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[Bleedyearsnixon]

I just recently posted a story broken into two chapaters. I have gotten a few votes and quite a bit of views, but not a single comment for either. I would appreciate it if anyone could either leave a comment on this thread or the board on the stories. Specific critque would be greatly appreciated. These are both non-erotic fiction.

Oktoberfest Chapter 1

Oktoberfest Chapter 2