New Poem Recommendations

[GuiltyPleasure]

I second this but can't seem to do more than give gm a 5- TPTB won't let me do what I really wanted to do - add it to my favourites.

 

[Tsotha]

I second this but can't seem to do more than give gm a 5- TPTB won't let me do what I really wanted to do - add it to my favourites.

TPTB?

 

[todski28]

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The poem says it all

 

[pelegrino]

While I enjoyed quite a few very good poems today, I choose to recommend My Pussy by KatScratchings for its entertaining and straight-forward approach, skilful rhyming and very inherent musicality. Read and enjoy a very skilful new comer.

 

[Magnetron]

May 10-11, 2014 by twelveoone

I tried to leave a comment, but there was a malfunction. Maybe it will show up later? There is a nice juxtaposition of a light and dark day. Behind several years on my current events, so I'm not aware of if something 'newsworthy' occurred on May 10.

 

[Tsotha]

May 10-11, 2014 by twelveoone

I tried to leave a comment, but there was a malfunction. Maybe it will show up later? There is a nice juxtaposition of a light and dark day. Behind several years on my current events, so I'm not aware of if something 'newsworthy' occurred on May 10.

Context. Needless to say, I'm not going near that with a ten feet pole. 5ed, though (in my mind).

 

[todski28]

May 10-11, 2014 by twelveoone

I tried to leave a comment, but there was a malfunction. Maybe it will show up later? There is a nice juxtaposition of a light and dark day. Behind several years on my current events, so I'm not aware of if something 'newsworthy' occurred on May 10.

This was the piece my phone screwed up the link for, and then went flat, so this is seconded as a reccomend.

 

[Matryoshka]

Todski's How Did We Get Here ...takes you there, makes you feel the build and urgency.


I hope the link works. I had no idea how to do it so I copy/pasted from another. Guess I'm still new at a lot of this.... (I clicked every icon to try.)

 

[greenmountaineer]

Todski's How Did We Get Here ...takes you there, makes you feel the build and urgency.


I hope the link works. I had no idea how to do it so I copy/pasted from another. Guess I'm still new at a lot of this.... (I clicked every icon to try.)

I agree. I also think The Rock by LeopoldNicholas is worth a look.

 

[Tsotha]

Trixareforkids' The Clothes Line is a lovely poem with what is left unsaid. Go read it.

 

[Magnetron]

Trixareforkids' The Clothes Line is a lovely poem with what is left unsaid. Go read it.

Ditto that.

 

[twelveoone]

not a spinner, #247 on the top list according to votes
Sapphos Sister is an Alt. that is probably still around
Lullaby
The sun wil rise again tomorrow,
But that is then, and this is now.


small typo in the excerpt

reason, older than a year, person still alive and probably active
21 votes, two comments
plays to the audience well, well a little too well
Here is where I cop a Lebroz - you decide.
but note the balance in this line:
Hush your words for words are hollow,
I took that as advice and didn't leave one - me bad.

and thirded

Trixareforkids' The Clothes Line is a lovely poem with what is left unsaid. Go read it.

I commented, this has double set-up. Craft. I like that.

 

[twelveoone]

from the vault of dust bunnies (no refection on what is in new poems, some good stuff unmentioned-hint)
#142 in the top list according to votes (12 with 9 comments, and apparently an E) from 2008
Reason, name was mentioned in a PM.
excerpt from my comment then:
The mark of a good writer is to know the line, the mark of a daring writer is to go there and touch it with your toes. You are both.
by Tristesse2

The Other Half
first stanza (teaser)
I know the reality
of the other half,
the true colour
of your eyes and size
of your heart
as you lie
unblinkingly.

see how it ends up, worth the trip.

 

[todski28]

http://www.literotica.com/p/broken-smile

Brutal uncompromising and gritty writing. May not be to your taste but she makes you feel it. Visceral

 

[Tsotha]

http://www.literotica.com/p/broken-smile

Brutal uncompromising and gritty writing. May not be to your taste but she makes you feel it. Visceral

I read three of her poems a few weeks ago, leaving a customary 5-star and a comment on each (including a very long comment). Some of her work was interesting, but most of it is too raw, thoughtless, clichéd, written with a foot to the gas, straight off the road, without looking back to think about what she was doing, where she was going, and where things went wrong. Shows no regard for the reader, an uncompromising lack of interest in the public's reaction, as far as I can tell. Poetry doesn't write itself, you need to iterate on it. IMHO.

I check out the non-erotic poetry hub, and what do I see?

06/02 - 4 poems published, 3 by theoncomingstorm
06/01 - 7 poems published, 3 by theoncomingstorm

And if you keep going back, you'll find about 3 poems by her every day, for two weeks.

Now, people can publish as many poems as they want. Nothing is stopping them. Which should raise an alarm in some people's heads. All this green grass, and no "don't step on the grass" signs? Strange...

If you're starting a poetry factory, putting no thought or craft into your work, don't expect me to actually read it. Maybe I'll pass my eyes over it, feeling bored and sorry I spent the time to click on the link, and that's about it. I don't leave any score other than 5. Maybe I should.

 

[twelveoone]

kudos tso

two I apologise for just doing one, and this may not be the best one.

