new poems

[Rybka]

new poems on 7/13/03

Today we have 16 new works and one “spinner”. Here is the "oldie" that I found for the day. (It took 11 spins to find this one!) I wish I would come across a jewel by some poet I don't know.

Lusty Passion Nectar #337 by smithpeter

No mention of formula or symbol
Warned this stranger to taboo
What was proper
Or would prop her legs apart

We thought any things saucy
Malleable to finger pressing
Oozing fluids and dirty words
Would invoke the pleasant dew
Or might prop her legs apart

Of the New Poems read the first two: Growth unlimited by RazzRajen

The young grow on the bones of the elders
fallen down and mowed under,
fallow for the feeders, little maggoty thoughts ,
soupcons of desire
Take this bell and peal the heart,
show the gaping areas of nonsuch
where is the wonder and who is the fairy?

and Maria2394's Super Nova. Which is short enough that I won't quote from it. Just go read, send feedback, and vote.

After the first two of the sixteen, you are own your own. Plenty of "3"s, but nothing I think worth calling attention to.

As usual please remember that these are only the thoughts of one reader, and I could have missed something that may really appeal to you. So please feel free to add your comments to this thread.


Regards,                                 Rybka

 

[RazzRajen]

Re: new poems on 7/13/03

Today we have 16 new works and one “spinner”.

Of the New Poems read the first two: Growth unlimited by RazzRajen and Maria2394's Super Nova. Which is short enough that I won't quote from it. Just go read, send feedback, and vote.


Regards,                                 Rybka

Thanks Rybka....for the choosing and the words....

and yes i will heed those words of another era *S*....

Thanks
Razz

 

[Maria2394]

Re: new poems on 7/13/03

Today we have 16 new works and one “spinner”. Here is the "oldie" that I found for the day. (It took 11 spins to find this one!) I wish I would come across a jewel by some poet I don't know.

Lusty Passion Nectar #337 by smithpeter
Of the New Poems read the first two: Growth unlimited by RazzRajen and Maria2394's Super Nova. Which is short enough that I won't quote from it. Just go read, send feedback, and vote.

After the first two of the sixteen, you are own your own. Plenty of "3"s, but nothing I think worth calling attention to.

As usual please remember that these are only the thoughts of one reader, and I could have missed something that may really appeal to you. So please feel free to add your comments to this thread.


Regards,                                 Rybka

Thanks very kindly for mentioning my poem, Rybka

 

[darkmaas]

Darkmaas has retired to the north woods: clear cold lakes, the cry of the loon and trees and rocks as far as the eye can see. I am typing a mere cork-throw from the pine tree of literary fame- (shameless plug).

But enough wilderness banter ... to work.


New Poems 14 July, 2003.

A light day, for which I am grateful.

She Was a Fan

denis hale brings us a nicely explicit and well crafted encounter under the bandstand. It’s nice to see erotic poetry that climbs beyond the mere romantic exchange of fluids. The extended musical metaphor is a mixed blessing, but the poem rises to a nice "crescendo" anyway. Worth a read.

cyber-porn king

Maria2394 comments on the evils of cyber porn. She is brave, given our proximity to teen flesh banners. Luckily, most of her readers are here for the “art”.



My apologies for such a short first offering but reviewing is such hot work, my glass is empty and so is the lake.

Go read, then vote. Now.


darkmaas.

 

[darkmaas]

I Forgot the Spinner

Later.

darkmaas

 

[Maria2394]

fears of censorship and thanks!!

Darkmaas has retired to the north woods: clear cold lakes, the cry of the loon and trees and rocks as far as the eye can see. I am typing a mere cork-throw from the pine tree of literary fame- (shameless plug).

But enough wilderness banter ... to work.


New Poems 14 July, 2003.

A light day, for which I am grateful.

She Was a Fan

denis hale brings us a nicely explicit and well crafted encounter under the bandstand. It’s nice to see erotic poetry that climbs beyond the mere romantic exchange of fluids. The extended musical metaphor is a mixed blessing, but the poem rises to a nice "crescendo" anyway. Worth a read.

cyber-porn king

Maria2394 comments on the evils of cyber porn. She is brave, given our proximity to teen flesh banners. Luckily, most of her readers are here for the “art”.



My apologies for such a short first offering but reviewing is such hot work, my glass is empty and so is the lake.

Go read, then vote. Now.


darkmaas.

