her stuff is generally worth a look.

The Fisher King by Nigel Debonnaire is remarkable too. Though I would quibble with the Jesus line (I think it diminishes an otherwise excellent poem), its still brilliant.

 

[twelveoone]

ahem, 'scuse me guys but in future would you mind debating the recommendations in the To Keep the Review Thread Clean thread? ta muchly

...it did look a little daid, 'round here

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=505590

I like this one, and I admit I had to look up 'Anasyrma' - I get to learn new words
"Her overt flashing in such a public space
Of her pubic place"
vrrose10 has a very good sense of sound, there is a better example a few lines up with "Z'

could do without "furry brown" pink/kink rime, but since it's only a riff job, a little dip into the trite is excusable

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=505630

Fisher King is an unusual play, and I can't be sure of the Arthur's - 'cuse me authour's intent with the 'Jesus' line. "I shall make you fishers of men" springs to mind, and it is unusual to see something so homespun with a grail title. Did make me wonder. Am I trying to read too much into something?

 

[vrosej10]

Ya gotta read twelveoone's The Blue Hour. So good to the last wordy crumb. I could eat it, it's just that imagistically yummy.

 

[normal jean]

moved to the To Keep the Review Thread Clean thread. butty

 

[SweetOblivion]

Rapt in You

is the best of this weekend's efforts IMHO.

Enjoy it and the small coterie of others endeavours too, if you have the time.

Sweet O.

 

[twelveoone]

Ya gotta read twelveoone's The Blue Hour. So good to the last wordy crumb. I could eat it, it's just that imagistically yummy.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=505241

I return the favour
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=506249

You have a good innate sense of sound, to the point of wondering if you pronounce hindmost with a long I, I suspect it is softened.

A quick comparison between the two.
Yours is more accessible, nothing wrong that. Partly because yours is about a sort of relationship between two human beings, in mine there is none. Compare the "I' of both. Partly because the ending in yours is certainly lighter.
If you follow the direction of the eyes in mine( a trick!), you see my ending is merciless. The 'I' is almost destroyed. A shade shorn. This may help explain what is a bad rhyme of 'eternities' (another trick!) "Green" has eight or nine meanings, I know the human mind can only hold one, the old "is it two faces or a goblet"optical illusion.

Yours is certainly more enjoyable, mine wasn't meant to be, unless you like unraveling

I pass this on because I have faith in you as a writer; despite your use of "I wonder", you seem not to want leave the audience with a question. Get them to wonder.

BTW, outside of a minor quibble with "twilight in-between" unless it has a meaning I don't know about, although in conjuring up one now I'm ROFL. You got 100, w/o comment, because here it is.

 

[vrosej10]

Hi Y'All,

Fridayam's Frames is definitely worth a look.

For a newbie poet, MistressLynn is doing great. Check out both her poems, Bruised and His Fantasy. They're pretty cool.

Plus on the less serious side, Grandma's Rocking Xmas by Cuddly Al is the poetic equivalent of a novelty song. It'll make you laugh.

 

[twelveoone]

Season's Greetings from Harry Flarf
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=506434

bygreenmountaineer
"what's this water I hear about?"
looks interesting, I'd like to know more about it

if for nothing else but the ending I gave it 100 (or tried to)
w/o comment, because it's here

 

[vrosej10]

Howdy,

Currently there are a few poems worth looking at:

My pick of the bunch is apples in the fall by devourlafemme. Wow that is all I can say. This one can write. I hope to read more of their stuff. I got that good tingly feeling you get in the presence of excellent poetry. Read it.

Nothing Changes, Everything Changes by SuperHeroRalph is a well observed chunk of existential angst. Worth a read for his impressive observation alone. To SuperHeroRalph; dude I hope you ain't writing from experience...

She Write Me by Luvmancsf;I don't know why I like this poem. Read and try and figure it out for me. I thought it was kinda cool.

 

[butters]

a few on offer worth reading today

ok, went and took a peek. vrose's Cosmic Joke rocks. i recommend it for the smile it brings and its adroit sound-play.

Misphit's Unholy night ... well, maybe not the best poem in the world, but an apt enough spin on the old Night before Christmas classic, tailored to this site. it is what it is, and doesn't pretend to be anything else... still worth a smile with its final lines

He was heard to exclaim
As he drove out of sight
"Merry Christmas to all
You people ain't right"

 

[Epmd607]

I would've liked what Misphit did, shows some time and effort went into a poem. However, I'm sure it's plagiarism, as in claiming someone's poem as your own. A simple Google search on the different stanzas. I'm 90% sure whomever Misphit is didn't write most, if not all, of the poem. Copy and Paste plagiarism is bullshit. I've no problem with plays off other works, but this isn't that.

NerdyGurl wrote a simple poem about lack of communication, simple syllable counting works well enough if you're new to the game of writing poems: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=507538

Don't Ejaculate, Don't Rut, Don...
by IrmaCerrutti© is a good poem, not great, needs a little work. http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=507590