New Poetry Recommendations

[vrosej10]

Susurrus by live4passion.

I love this and kind of think it is classy though the language might be a bit of a put on, I think it works with the tone of the poem. Not something you could get away with every time, but good in this instance. There are other equally valid opinions and I would actually be excited to hear them, so inform me.

 

[HAMFAN]

Someday - Submitted by Lucy1970Harker

I really liked this ... the last four lines or so took it beyond the controlling metaphor of life as the wished for movie epiphany into ... ? don't know

 

[vrosej10]

The Crossdresser’s Prayer by richfantan

This is a very sweet and soulful piece full of longing. It actually made me wish I could put my arms around richfantan and I am NOT the huggy type....

Someday by Lucy1970Harker.
A solid offering using movie imagery; this is an intelligent work, if a touch to long for my tastes (but that might just be me, you might think it’s fab just the way it is). I see HAMFAN beat me to the punch on this one, but it can't hurt to recommend it twice, cause I did say I would and I am a large lady of my word...

And I Thought of You and I by MikeIvy

Simply a nice erotic piece; see my comments on the actual poem for further commentary.

 

[twelveoone]

Now, who ya gonna trust
a pissed off poet?
or a comedian?

Easily the best
Traffic
byfridayam

lacks a little impact pun

Raspberry Delight
byvrosej10

was seeing words that weren't quite there, recommended and apology if anybody look for an unusual combination <pleads lighting conditions>

the other ones hand extended palm down waggle

Strap on Strap on Strap on
the Edit on

OK it's a New Year and according to the Mayans; the last. SO WAKE YOURSELVES UP AND MAKE YOUR NEW YEARS RESOLUTION
(geez why does guy talk so loud, I'm hung over, and i can't think)
BECAUSE ITS A SUBLIMINAL MESSAGE

I will think about editing
maybe try it sometime

my resolution, I'm going to try to find the colour button, so I can scream it red

Comment or die (metaphorically speaking)
i'm done

 

[vrosej10]

Sorry I been slack guys; I am bogged in one of those essays that just never gets going.... here's my recommendations:

Footfalls in the Snow by MikeIvy.

I love this poem. The poet is improving and developing his own unique punctuation style. Still letting himself down with the odd cliches, but this poem still spoke to me...it's 11.25pm here and about 30c, so the cold imagery...for some reason I keep misreading the title though as footballs in the snow...

Moonlight fades by Algonquin Twit.

Yummy, a tanka and a good one with nice, ethereal imagery. Check it out.

A pace or two ahead by SweetOblivion.

Nice classical piece. The punctuation is a bit distracting but this is a minor quibble. A solid poem and worth a read.

Neo-American Graffiti by greenmountaineer

Nice dig at the current state of play in the media. Read away.

Thanks for the tip about strap on, I can never get that right....

 

[twelveoone]

A Virgin's Daughter
byEsperanza_Hidalgo

The prison of self,
the prison of me,
the prison of histrionics,
seer's you lover.
...

in me,
to me,
and still love me…

These guy knows his stuff it's the old 3-2 trick that Eliot pulls in the Waste land
Does it twice, so I know it's not a mistake

Where the Grass is Greener
bycuriousaboutthat
a sonnet, I hate sonnets, and while I agree with VR's comment

she does: 1,2,3 and pow volta
Beyond the paths I’ve worn to fit my feet,
Beyond the groves of joy that grew so dense,
Beyond my fruit that thrives in balmy heat?

I heed no promises of paradise

it's good to see Algonquin Twit back, he has always been one of my favourite writers, I just preferred him when he was snakethrashin, dorthyparken and zinnen around
I am prejudiced against Haiku, I wrote two, What did they do, And I'm better than you with ambigutoo (alright forced rhyme) ambiguity - I read somewhere the Japanese where using some three hundred years before the English, and it's a goddamn shame in America that it is a tool reserved for middle management, politicians, and the like, STEP UP POETS ASSERT YOUR RIGHT TO SAY SOMETHING THAT CAN MEAN TWO THINGS.

oh, and comment or die (metaphysically speaking)
Everyone have a wonderful new year, I'm still having one thanks.

 

[twelveoone]

New Year's Evening
byvrosej10©
is more than
bioluminescent mushrooms clinging to a log
and is PG Rated

 

[vrosej10]

That essay is still kicking my arse so I thought I'd take a poem break.

1964 by cavu182

A solid but longwinded bildungsroman of a poem in need of a good going over BUT worth reading due rather excellent first third and a couple of other wicked stanzas. Cavu182, like me, is a reasonable writer in need of more attention to editing. Don’t let this stop you. The good bits are very good.

Complainte pour Ste-Catherine by PoetGuy

This is brilliant; check it out. There is technical stuff going on in this that I freely admit to not getting. Others may fill me in at their leisure, just READ it.

plenty of fish in the sea by chipbutty

A very cool and marine poem; give it a whirl. Classic Chipbutty.

 

[butters]

these are the only ones i'm seeing today worth recommending, tbh.. so far, at least.

greenmountaineer's Words

reminds us that life's a combination of the lofty and the shitter, really, and neither's exclusive to the other. neatly crafted.


vrosej's Might be Mesuline
made me go look up the mythology behind the write. really liked the imagery it sparked off, and ends up with the hot little kick at the end. don't know about the layout, though....


most of you will have already read Song of the Derivatives Trader by PoetGuy and enjoyed it as much as i did. good to see he subbed it here. clever, tight write - witty too.