Ahh, Dear Darkmaas, thank you so much! for the mention and your perception that I am brave I almost pulled it 5 times, afraid of being censored and almost censoring myself. My intent was not to criticize anyone who enjoys porn, but to make a statement about how other people treat those of us who do enjoy this site and many others like it. Thanks for not taking it the wrong way

till later, maria

edited for this comment only: thank you for all the lovely feedback, anonymous, of course, and I will pull it, yes, but I want to thank Literotica for not censoring me... and to everyone who thinks I am a hipocrite( sic)...well, I am not , and please, if it makes you angry, delve deep into your psyche and try to determine WHY this poem upsets you...meaning no ill will or judgement towards anyone..until later..it is what it is Baby

tales and tears

 

[BooMerengue]

Re: fears of censorship and thanks!!

Ahh, Dear Darkmaas, thank you so much! for the mention and your perception that I am brave I almost pulled it 5 times, afraid of being censored and almost censoring myself. My intent was not to criticize anyone who enjoys porn, but to make a statement about how other people treat those of us who do enjoy this site and many others like it. Thanks for not taking it the wrong way

till later, maria

edited for this comment only: thank you for all the lovely feedback, anonymous, of course, and I will pull it, yes, but I want to thank Literotica for not censoring me... and to everyone who thinks I am a hipocrite( sic)...well, I am not , and please, if it makes you angry, delve deep into your psyche and try to determine WHY this poem upsets you...meaning no ill will or judgement towards anyone..until later..it is what it is Baby

Maria- Don't- please- don't EVER doubt what you want to say. It's a disservice to yourself, and the rest of us who read, not just for enjoyment, but to see things deeper. Please...

 

[Lauren Hynde]

I agree with Boo, Maria.

Don't pull the poem and especially don't give in to the temptation of censuring your own work. You've got an obligation to say what you need to say, not what others may or may not want to hear.

From my personal experience, I can tell you that the only poems that I felt truly meant something have always received feedback from people resenting them. It's a clear sign that you're doing something right.

 

[Angeline]

Maria, here is another Vote

for keeping the poem. Don't you dare give in to opinion, woman! The best art always causes controversy. If I had listened to some of the feedback I get, I guarantee you I wouldn't be here now. You follow what you know inside is right and let small minds continue to wither.

 

[Maria2394]

Thanks All

Boo, Lauren, Angeline,

I just want to let you ALL know how much you have come to mean to me..I felt freakin lost, llike I was alone somehow...okay. I had no idea... I won't pull it, just tryin too hard to please everyone, which I know cant be done..( thank goodness!). well, I have tears in my eyes right now, happy ones Thanks for the support, I mean it! The best friends anyone could ever have.

going to bed really early, Maria

 

[WickedEve]

7-15

I had a difficult time reading the new poems today. I didn't seem to like any of them. Then I decided it was my mood and the rushing around phase I'm in. So I took a deep breath and slowly read RazzRajen's Leaving trails and I'm glad I gave it the time it deserves. There's some good stuff here that's worth a read.


Splits in the dried out husks of verdant trees,
the leaves of the pipal blown across the lips
a rasping sound, like snakes slithering to Me
My own come home to roost Yet again

----------

And here's another one that I'm glad I took the time to go back and read:

A Country Mile
by Maria2394 ©

Here are a few of the lines I especially like:

When velvet smooth stones are colder than death

and the smell of hot pine from the woods
reminds that the creek really isn't that far,

When lightning bugs glitter, marking your way
sweet scent of clover abounds

Once again, there's some good stuff in this poem that makes it worth a read.

----------

You may want to check out more of the new poems. Several had some interesting moments in them.

 

[Maria2394]

Re: 7-15

I had a difficult time reading the new poems today. I didn't seem to like any of them. Then I decided it was my mood and the rushing around phase I'm in. So I took a deep breath and slowly read RazzRajen's Leaving trails and I'm glad I gave it the time it deserves. There's some good stuff here that's worth a read.


Splits in the dried out husks of verdant trees,
the leaves of the pipal blown across the lips
a rasping sound, like snakes slithering to Me
My own come home to roost Yet again

----------

And here's another one that I'm glad I took the time to go back and read:

A Country Mile
by Maria2394 ©

Here are a few of the lines I especially like:

When velvet smooth stones are colder than death

and the smell of hot pine from the woods
reminds that the creek really isn't that far,

When lightning bugs glitter, marking your way
sweet scent of clover abounds

Once again, there's some good stuff in this poem that makes it worth a read.

