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My holiday story ( see link below) started out planned to be a toy or bdsm adventure reviving a couple's lagging love life, but then took a left turn towards incest. Curious to know what people think of the result.
 
Shagging on the green under the pale moonlight

It felt so good to have my literotica cherry popped that I had to come back for more! My second story is essentially about the fun of creating sexual tension and ultimately releasing our pent up lust together in a unique setting. I look forward to learning what you think about it, and always welcome constructive criticism.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=282464
 
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sex with hairstylist

When it rains, it pours. Had my cherry popped, came back for seconds, and now my balls are swelling with the urge for more! This is my third erotic coupling story here (not a series or consecutive chapters), and is basically about an experience with my friendly neighborhood hairstylist.

I appreciate the few comments and votes I've received for my previous stories, and it appears that I'm doing something right (other than enjoying myself). Please feel free to comment and let me know what you like, or what I can do better.


http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=286943
 
sirhugs said:
My holiday story ( see link below) started out planned to be a toy or bdsm adventure reviving a couple's lagging love life, but then took a left turn towards incest. Curious to know what people think of the result.
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Read it, voted, and left a PC. :)
 
Four down, one to go

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=287564

The New Softballers Chapter 04 is up and ready for your perusal.


The sex in this one is slower to develop than in the other three, and there are two overlapping conversations -- one sexual, the other not -- on the same subject. I apologize for any confusion this may create.

There will be a Chapter 05 going up next week sometime. I have part of a sequel story in the works about the main character and one of the others (not telling which one). I'm getting it written out slowly and I hope it will be a lot of fun for people to read.

Please be sure to vote and leave your comments!

Captain Midnight
 
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The New Softballers Conclusion Is Here

Here is the final chapter of "The New Softballers." It's longer than the previous four and contains a round robin of sexual encounters, so I hope you enjoy it.

The New Softballers, Chapter 05

There will be a follow-up series of stories in the New Year, and I hope you enjoy them too.

Captain Midnight
 
Katy Kisses is up. Link in sig.

Also, I have a half done Incest/Taboo piece that I could do with checking over. About 5000 words so far. If you're interested at all please drop a PM and I'll zip it over to you. Typos, misspells, punctuation errors an' all.
 
Feedback Wanted...Intimate Neighbors Ch. 2

The second chapter in a series detailing the blossoming sexual relationship between a recently-divorced wife and her college-grad neighbor has been posted.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=288842

For some background on how these two first got together, please read Intimate Neighbors Ch. 1 (link below).

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=282800

I would greatly appreciate any feedback or reviews on my work. As mentioned previously, this is my first-ever attempt at writing erotic fiction and I am thrilled with the response received on Chapter 1.

Thanks,

Doug (carolinahusband)
 
Umm...

I posted my first ever story on this site, and would appreciate some feedback. Its under the Romance category, and the title is "Whirlwind". As this is my first story, I am pretty nervous about it. Critisizm is welcome...anything to improve my writing really......
 
youdonwannaknow said:
I posted my first ever story on this site, and would appreciate some feedback. Its under the Romance category, and the title is "Whirlwind". As this is my first story, I am pretty nervous about it. Critisizm is welcome...anything to improve my writing really......
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Is there a link?
 
youdonwannaknow said:
UMM...Sorry about that. Forgot to post the link.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=288772
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I saw the PC about it being too short. Are you going to add to the piece - as in chapters?

It starts great, I like Adie, you got into her well. I got kinda confused right at the end though, an abrupt finish. Mind you, I been picked up for exactly that myself in the past.

I'd say to keep it going. You have the tools.
Hope that helped, for what it's worth. :)
 
Thanks for that feedback. It really helped. I've already submitted chapter 2, but it dosent seem to have been posted. And thanks for the encouragement as well....
 
youdonwannaknow said:
Thanks for that feedback. It really helped. I've already submitted chapter 2, but it dosent seem to have been posted. And thanks for the encouragement as well....
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Ah, that explains a lot. Please let me know when it's up. I wonder how long you've been waiting? A week or so has been the norm for me lately, but with it being Christmas an' all, the Eds have stuff to do in r/l, may take longer - I dunno.

Good luck, and keep writing.
 
youdonwannaknow said:
I posted my first ever story on this site, and would appreciate some feedback. Its under the Romance category, and the title is "Whirlwind". As this is my first story, I am pretty nervous about it. Critisizm is welcome...anything to improve my writing really......
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Hey i just read it and i liked what I read - I just didn't like the abrupt ending! Your main character was very likeable and a nice change from the norm of slim, blonde, big breasted bimbo! I could sympathise with her and thats always a good thing - it draws the reader into the story and makes them care what happens to the characters.

You wrote the beginning of a great story, but you just cut it off as it was becoming interesting. i will look out for the next chapter and read it when it posts. Well done, a great start. :)
 
The saga continues!

If you followed "The New Softballers," I have a follow-up story called "I'm Not the Girl You Used to Love" up, starting this morning.

Here's the link:

I'm Not the Girl You Used to Love, Chapter 01

This series will include hetero and group sex stories as well as F/F, and it won't be posted as quickly as the previous one was. I'm still working out the relationships.

Hope you enjoy it!

Captain Midnight
 
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