 

[vrosej10]

i've been slack and its due that evil essay still. here's my post.

Song of the Derivatives Trader by Poet Guy

Love this one, very Raffles and colonialist to me...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511671


The Wonderful Blue by SweetOblivion

This is a great poem, erotic, refreshing. Like being rubbed all over by with ice cold watermelon on a hot day. Read. Enjoy.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511872


La Diada de Sant Jordi by PoetGuy

It’s like a holiday in Italy with a hotty.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511860

the wind in the pines my love by twelveoone

This one’s a beaut which I intend to reread a lot. I got newborn baby from the imagery, but that is clearly my personal take. Suck it and see guys.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=511737

 

[vrosej10]

Hi Guys,

Still grappling with said evil essay (I swear this thing is like Chucky; it just keeps comeing back). Here's my review:

Incarnate by Firebrain

This is a great little poem by someone who clearly know the value of being concise. Give it a read.

Monday Night Pool by bronzeage

This is a very male poem. I got an erotic vibe from it, but that’s probably just because it came from bronzeage and he kind of oozes maleness. Cool rhymes and sonic patterns. Read this one out loud.

Chagall's Bride byAngeline

Interesting imagery and references; it singed my hair as it blew a fuse in my brain. Good stuff.

 

[Firebrain]

Thank you vrosje10! I'm glad that it has touched (bad pun ) a few people.

 

[El Folo]

I wonder if it's in bad taste to suggest my own poem...Hurm.

 

[bronzeage]

I wonder if it's in bad taste to suggest my own poem...Hurm.

Squeaky Shoes by El Folo http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512174

This starts as a sweet piece. It sets the scene well. I like straight forward poems, but tone turns sinister halfway through for no apparent reason. The last line, especially so. It's fine to leave characters confused and uncertain, but it leaves the reader feeling like the victim, not a detached observer.

Technical note: The Lit Poetry forums are divided into erotic and non-erotic poetry. This piece would have been better placed in non-erotic.

 

[El Folo]

Unless someone found it erotic. (Actually, thinking further, I think I get more what you mean by 'non-erotic'...it wasn't exactly heavy on action.)

btw, I'm glad you found it creepy and uneasy. It did it's job, then. Thank you for the feedback, man.

 

[bronzeage]

Omerta byfridayam http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512125

A nice short work.

It is strange if a comment exceeds the length of the poem. The choice of the word "anneal" as a verb is interesting. It means to heat an object and then let it cool slowly. As an adjective, it usually refers to the smooth surface left by the process.

 

[vrosej10]

I just spent over an hour reading poems; you guys are getting prolific.

Age Not Withering by fridayam

A great poem, deserving of props. The older you are, the more you are gunna love this one.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512127

Red Sex by fridayam
This one is very, very honest and I love how much he loves the woman in the poem.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512296

[the water...] by Senna Jawa

A masterful poem.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512303

Feedback by lostchicken

All of you who comment regularly should take a look at this one. I found it fucking hilarious, but Aussies are known to enjoy a piss take...it’s been a while since I’ve seen a found poem like this one.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512186

 

[butters]

i also highly recommend fridayam's Red Sex and his Omerta. he's already on my favourite author's list, and his work's someplace i love to go to and disappear as i read.

 

[vrosej10]

Unfolded by Angeline.

Wow, that’s all I can say.

Family Album by greenmountaineer.

I got gothy, maudlin, emo teenager from this; others may think different.

From the marshes to the sea by UnderYourSpell

Spooky shit. Reminds me of the Rhyme of the Ancient Mariner for some reason.

Feather Fiends by UnderYour Spell.

Pantoums are hard to pull off and she’s managed it well. The title doesn’t help it. It’s too comical for such a serious piece.


I really had to work to pare down my selections; if I'd included all I like, this recommend would have been twice as long.

 

[butters]

just read vrosej's Summer Solstice 1955 - fab visuals. well worth a look.

sorry, in a rush, maybe add more later if i can!

 

[fridayam]

"Blackberry Sunday" by bronzeage
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512598

This is a stunning whirlpool of images and joyous description, as intense as the storm that overtakes the lovers within. Hugely enjoyable.

"See Jayne" by vrosej10
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512526

Beautifully compact storytelling, wonderful images.

"Resolution" by Tristesse2
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=512497

Hard-as-nails dissection of an irrevocable divorce. The intensity of it drips from each word.

 

[vrosej10]

I am with fridayam.

Blackberry Sunday by bronzeage

This is a terrific piece, chock full of dense meaty imagery that made me crave sex and fresh berries, possibly together....Go bronzeage. This is the best of your poems so far in my humble opinion.

 

[butters]

may i third that recommendation? it's lush, succulent, and (for me) taps into a much richer vein of writing talent.

 

[butters]

Mudak's Deep Hyp-no-sis had me chuckling right the way through, but especially as it drew to a close.

with a mouse? you pervert

oh, i meant to say, as a parody it works brilliantly, and keeps its timing very well.

 

[Mudak]

Thank you, chipbuddy. I'm glad you liked it. Sorry about that one tpyo...