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I have a new story up - link is in my sigline.

Erotic Couplings, minimal plot, a quick read (one Lit page). RVC's and feedback welcome.

Hope you enjoy it. :eek:
 
LadyJeanne said:
I have a new story up - link is in my sigline.

Erotic Couplings, minimal plot, a quick read (one Lit page). RVC's and feedback welcome.

Hope you enjoy it. :eek:
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I R.V.C.ed your story. Different and good! :rose:
 
Hi folks,

I was hoping for some feedback for my story Better Than Coffee . It's about two women who meet and become lovers. The two are characters in another series I had earlier submitted; I became interested in how they met.

Basically, being neither a woman nor a lesbian, I struggled with whether the story feels genuine. I figure a good author is able to transcend (to some extent) his or her own experience in order to develop distinctive and realistic characters.

Anyways, feedback would be well appreciated.

Thanks in advance!
 
stsinner66 said:
Hi folks,

I was hoping for some feedback for my story Better Than Coffee . It's about two women who meet and become lovers. The two are characters in another series I had earlier submitted; I became interested in how they met.

Basically, being neither a woman nor a lesbian, I struggled with whether the story feels genuine. I figure a good author is able to transcend (to some extent) his or her own experience in order to develop distinctive and realistic characters.

Anyways, feedback would be well appreciated.

Thanks in advance!
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Great Story! I gave you a five and commented. Just one question, how can a person be a lesbian if they are not a woman? Basically, being neither a woman nor a lesbian, I struggled with whether the story feels genuine.
Your story felt very genuine but then again, I'm not a woman. :D
 
Okay, after two years here....

After two years here at Lit I hope that my writing skills have grown to the point of anouncing new posts and trying to comment on others. I've always felt up to this time that I wasn't ready to tell someone else that they needed to do this or that with their story. So, I'm going to offer up my two latest stories for review as I try to undertake the task of reviewing some of the legends of Lit. These stories have been recieved very well by the readers, but I would like an honest opinion of authors that are more in touch with the art of writing than the writing as art.

Ditzy Donna:

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=191842

Burnt Offerings:

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=192914

Both are in the Humor catagory. DD has sex while BO does not.

Thanks, Kirk
 
I've just realised my first story has gone up. now i have no more fingernails :) I would welcome any feedback and criticism. thank you in advance for taking the time...:)

When Love is Wrong

PS it's a incest brother/sister story, just a warning for those not into that.
PPS :eek: :eek: i know there are typos :eek: :eek:
 
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My latest story is now posted! More elfsmut!

Maidenstar is a romantic, passionate tale of an elven enchantress who is also a magic sword, and the warrior who loves her in either form.

Here is an illustration of the main character, done by the incomparable Jen!
http://www.eskimo.com/~vecna/Maidenstar_small.jpg

Your votes, feedback and comments eagerly appreciated!

-- Sabledrake
 
asian_princess said:
I've just realised my first story has gone up. now i have no more fingernails :) I would welcome any feedback and criticism. thank you in advance for taking the time...:)

When Love is Wrong

PS it's a incest brother/sister story, just a warning for those not into that.
PPS :eek: :eek: i know there are typos :eek: :eek:
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Great story, I voted on it. Knowing there were going to be a few type-os ahead of time helped. Powerful writing! Try an editor for spelling and grammar. Keep writing!
 
The story was really good. Very hot. Some minor spelling/grammar errors, but nothing that detracted. Some of the dialogue seemed to overemphasize the brother-sister relationship; it wasn't necessary to repeat it so frequently. Those really are minor quibbles. I hope you keep submitting stories, you have a great way of keeping the action hot throughout.


asian_princess said:
I've just realised my first story has gone up. now i have no more fingernails :) I would welcome any feedback and criticism. thank you in advance for taking the time...:)

When Love is Wrong

PS it's a incest brother/sister story, just a warning for those not into that.
PPS :eek: :eek: i know there are typos :eek: :eek:
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Sabledrake said:
My latest story is now posted! More elfsmut!

Maidenstar is a romantic, passionate tale of an elven enchantress who is also a magic sword, and the warrior who loves her in either form.

Here is an illustration of the main character, done by the incomparable Jen!
http://www.eskimo.com/~vecna/Maidenstar_small.jpg

Your votes, feedback and comments eagerly appreciated!

-- Sabledrake
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I R.V.C.ed your great story. Jen is such a wonderful artist. Seeing the illustra tion of the main character made the story even better. Keep writing and keep Jen's talent close at hand.
 