----------

You may want to check out more of the new poems. Several had some interesting moments in them.

Thank you Eve
Hope your mood gets better, maybe it's the moon? who knows, but all moods are good for something!!! Appreciate the mention and the kind words...till later, maria

 

[Guest]

Maria's "Country Rode"

Lovely, lovely, lovely. She took me *there*. 5!

Perdita

 

[Shotokan07]

Hello all...

This poem by RazzRajen© called Leaving Trails was really impressive. It reminds me of a song I once mixed a while back. Not saying it is not original, but very good. Altho one minor I must add. I think the poem didn't really end but left hanging. I guess he wanted that effect. (sp? or is it affect)

~

 

[Maria2394]

Re: Maria's "Country Rode"

Lovely, lovely, lovely. She took me *there*. 5!

Perdita

Thanks Perdita,
I had a wondeful childhood until my dad moved us when I was 11... funny thing about that poem, it was inspired by a tv commercial (about a country mile, and my daughter really did ask that and she's 20) just last night..wrote in like 2 hours or so I know at least one line needs changed, just havent come up with anything yet.. oh yeah, and the car my brother broadsided, was the baptist preacher, needless to say, THAT never happened again!! till later, maria

 

[RazzRajen]

Re: 7-15

I had a difficult time reading the new poems today. I didn't seem to like any of them. Then I decided it was my mood and the rushing around phase I'm in. So I took a deep breath and slowly read RazzRajen's Leaving trails and I'm glad I gave it the time it deserves. There's some good stuff here that's worth a read.


[
And here's another one that I'm glad I took the time to go back and read:

A Country Mile
by Maria2394 ©

Here are a few of the lines I especially like:

When velvet smooth stones are colder than death

and the smell of hot pine from the woods
reminds that the creek really isn't that far,


You may want to check out more of the new poems. Several had some interesting moments in them.

Thanks Eve for the glance back and the read again.....

I am glad you did

Razz

 

[RazzRajen]

Hello all...

This poem by RazzRajen© called Leaving Trails was really impressive. It reminds me of a song I once mixed a while back. Not saying it is not original, but very good. Altho one minor I must add. I think the poem didn't really end but left hanging. I guess he wanted that effect. (sp? or is it affect)

~

Thanks Shotokan for taking the time to read and comment....

Somethings are never-ending....

Razz

 

[Shotokan07]

Tru tru...

 

[OT]

Busy day. My brain is mush. Lots of new poems.

Nothing jumped out at me today.

Oh, except one. (Rowdy Ted fans won't want to miss this one )
Modern Mechanics by peacefulpoetess

(Just 'cause I didn't notice it doesn't mean there's not a gem or two out there. Maybe I'll follow Eve's wise lead and peek again later. Don't let me hold you up... go read for yourself and share a link or two back here )

 

[WickedEve]

Busy day. My brain is mush. Lots of new poems.

Nothing jumped out at me today.

Oh, except one. (Rowdy Ted fans won't want to miss this one )
Modern Mechanics by peacefulpoetess

(Just 'cause I didn't notice it doesn't mean there's not a gem or two out there. Maybe I'll follow Eve's wise lead and peak again later. Don't let me hold you up... go read for yourself and share a link or two back here )

Peak again? That piques my curiosity. I think I'd like to have a peek at that. hee hee

 

[OT]

Peak again? That piques my curiosity. I think I'd like to have a peek at that. hee hee

mush brain excuse goes for spell checking too

Then again, perhaps a good peak might be just the ticket to clear my head

(writing 100 times: peek peek peek peek ... peek peek peek ...

 

[Guest]

Growth Unlimited by RazzRajen

as I read this poem, I felt the words sink in and touch places that haven't seen the light of day in an age..

Powerful words..

ssilversong

 

[RazzRajen]

Re: Growth Unlimited by RazzRajen

as I read this poem, I felt the words sink in and touch places that haven't seen the light of day in an age..

Powerful words..

ssilversong

Thank you for your comments....if its read is enough to know.
To know its liked also, gives one a feeling of having done well.

Razz

 

[ubertroll]

Read this, too

Bwahaha.

 

[Cordelia]

yikes!

Got called away for a while. If no one has done today's review by the time I get back, I'll finish it. It'll be late....but I promise it'll get done!!


Running out the door,


Cordelia