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[destinie21]

My latest submisson Sanctuary

 

[Foxee Browne]

Hi,
I am a fairly new author (been here since late october early november) and would love any feedback you have to give me. I quite enjoy writing on lit and know I could use improvment. I am thinking of writing longer stories next, any advice?

Thanks in advance for any feedback!

GC

 

[sirhugs]

Hi,
I am a fairly new author (been here since late october early november) and would love any feedback you have to give me. I quite enjoy writing on lit and know I could use improvment. I am thinking of writing longer stories next, any advice?

Thanks in advance for any feedback!

GC

more experienced writers encouraged me to stretch to longer stories, and I share that to you. Use more dialogue, more detailed sex scenes, more sex ( instead of a single scene, for instance, use easy plot devices to tie several together). Longerstories tend to get higher scores, as only the readers who like them ( or devoted trolls) read til the voting page. They also tend to be better, more real, with more interesting characters.

 

[Foxee Browne]

Thanks Sirhugs!

Very good advice and I plan on taking it too. I do have one longer story in the works which will be a chapter story. It has more than one sex scene, a few emotional conflicts etc. I am taking my time with it, mostly because it's a bigger project. The really short stories just let me know I can write erotic fiction. The trolls & anon's nasty comments calling me a man because the story is written from that POV tell me it's believable enuf.

Thanks again for taking the time to read them over and give me your opinion.

GC

 

[Captain Midnight]

To geekychick76

I have seen your most recent story and felt it was very good.

In looking through stories, I generally skip over stories of four or more pages in Lit text (over 24 pages in the Word format I use). There are exceptions, but those have to get me interested very quickly. It is very important to develop characters of interest, because we get to feel their emotionsbefore, during and after sex. That makes the sex scenes moire pleasurable.

Best wishes!

Captain Midnight

 

[Foxee Browne]

Captain Midnight

Thanks! Compliments are awesome to hear, I also listen to everything else I hear, because it's the best way to improve my writing. I will work on developing more interesting characters, I know I need to work on that and perhaps more dialogue.

thanks for taking the time to read my work.

GC

 

[geronimo_appleby]

Thanks! Compliments are awesome to hear, I also listen to everything else I hear, because it's the best way to improve my writing. I will work on developing more interesting characters, I know I need to work on that and perhaps more dialogue.

thanks for taking the time to read my work.

GC

Hello gc. I took a quick look at 'The Naughty Wife', mainly 'cos it's in the LW category, I enjoy seeing the vehement responses that crop up in that cat. I'm gonna look at your other stuff soon.

I enjoyed what I saw... I meant the story, not the comments! I hope you continue to write and submit.

 

[Foxee Browne]

geronimo_appleby

Thanks!

I hear that's the toughest place to write, unless someone was telling me a fib. Us Noob's would never know the difference. The comments don't really bother me, mostly cause it's just an opinion. I kinda laugh at Anon at times but other times he's/she's nice.

I do plan to continue writing and submitting, because I enjoy it. Thanks 4 reading.

GC

 

[BustingOut]

My Sexy Housefellow

My Sexy Housefellow is an erotic couplings story about the instant sexual connection between a college freshman and the upperclassman student leader (housefellow) of his dorm.

This is my first story and I'm really proud of it for a first attempt. I really want to improve and will take any constructive criticism to heart.

 

[sirhugs]

Thanks!

I hear that's the toughest place to write, unless someone was telling me a fib. Us Noob's would never know the difference. The comments don't really bother me, mostly cause it's just an opinion. I kinda laugh at Anon at times but other times he's/she's nice.

I do plan to continue writing and submitting, because I enjoy it. Thanks 4 reading.

GC

I started out submittingto LW just because those werethe first stories burstingto get out....like you said, didn't know any better...so glad the experience didn't scarr you. i'll note your tale to read later.

 

[Sissy Adele Howells]

Thanks for all your votes

A very Happy New Year to you all. Thanks for your votes for my fetish story. This was the first I had written for months. Its called "Auntie Jean Drummond Lloyd" The link is in my signiture. For those of you who like fetish stories, have a read. I will except all comments. Thank you
LOVE ADELE

 

[janiexx]

Chapter 10 has appeared.

The latest chapter of Staring At The Sun appeared today and I'd welcome all comments and feedback.

