StillStunned
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This was a story that I never thought I'd write. It came about because of this thread: How annoying is first-person present tense? My first reply in that thread was this:
And so a story (3.9k words) came about: Ben's Big Mistake. Three months after its publication (in Non-Consent/Reluctance) it's had 18.3k views. It's at 4.15 stars from 98 ratings, with 12 hearts and 6 very positive comments. Not my highest-rated story, but outside I/T it's my most-viewed.
The premise is the one I originally came up with: a university professor decides to blackmail a student. I felt that 1P-PT suited a scenario like this: we're there in the narrator's head as events unfold. He doesn't know, we don't know. It's a shared journey of exploration.
It begins with Ben, the narrator, gearing himself up for meeting with his student:
In the version I originally wrote the student was Jenny Jones:
I decided that the blackmailee had to turn the tables. Ben needed to be faced with a surprise. We needed to be there in his head as he realised that he was caught in his own trap, that there was no way out.
And so Jenny Jones became Gan Jones:
Yes, I decided to make Gan a trans woman. Our Ben is looking forward to having his way with a hot chick, only to discover she has a dick.
I worried about writing this. First, I don't have any experience with trans women. I never crossed paths with one in my younger days, and for the past 25 years I've been in committed relationships. Still, I'm a fairly vanilla bloke, and at the very least I could imagine Ben's reaction. I figured this would be alright as long as I didn't write Gan as outlandish, but simply as someone who sees an opportunity and seizes it. And it's Literotica, so a general willingness to have sex is pretty much a given.
My second concern was category. I didn't want to spoil the twist by putting it in Transgender & Crossdressers. I felt it belonged in NC/R - the reluctance, when it comes to the actual sex, being on Ben's part. Still, I felt that a certain category of readers would be shocked, shocked! to read about anything other than straight man-on-woman sex. The blackmail bit would be perfectly acceptable, of course.
I actually wrote two versions of the story side by side: one with Jenny, one with Gan. I have the version with Jenny on file - it ends just before the point where, in the other version, Gan takes control. That's where I was certain that the Gan version was much more interesting to write, and much hotter to read.
In the end, to hedge my bets, I added a warning before the story:
[Continued in the next post because of character limits.]
But a few days later I added this:
And this:
And so a story (3.9k words) came about: Ben's Big Mistake. Three months after its publication (in Non-Consent/Reluctance) it's had 18.3k views. It's at 4.15 stars from 98 ratings, with 12 hearts and 6 very positive comments. Not my highest-rated story, but outside I/T it's my most-viewed.
The premise is the one I originally came up with: a university professor decides to blackmail a student. I felt that 1P-PT suited a scenario like this: we're there in the narrator's head as events unfold. He doesn't know, we don't know. It's a shared journey of exploration.
It begins with Ben, the narrator, gearing himself up for meeting with his student:
This somewhat formulaic opening is intended to draw the reader in. Well, the title was probably a clue. But still. I wanted the reader to identify with Ben. That feeling when you're about to do something you know you shouldn't - you know it's wrong, but on balance the possible consequences don't outweigh the desire to get what you want. That one last drink that pushes you over the edge into drunkenness. That bit of gossip you swore you wouldn't share. That red light you don't feel like stopping for.
In the version I originally wrote the student was Jenny Jones:
This poor girl was going to be blackmailed into having sex with her professor. As I was writing, however, I realised that the story needed more. If I was going to the extreme of using 1P-PT, it couldn't be simply to convey Ben's excitement at crossing a boundary.
I decided that the blackmailee had to turn the tables. Ben needed to be faced with a surprise. We needed to be there in his head as he realised that he was caught in his own trap, that there was no way out.
And so Jenny Jones became Gan Jones:
There's some foreshadowing going on here. "Gan", according to the infinite wisdom of the Internet, means "forceful". And then there's her "boyish" figure...
Yes, I decided to make Gan a trans woman. Our Ben is looking forward to having his way with a hot chick, only to discover she has a dick.
I worried about writing this. First, I don't have any experience with trans women. I never crossed paths with one in my younger days, and for the past 25 years I've been in committed relationships. Still, I'm a fairly vanilla bloke, and at the very least I could imagine Ben's reaction. I figured this would be alright as long as I didn't write Gan as outlandish, but simply as someone who sees an opportunity and seizes it. And it's Literotica, so a general willingness to have sex is pretty much a given.
My second concern was category. I didn't want to spoil the twist by putting it in Transgender & Crossdressers. I felt it belonged in NC/R - the reluctance, when it comes to the actual sex, being on Ben's part. Still, I felt that a certain category of readers would be shocked, shocked! to read about anything other than straight man-on-woman sex. The blackmail bit would be perfectly acceptable, of course.
I actually wrote two versions of the story side by side: one with Jenny, one with Gan. I have the version with Jenny on file - it ends just before the point where, in the other version, Gan takes control. That's where I was certain that the Gan version was much more interesting to write, and much hotter to read.
In the end, to hedge my bets, I added a warning before the story:
Overall, I think most readers took this warning to heart. There were the usual 1-bombs, and the story has my second-lowest rating (after my 2P POV adventure), but overall I'm not unhappy with how it's performed.
[Continued in the next post because of character limits.]
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