Ambivalence, strange word and rather risky maneuver in poetry. To be honest I think I've only seen it twice here. One in mine, one in a poem by greenmountaineer. People expect to get all riley and shit from poetry and to be told and so on, so it is a god damn tough thing to pull off. I am getting a heavy reading of ambivalence with this one, an almost wistful resignation here. Check out the two comments. Probably deserves more (so do some of the others, if only the shelves weren't so cluttered, and if only some of the others would check out their peers).

Mistress America
and sorry Magnetron this isn't quite the WTF that I love so well, but better than the wtf, but as far as I know there isn't a middle case. So it is one of the ones that bother me.

 

[Tsotha]

kudos tso

two I apologise for just doing one, and this may not be the best one.

Ambivalence, strange word and rather risky maneuver in poetry. To be honest I think I've only seen it twice here. One in mine, one in a poem by greenmountaineer. People expect to get all riley and shit from poetry and to be told and so on, so it is a god damn tough thing to pull off. I am getting a heavy reading of ambivalence with this one, an almost wistful resignation here. Check out the two comments. Probably deserves more (so do some of the others, if only the shelves weren't so cluttered, and if only some of the others would check out their peers).

Mistress America
and sorry Magnetron this isn't quite the WTF that I love so well, but better than the wtf, but as far as I know there isn't a middle case. So it is one of the ones that bother me.

Good recommend; I'm intrigued and I want to see what others here think about this poem, if possible. (Seconded.)

 

[Magnetron]

Prospecting for gold, I discovered this nugget.

Red Sky at Night by UnderYourSpell

 

[twelveoone]

Just for the sake of amusement, and to be honest, some people I just refuse to look at

Original Sin
by dee dee

It's All About Eve
byHoneyAdored©

naturally I prefer the second, because I'm a tasteless moron

Love So Fleeting and So Rare
byvirusman©

who has two others today...bad move

this has all the signs and symptoms of being a sonnet
I even suspect it may be one
actually, considering I don't like sonnets as a rule, not bad

 

[twelveoone]

Yesterday I only had the chance to read four of them. Yesterday was a very good day. Three of them:
(in order of appearance from the top)

Wet Silk Against Naked Skin
byMagnetron©


Muse
bynormal jean©

Bill Thinks He Sees his Doppelgänger
bygreenmountaineer©

How do I say this? It reminded me of ten years ago seeing WickEve, annaswirls. It was tough to critique either one, most of the time they were ahead of I the reader. I becoming a fan boy.

These three, if the writers has a book with at least half of the poems in it as good and as surprising as this, I would buy. I read them as a consumer, all require two passes at least, I recommend them as a fan boy. Highly.

I enjoyed them that much. Thank you.

 

[twelveoone]

Don't make me parse these, think snakes and zig zags. Poetry is NOT two fingers in your nostrils leading you around, hey. One step ahead, misdirection. While you are at it, the first poem in the thread "Todski's Choice" -it goes here, than it goes there.
You certainly don't want me to post the inspiration.

 

[HoneyAdored]

......

 

[twelveoone]

Thank you 1201 for the recommendation, it is most appreciated. I believe I am becoming quite an icon amongst the tasteless moron sector, I am thinking of standing as their President in the next election as I do represent the people.

hey that probably got you 5 more votes. Four of which because they thought I didn't like it.

Well back to the boneyard, contrary to rumour, Bronzeage is not dead, he is still here, there have been sightings...
#233 according to votes (11 votes, 7 comments) actually the comments are intertesting Tazz plays suck ass for a change and so do I.

Blackberry Sunday
it is a good poem, an enjoyable poem...is there anything more?
reason:
Bronze employs what is sometimes know as a framing device (an encasement) that also functions as a sort of chorus.
This is a sort of example of a useful technique. Well enuff of dat.
It is a good poem, an enjoyable poem - all you need to know,
and I don't know why I bother to try.

 

[greenmountaineer]

hey that probably got you 5 more votes. Four of which because they thought I didn't like it.

Well back to the boneyard, contrary to rumour, Bronzeage is not dead, he is still here, there have been sightings...
#233 according to votes (11 votes, 7 comments) actually the comments are intertesting Tazz plays suck ass for a change and so do I.

Blackberry Sunday
it is a good poem, an enjoyable poem...is there anything more?
reason:
Bronze employs what is sometimes know as a framing device (an encasement) that also functions as a sort of chorus.
This is a sort of example of a useful technique. Well enuff of dat.
It is a good poem, an enjoyable poem - all you need to know,
and I don't know why I bother to try.

Thank you 1201 for the recommendation, it is most appreciated. I believe I am becoming quite an icon amongst the tasteless moron sector, I am thinking of standing as their President in the next election as I do represent the people.

I'm glad you are, seriously.

 

[twelveoone]

worth checking out

From One to One

byBitterXSadie©

something about the style
to help her understand the painful connection between the mitten and the boot.
is a good line

did I recommend? Am I going to catch shit from the anti prose faction?
weel the enigma moves on....

I'm sure there may be better but I didn't read 'em

Real Time Problem
this I recommend as the person is actively seeking suggestions