I'm also shamelessly begging now...chapter 9 has only a measly 8 votes and I'd love for it to get an "H" so if anyone fancies a read, please vote for me.

Again, I'd like to publicly thank the readers who continue to let me know their thoughts and suggestions.

janiexx

 

[starrkers]

sex in a church

Sanctuary has just made it into the new stories list. It's my third story and I'm seriously looking for feedback.

 

[sirhugs]

Sanctuary has just made it into the new stories list. It's my third story and I'm seriously looking for feedback.

I would have grabbed the reader right away with the line:

"Seeking sanctuary from the storm?"


and used the current opening later as backstory, but I think that your writing is very advanced for a third story - nice mmix of sex and story, with the taboo , the compulsion and the submission nicely balanced. Perhaps you are ready to try writing a slightly longer story next time , with more than one scene?

 

[sirhugs]

The latest chapter of Staring At The Sun appeared today and I'd welcome all comments and feedback.

I'm also shamelessly begging now...chapter 9 has only a measly 8 votes and I'd love for it to get an "H" so if anyone fancies a read, please vote for me.

Again, I'd like to publicly thank the readers who continue to let me know their thoughts and suggestions.

janiexx

I bet you got your votes already, but I was happy to add another. I love your use of dialogue, but I was left craving one more sex scene at theend of the build up on page 2 of chapter 10.

 

[janiexx]

I bet you got your votes already, but I was happy to add another. I love your use of dialogue, but I was left craving one more sex scene at theend of the build up on page 2 of chapter 10.

Thanks, sirhugs, for your comments. I think Louise was craving more sex as well, but she'll have to wait a little while!

As for the votes, thank you to whoever voted for me - as I write, this chapter has the coveted little red "H".

janiexx

 

[sirhugs]

Thanks, sirhugs, for your comments. I think Louise was craving more sex as well, but she'll have to wait a little while!

As for the votes, thank you to whoever voted for me - as I write, this chapter has the coveted little red "H".

janiexx

waiting is such sweet pain, but release is more divine

 

[quality23]

Visit me and we can have some meaningful conversations, and some fun if you like.

www.eurocammodels.com/model/sexxyjen/chat/free

 

[Marwood1974]

Well... (*braces self*)

First time with a story, so break me in with feedback (emails, PM's whatever) gently, please.

(Link to first EVER story below.)

 

[Curse_Of_Undeath]

New chapter up!

Time Cannot Erase is now up!! It has a VERY long buildup to the sex scene, but it's worth it .

As always, feedback is welcome!

 

[Bob_Aganoush]

My latest story -- lots of themes

I've posted the first installment of my new story, The Mentor . One of the few things about Lit that I don't like is that it restricts you to just one category. But this story involves a college professor and a rather -- how should I put this? -- compromising position in which he finds himself. It is in the BDSM category, but would be more appropriately coded D/s, F/f, F/m, and a few other sundry categories. There will be a number of follow-up installments.

Please be sure to leave your feedback, good or bad, and vote. Thanks.

Bob A.

 

[Linyari]

Looking For Feedback

I've been a long time reader of literotica.com but this is the first time I actually decided to submit any of my stuff. As someone who wants to make sure she doesn't make people cringe, I'd love feedback on what sounds bad or what you just don't like.

Author Name: Linyari
Name of Story: Learning Give and Take
Category: Incest/Taboo (also a little bit of NC in there)
(If that's not your cup of tea, you can pass this by. I'll be posting regular f/f, f/m, or group sex stuff in the near future.)

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=291029

And before it's mentioned, no apparently, I don't know where the hymen goes, largely because by the time I started having sex I no longer had one. I don't know, maybe I was an active kid. A lot of the my perspective on that comes from other writers which is probably a bad thing. But I don't know any other women that had hymens when they had sex for the first time either.

But feel free to give any feedback...negative or otherwise.

 

[poboy789]

Feedback Appreciated

I've written a few stories, involving female domination. I enjoyed both creating and writing the stories. I recently posted one under fetish, entitled "A Letter to My Mistress."

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=290710

I would appreciate any feedback, comments or suggtestions regarding any of my stories.


Poboy

 

[starrkers]

Overheating went up last night my time.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

Something About Mary Incest alert!