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[sirhugs]

Chapter 5 of Love & Peace has now appeared as well...

I welcome all thoughts and feedback.

Many thanks to everyone who enjoyed the story and I hope the ending meets with approval.

Regards
janiexx

why wouldn;t the ending meet with approval? I thought it was perfect.

I don't often read Romance entries. I don't find many as arousing as this one. Great job.

 

[janiexx]

why wouldn;t the ending meet with approval? I thought it was perfect.

I don't often read Romance entries. I don't find many as arousing as this one. Great job.

Thank you very much, sirhugs, your comments are much appreciated.

Regards
janiexx

 

[bobocity]

New story - "Tree planting" posted

My fourth story on Literotica just got posted -- the story of a college student who finds herself exploring more than the woods when she takes a job as a tree planter for the summer. "Tree planting" (which wanted to be an earth day contest entry but never got finished in time) is at: http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=252626

Feedback welcome.

 

[sirhugs]

My fourth story on Literotica just got posted -- the story of a college student who finds herself exploring more than the woods when she takes a job as a tree planter for the summer. "Tree planting" (which wanted to be an earth day contest entry but never got finished in time) is at: http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=252626

Feedback welcome.

loved the settting, and the use of dialogue. Also way hot. Always wonder about the authenticity of voice issue though when guys write lesbian stories. Mind you, I put lez scenes into my stories, so....

 

[bobocity]

loved the settting, and the use of dialogue. Also way hot. Always wonder about the authenticity of voice issue though when guys write lesbian stories. Mind you, I put lez scenes into my stories, so....

Thanks for the kind words.

I tend to agree, but somebody commented on a previous story that they wanted to read a female perspective as well as the male (that story was a first-person narrative, and the narrator was male). So this was a bit of an experiment.

In principle, I think that writing from ANYone's perspective outside your own is always calling into question the authenticity of voice, but I hope that I hear from some women writers/readers on the forum who can tell me whether I've done the characters justice.

Bobocity.

 

[Darkniciad]

Thanks for the kind words.

I tend to agree, but somebody commented on a previous story that they wanted to read a female perspective as well as the male (that story was a first-person narrative, and the narrator was male). So this was a bit of an experiment.

In principle, I think that writing from ANYone's perspective outside your own is always calling into question the authenticity of voice, but I hope that I hear from some women writers/readers on the forum who can tell me whether I've done the characters justice.

Bobocity.

Well, I can't offer a female perspective ( and my girlfriend is still asleep so she'll have to check it out later ) but I really liked the story. The public comment says it all, so I won't repeat it here

I actually know a woman named Siobhan, so that was a special treat for me.

Now, just to stay on topic , Danica 10 is live today. Apologies to my regular readers for the delay this time out of the gate. I got off my editing schedule a bit and didn't get this one out right on the heels of the last. 11 is already submitted, so the next chapter won't suffer that problem.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=253266

 

[sirhugs]

Thanks for the kind words.

I tend to agree, but somebody commented on a previous story that they wanted to read a female perspective as well as the male (that story was a first-person narrative, and the narrator was male). So this was a bit of an experiment.

In principle, I think that writing from ANYone's perspective outside your own is always calling into question the authenticity of voice, but I hope that I hear from some women writers/readers on the forum who can tell me whether I've done the characters justice.

Bobocity.

sometimes using third person POV helps, though I tend to write in first person.

 

[helloxp]

hello, this is me--Helloxp.

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[Victor_Pollack]

Please Comment: An Alley Of Earthly Delights

I posted my first story on Literotica 4/23/06 titled An Alley Of Earthly Delights. It's a story about a guy with a questionable backbone who has a less-than-perfect girlfriend who drinks too much. They meet two other guys and go wild in a dark alley. http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=252201&page=1

I would very much like feedback. Thanks,

 

[BlackSnake]

This is a story about a guy who like tits so much that he got a set of his own: "Tits"
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=252496

 

[KewlBlueTiger]

New Story

Hey,
My newest story just went up. It's a fantasy based in my favorite world Mellowhale. I enjoyed writing it and would appreciate good feedback. I do my best to reciprocate reviews.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=253766

Enjoy!
KewlBlueTiger

 

[Darkniciad]

Hey,
My newest story just went up. It's a fantasy based in my favorite world Mellowhale. I enjoyed writing it and would appreciate good feedback. I do my best to reciprocate reviews.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=253766

Enjoy!
KewlBlueTiger

Excellent KBT, this one was a page turner for sure. Your dark characters are an interesting twist on things that keeps you locked into the story.

 

[sirhugs]

I posted my first story on Literotica 4/23/06 titled An Alley Of Earthly Delights. It's a story about a guy with a questionable backbone who has a less-than-perfect girlfriend who drinks too much. They meet two other guys and go wild in a dark alley. http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=252201&page=1

I would very much like feedback. Thanks,

I found the start slow, but, hey, I've had that comment on some of my stries.

I had to check back as to category half way through. In ch 2, will he crossdress????

 

[Victor_Pollack]

An Alley Of Earthly Delights.

Note:
I first posted this as a response to another thread. That was wrong, sorry.
Then I started a new thread on Story Feedback. I assume that's correct?
Now I'm adding to the thread here. Also right?

