ericahope
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My latest story - self pleasure
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I enjoyed it
At first, I was caught up in the first person present tense (or is it taut? She was tense.)
Whatever. When she got on the train and the guy pressed her into the pole, well after that, it flowed to a rousing conclusion.
Well told. Didn't notice any glaring distractions.
I just mispelled Fellacio, or is it Fallacio, in a story?
(My dictionary didn't have it because people didn't do that back when my dictionary was printed
)
At first, I was caught up in the first person present tense (or is it taut? She was tense.)
Whatever. When she got on the train and the guy pressed her into the pole, well after that, it flowed to a rousing conclusion.
Well told. Didn't notice any glaring distractions.
I just mispelled Fellacio, or is it Fallacio, in a story?
(My dictionary didn't have it because people didn't do that back when my dictionary was printed
)
ericahope
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At first, I was caught up in the first person present tense (or is it taut? She was tense.)
Whatever. When she got on the train and the guy pressed her into the pole, well after that, it flowed to a rousing conclusion.
Well told. Didn't notice any glaring distractions.
I just mispelled Fellacio, or is it Fallacio, in a story?
(My dictionary didn't have it because people didn't do that back when my dictionary was printed
taut, taught, whatever... I'll fix it on the resubmit
I'm happy you enjoyed the subway scene. I actually was debating whether to include that or not. It seemed a little improbable at first, but there have been times when I've been pressed up against people in the subway and wondered what was going through their minds... so there is some realism there too.
Erica
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At first, I was caught up in the first person present tense (or is it taut? She was tense.)
Whatever. When she got on the train and the guy pressed her into the pole, well after that, it flowed to a rousing conclusion.
Well told. Didn't notice any glaring distractions.
I just mispelled Fellacio, or is it Fallacio, in a story?
(My dictionary didn't have it because people didn't do that back when my dictionary was printed
fellatio
