The General Commentary Thread

[cherries_on_snow]

Oh! It's so good to see you posting here again Cherries on Snow. It's been YEARS. I agree with Ange, your 007 poem is so good. *smiling bigly*

Thanks! And yes. 11 years was enough, I think.

 

[Angeline]

You're having a great run cherries. It really is a delight to read you again (I've really missed you). That sonnet you just posted--gorgeous!

 

[cherries_on_snow]

I missed you, too. Remec is going great guns on 30/30. I loved mind the gap. And Ange, we all remember. I grieve as well, but am grateful that the love you had shone bright and large in so many lives. It gave us hope.

 

[champagne1982]

Thanks! And yes. 11 years was enough, I think.

Welcome back! I'm delighted to read your poems. Absence really does remind us of that which we take for granted. I missed you!

 

[cherries_on_snow]

So good to read your poems, Champaign. I am grateful.

 

[todski28]

#slowclap,

Brilliant 007 cherries,

 

[cherries_on_snow]

Cheers, dears.

 

[todski28]

when did they change all the control panels and settings for submitting a piece I'm so lost now

 

[todski28]

nearly there Remec good endurance man.... as to the last piece I've read stuff that's more prose, I have no issues with it

 

[todski28]

welcome back for as long as you can stay miss KatieJones

 

[KatieJones]

welcome back for as long as you can stay miss KatieJones

Thank you, tod!

 

[greenmountaineer]

This is outstanding IMO for so many reasons:

http://forum.literotica.com/showpost.php?p=86695382&postcount=877

 

[todski28]

I think I may have seen too much violence in my life

sometimes looking back I wonder how so much can be on one person's life.



and Katie, Katie, katie..... what GM said

I have no more words than that

 

[todski28]

http://forum.literotica.com/showpost.php?p=86705574&postcount=1473
those final two lines are gorgeous
so brilliant in it's simplicity and implicit depth.

also I apologize scrawling with crayons is the best I've got, my pen license was never issued

 

[cherries_on_snow]

thanks. I wanted to marry the color periwinkle when I was 5.

 

[KatieJones]

This is outstanding IMO for so many reasons:

http://forum.literotica.com/showpost.php?p=86695382&postcount=877

Thank you, gm-that means a great deal coming from you.

 

[greenmountaineer]

This is outstanding IMO for so many reasons:

http://forum.literotica.com/showpost.php?p=86695382&postcount=877

Thank you, gm-that means a great deal coming from you.

My pleasure. The enjambment is wonderful. The imagery is so well integrated throughout the poem.

I liked the varying lengths of each sentence/stanza. "I wish I could stay" set up the next stanza. While "Stay" is repeated twice, I read them differently than "I wish I could stay." I took them to be in the imperative mood, i.e., commands that were futile, given how the last stanza ended.

If this were in "New Poems," I definitely would have saved it as a favorite.

 

[Angeline]

Oops GP! I did not know we were writing at the same time. Your poem is lovely. I'm sure the poets will sort it out.

 

[HarryHill]

thanks. I wanted to marry the color periwinkle when I was 5.

..
Lol

 

[legerdemer]

My pleasure. The enjambment is wonderful. The imagery is so well integrated throughout the poem.

I liked the varying lengths of each sentence/stanza. "I wish I could stay" set up the next stanza. While "Stay" is repeated twice, I read them differently than "I wish I could stay." I took them to be in the imperative mood, i.e., commands that were futile, given how the last stanza ended.

If this were in "New Poems," I definitely would have saved it as a favorite.

KJ, I agree with gm - lovely.

 

[KatieJones]

My pleasure. The enjambment is wonderful. The imagery is so well integrated throughout the poem.

I liked the varying lengths of each sentence/stanza. "I wish I could stay" set up the next stanza. While "Stay" is repeated twice, I read them differently than "I wish I could stay." I took them to be in the imperative mood, i.e., commands that were futile, given how the last stanza ended.

If this were in "New Poems," I definitely would have saved it as a favorite.

You read them as I intended which is satisfying. I liked the idea of creating a "turn" in the poem using the same word but in a different way. Thanks again. Your words are encouraging.

KJ, I agree with gm - lovely.

Thank you so much.

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

What am I? Swiss cheese?

 

[todski28]

What am I? Swiss cheese?

I was working on combining all ten, but time is getting away from me

 

[Angeline]

Katie I love what you did with my sense words in your latest entry in that challenge. The images are vivid and I especially dig your take on cola because 1) I don't know if I like the sweetness or the burn better either; and 2) the way you expanded that idea and made it into a metaphor takes the whole poem to another level. Your ending is great, too!

Hell I'm just glad you're back again. It's always a pleasure to read you.

 

[Angeline]

What am I? Swiss cheese?

I've been thinking about it but have to listen to that concerto first!