SoCaliComfort
Virgin
- Joined
- Jul 21, 2011
- Posts
- 2
First Story, Looking for feedback
Hi I've been a casual reader on this site for about 6 years and finally decided to make an account and start contributing.
This is a pretty short(<5000 words) story about two girls falling in lust after a trip to the beach
http://www.literotica.com/s/two-daiquiris
Any hints on pacing, character development would be great as I feel those are my areas of weakness.
If you message me with some feedback and want me to read over your (short) story and give you some feedback I'll definitely make an effort and get back to you.
Cheers,
SoCali
Hi I've been a casual reader on this site for about 6 years and finally decided to make an account and start contributing.
This is a pretty short(<5000 words) story about two girls falling in lust after a trip to the beach
http://www.literotica.com/s/two-daiquiris
Any hints on pacing, character development would be great as I feel those are my areas of weakness.
If you message me with some feedback and want me to read over your (short) story and give you some feedback I'll definitely make an effort and get back to you.
Cheers,
SoCali