I posted a story on 4/23/06 titled An Alley Of Earthly Delights. It's a story about a guy with a questionable backbone who has a less than perfect girlfriend who drinks too much. They meet two other guys and go wild in a dark alley. http://english.literotica.com/stori...d=252201&page=1

I would appreciate any feedback. Thanks,

 

[SweetAngelRose]

New Story ~ Hotel du Pont ~ Mature

Hi,

I just posted my first story on Literotica. It was actually written many years ago and was my first. I dusted it off and revamped it. Please let me know what you think and should there be another chapter.

Thanks

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=254199

 

[Victor_Pollack]

Comments On "An Alley Of Earthly Delights"

I found the start slow, but, hey, I've had that comment on some of my stries.

I had to check back as to category half way through. In ch 2, will he crossdress????

First of all, thanks.
I agree, the start was slow. I was attempting to let the two principal characters flesh-out their traits. Maybe this should have been 2 stories?
I don't understand your comments about "category" and crossdessing ?

 

[janiexx]

Hi,

I just posted my first story on Literotica. It was actually written many years ago and was my first. I dusted it off and revamped it. Please let me know what you think and should there be another chapter.

Thanks

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=254199

Hello,

I took a peek at your story, but was put off by the constant change of tenses. It made it difficult to read and appeared clumsy.

I also noticed a lot of irrelevant detail (time he entered the restaurant, blackberry device, wine) which could be cut out to sharpen up the story.

However, with some polish it has the makings of an acceptable story. Maybe in part 2 you could give the reader some background to the characters, why they are there, where this relationship is heading.

Good luck,
janiexx

 

[sirhugs]

First of all, thanks.
I agree, the start was slow. I was attempting to let the two principal characters flesh-out their traits. Maybe this should have been 2 stories?
I don't understand your comments about "category" and crossdessing ?

your story was, quite rightly, in the "group sex" category, but as OI read it, I thought the male would end up being feminized, until I scrolled back up and checked which category it was in.

 

[Searching4Me]

First Attempt

Ok, I am throwing myself to the wolves lol

In 1998 I was going through a Divorce and sat down one night and wrote a story. I have managed to keep it over the years through reformats, new computers etc. I waited until after April the 1st (haha) to post it. It had been edited, small changes made, etc. And wouldnt you know it, I found typos after reading it a gozzillion times. But anyhow, I would love some feedback on it.

Thanks

Searching

A Special Evening For Him

 

[kromen]

My story finally got posted and I've been getting a few hits, some grateful feedback, but I wanted to shamelessly plug it once more since most of the hits are heading in the loving wives and incest. I played it safe (LOL) with Erotic Couplings. Feedback is much appreciated. Hope I link it correctly.
kromen.

Drug of Choice

 

[john-the-author]

A bunch of new chapters for Kim and Me are up:

Chapter 8: where we started Saturday with a blowjob and a leisurely breakfast

Chapter 9: where we went to the gym and I later gave Kim a pearl necklace

Chapter 10 where Kim tried out webcamming on her own

Chapter 11 is in the queue and will probably be approved in the next couple days. It's about that evening, when I took Kim to the local hot tub rental place.

John

 

[sirhugs]

My story finally got posted and I've been getting a few hits, some grateful feedback, but I wanted to shamelessly plug it once more since most of the hits are heading in the loving wives and incest. I played it safe (LOL) with Erotic Couplings. Feedback is much appreciated. Hope I link it correctly.
kromen.

Drug of Choice

not sure "EC" is "safe" since it gets a wide variety of readers- bound to offend somebody!

 

[Vincent E]

Afternoon Footsie

After watching a new story I posted get over 2600 people read, but only 5 vote, I am taking the extraordinary step of actually advertising. Okay I admit that I am a feedback slut - I'm a whore for responses.

So please, if you are so inclined to read Afternoon Footsie, I ask for your honest vote and perhaps a little feedback.

Afternoon Footsie is not an overtly sexual story; instead I wanted to focus on a more sensuous interaction between man and woman. Two friends frolic at the pool and engage in a little sexual tension focused around the woman's feet. Perhaps the foot fetishist will find it interesting, but if you are hoping for lots of foot-fucking you will be disappointed.

I tried to make this one of those, "Hey, this kind of thing can actually happen" story, which I hope adds to its appeal.

Thank-you for your consideration.

Vincent

 

[sirhugs]

After watching a new story I posted get over 2600 people read, but only 5 vote, I am taking the extraordinary step of actually advertising. Okay I admit that I am a feedback slut - I'm a whore for responses.

So please, if you are so inclined to read Afternoon Footsie, I ask for your honest vote and perhaps a little feedback.

Afternoon Footsie is not an overtly sexual story; instead I wanted to focus on a more sensuous interaction between man and woman. Two friends frolic at the pool and engage in a little sexual tension focused around the woman's feet. Perhaps the foot fetishist will find it interesting, but if you are hoping for lots of foot-fucking you will be disappointed.

I tried to make this one of those, "Hey, this kind of thing can actually happen" story, which I hope adds to its appeal.

Thank-you for your consideration.

Vincent

it gave me the shivers, but longish for a less than intensely sexual story, so I bet most readers fell off before the voting page

 

[mlady_france]

I have two fresh from April. For My Master This is about a night in the life of one sub(female) and her Master (male) with a special twist at the end. Oral servitude to her Master, and a gift given her in a couple of different ways. And Ch. 02 A shower with pet and Master.