Firstly, thank you thank you for taking the time to peruse my story :) your comments have been invaluable

stsinner66 said:
Some of the dialogue seemed to overemphasize the brother-sister relationship; it wasn't necessary to repeat it so frequently. .
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stsinner66, i went back and re-wrote some of the scenes. You were so right, it flowed so much better and helped avoid the much-feared black hole of monotony!

msboy8 - out on the job looking for an editor as we speak!!

thanks again guys! :) :) :)
 
asian_princess said:
stsinner66, i went back and re-wrote some of the scenes. You were so right, it flowed so much better and helped avoid the much-feared black hole of monotony!
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My pleasure, I'm more than happy to read the edited version. Let me know when it's up and ready!
 
Dr. Ejectall & Ms. Wyde

My newest offering in the humor & satire catagoree takes on a much darker tone as I attempted to combine an internal struggle of the sexes with the battle between good and evil. I originally started it as a light hearted farce but felt an urge to keep the sinister tone intact. Enjoy...

Dr. Ejectall and Ms. Wyde
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=194309






Some other tales of mine...

Zen and the Art of Porno Site Maintenance
http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=190143

Unwashed Shorts
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=156407
 
Injustice League

Back to my favorite subject to parody - comic books. My screenplay comes alive with adjectives, a verb or two and plenty of gramatical errors and a punctuation floating about. If you lack a sense of humor and are a serial rapists or a rapist wannabee, you can skip the reading.

Hey why am I posting back to back in this rathe rlong thread? Other authors please don't be shy about plugging your spot bellow.

Injustice League
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=154350
 
Well, Fred, these two aren't your best.

And when are you gonna write Jismism?

I've been waiting for months!
 
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Something new from Me....

It has been forever since I posted something new that I truly felt strongly about.

Category: Romance
Title: Chris

I hope that others..... enjoy reading, commenting and voting on it as much as I enjoyed writing it.

All my love..... always,
Elizabetht
 
Blatant Advertising for my stories

Well of course I want as many people to read my stuff as possible so if this helps.....

I currently have four stories submitted (and about a million in various levels of completion)

"Jessie and the Cougar" is about young college student, Jessie who, hesitantly, gets a solid education from a lonely older housewife when he stops by to deliver some Chinese food.

"An Awakening in English Lit" is a tale about a young woman trying hard to grow up sexually. She is blossoming from a promiscuous young lady into a more responsible and loving woman but needs inspiration, she finds it from D.H. Lawrence's "Lady Chatterley's Lover" and the professor who assigns it to her.

"Roadside Romance" is a lustful romp from the highway to a deserted back road, when an innocent flirtation leads to some wild outdoor sex.

"The Concert" is a fun story I had originally written to a friend and is in a "you and I" format. It takes place at a rock concert when a third party joins in an anonymous sex-capade already in progress in a deserted bathroom.

And coming soon (hopefully)

"Counting Down the Storm (Coming very soon, still pending)" a dark tale of the total collapse of a man after finding out his long time girlfriend is leaving him for her married boss. Should be done with in a week or two.

Keep your eyes open for others, I'm in a bit of a writting frenzy at the moment. (Or I am avoiding the novel I've been working on for a year)

Anyway......

you can find these all here under my bio:

http://english.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=472958&page=submissions

Please enjoy, please vote and PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE give some feedback, as long as it is helpful and constructive (or boosts my ego a bit ;))
 
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Yay for Advertising

I'm on a quest to drive up my reads and perhaps even voting scores, so plese allow me to promote the stories I have posted here. One is even truly "new", but if you haven't read them, they're new to you!

"Another Reunion With an Ex" is my newest story which continues where "Reunion With an Ex" leaves off. In "Reunion" James had hooked up with Emily, his ex girlfriend while he was visiting his parents, with permission from his girlfriend Isabella. The reunion went so well that Isabella and James decide to have Emily come visit them in "Another Reunion" There's a good bit of threeway sex and female bisexuality, but I mix in some characterizations and motivations as much as I can.

Another Reunion With an Ex
Reunion With an Ex

"Nudity" is a smaller story I wrote, and while a bit less polished I still like it, and I feel it's somewhat unique. If nothing else it's short.
Nudity

I also have a story pending acceptance called "Kat" which has certain parallels to "Reunion" but with a different tone. The protagonist meets an old high school girlfriend at a wedding, the last one he was serious about but never had sex with. She is recently divorced and finds comfort in the familiar.
Hopefully it will be up soon and available on my stories page.

More story ideas are always in the hopper, but we'll see how many "real life" lets me work on.
 
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