The Enchanted Cottage

[MidwestSusan]

If

the poem/image I posted is not suitable for this thread, please let me know.. and Ill delete it.. but I felt the need to write.. and it came flowing out...

any other feedback is truly welcome.. (ok.. if you flame me bfd...)

 

[Victoria_2001_02769]

Moonlight frost

Starlight death

Aboutarounddirkupanddrawn...

lingering...waiting...dripping...

Eyes pain

Glowing death

Flashstabtwistpin....

panting...stabbing...thrusting...


Alive pain

Cheating death



...again...

Interesting work and image. But I must ask the meaning behind the two sentences where you have run your words together to form one long word? They confuse me as to how they fit in to the image of "cheating death" once again. Could you clarify please?

 

[MidwestSusan]

Interesting work and image. But I must ask the meaning behind the two sentences where you have run your words together to form one long word? They confuse me as to how they fit in to the image of "cheating death" once again. Could you clarify please?

sorry.. the formating didnt work the way I intended

The Cap word followed by the single word is supposed to be offest

the flow-together-words describe continuious action amid the thought/images of the split words.. so imagine the split words are "strobes" and the flow-togetehr-words are action on fastforward...

its intended to display/mirror the time compression/stretching of complex violent experiences.. car wrecks, fights, etc

 

[Victoria_2001_02769]

the poem/image I posted is not suitable for this thread, please let me know.. and Ill delete it.. but I felt the need to write.. and it came flowing out...

any other feedback is truly welcome.. (ok.. if you flame me bfd...)

Any and all works are welcome here Susan. Flaming, however, is not. That will not be tolerated in public and should be done - privately. We request that any and all writers be treated with respect.

 

[MidwestSusan]

Any and all works are welcome here Susan. Flaming, however, is not. That will not be tolerated in public and should be done - privately. We request that any and all writers be treated with respect.

I know.. was just suggesting Im open to even narrow-minded reviews.. Im not happy i couldnt format better..

 

[Victoria_2001_02769]

sorry.. the formating didnt work the way I intended

The Cap word followed by the single word is supposed to be offest

the flow-together-words describe continuious action amid the thought/images of the split words.. so imagine the split words are "strobes" and the flow-togetehr-words are action on fastforward...

its intended to display/mirror the time compression/stretching of complex violent experiences.. car wrecks, fights, etc

Susan... Thank you for the clarification.... and Welcome to The Cottage. I look forward to any other works you wish to share with us.

 

[MidwestSusan]

Susan... Thank you for the clarification.... and Welcome to The Cottage. I look forward to any other works you wish to share with us.

Thank you.. my thoughts/images run to the darker side.. but they are, in their own way, enchanted...

 

[spiritshadow67]

Any and all works are welcome here Susan. Flaming, however, is not. That will not be tolerated in public and should be done - privately. We request that any and all writers be treated with respect.

The cottage was created to inspire the writer within each of us. As Torie stated all and any works are welcome here.

But --- as a reminder to all ---
any type of flaming or Troll like activity will not be tolerated.
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We ask that if anyone has a problem with someones work/poems that it be handled via pm.

 

[MidwestSusan]

Thank you

 

[MidwestSusan]

Susan... Thank you for the clarification.... and Welcome to The Cottage. I look forward to any other works you wish to share with us.

I reformatted with ....

not as good.. but it gives the idea.. better.. I think

???!!!????

 

[MidwestSusan]

Moonlight...............................frost

..........Starlight.......................death

Aboutarounddirkupanddrawn...

lingering...waiting...dripping...

Eyes......................................pain

...........Glowing.......................death

Flashstabtwistpin....

panting...stabbing...thrusting...


Alive......................................pain

............Cheating.....................death



...again...

for structural reposting

 

[spiritshadow67]

sorry.. the formating didnt work the way I intended

The Cap word followed by the single word is supposed to be offest

the flow-together-words describe continuious action amid the thought/images of the split words.. so imagine the split words are "strobes" and the flow-togetehr-words are action on fastforward...

its intended to display/mirror the time compression/stretching of complex violent experiences.. car wrecks, fights, etc

that is ok .... but feel free to approach myself, Torie or Wyld for help with any trouble you might have.

Any of us would be more than happy to help you with formatting, editing... etc.

Welcome to the Cottage

 

[MidwestSusan]

that is ok .... but feel free to approach myself, Torie or Wyld for help with any trouble you might have.

Any of us would be more than happy to help you with formatting, editing... etc.

Welcome to the Cottage

Thank you.. it was a matter of compression of the spaces.. tabs didnt work either.. but the (damn) dots did..

icky.. but at least its structured the way I ment it to be

 

[spiritshadow67]

Thank you.. it was a matter of compression of the spaces.. tabs didnt work either.. but the (damn) dots did..

icky.. but at least its structured the way I ment it to be

You're welcome....

and...yea, the tabs don't work when posting on Lit... *rolls eyes*

 

[Shreik]

Hey all and welcome newbie

 

[MidwestSusan]

Hey all and welcome newbie

thank you.. its great to be welcomed so warmly

 

[MarkSand]

Good morning, Susie! How are you?

 

[MidwestSusan]

Good morning, Susie! How are you?

Hi Mark.. how are you?

 

[spiritshadow67]

Only here for a moment... wanted to give warm hello's to our budding group of writers..... *hugs to each and all of you*

Welcome Mark to the Cottage... Please make yourself at home....

 

[Shreik]

thank you.. its great to be welcomed so warmly

I can think of better ways

 

[MidwestSusan]

I can think of better ways

I bet you can

 

[MidwestSusan]

Flight Response

Rushing...running...fleeing

The deepest darkness after midnight

Woods...valleys...ice cold streams

The sound of violence following

Chasing...hunting...coming

The certainty of death hanging from every tree

Fields...farms...freedom

The escape is made yet the wolves wait

 

[Shreik]

I bet you can

Look under nick

 

[MidwestSusan]

Look under nick

I will

 

[bearlee]

Susan... Thank you for the clarification.... and Welcome to The Cottage. I look forward to any other works you wish to share with us.

Well Victoria-thanks for the invite! Not going to say I've read the whole thing because that would be a lie. Some beautiful poetry here and it seems like a nice place to hang out from time to time. Of course, Shreik's tongue pic still scares the hell of me Shall see you another day lovely lady