Simple Sexy Skills for the Erotica Writer

[Luna_Wolf72]

Luna! Thank you for joining us here

I adore the theme and direction you took with the picture. Very sweet.

The paragraph it self is just beautiful. I love the tenderness and protectiveness it holds, and your choice of beautiful words definitely aid that.

The only criticism I can think of is that a sentence or two don't flow as nicely as they could. The choppiness takes away the beautiful aura you have established.

All that she had, all that she could give was simple; a hug and rest within a place that was warm and safe.​

I am not a fan of the word 'this'...not sure why, perhaps because it is too general and lacks meaning. I changed it to the word 'simple', does that work for you? I also added the word 'within' to take away the comma to try and make the sentence flow. I hope it worked. I'm sorry if I ruined it, as that wasn't my intention.

Aside from that, this paragraph definitely hits me hard as I am the older sister of the family, and I can associate with what you are creating. Plus the way you wrote it and your word choice reinforce that emotion strongly.

Absolutely beautiful Luna, thank you so much for sharing.

Hmmm I like how it read before...and I like how it reads with your changes. I try to evoke what I see...but it is hard (sometimes) when what I see doesn't come across the right way. So, thank you.

(And I have been a fan of your writing forever...'tis beautiful and evocative without being repetitive...so I will take any help you can offer)

 

[ShyMystica]

Hmmm I like how it read before...and I like how it reads with your changes. I try to evoke what I see...but it is hard (sometimes) when what I see doesn't come across the right way. So, thank you.

You are more than welcome. I loved it to start with, I just simply offer little alternatives to allow your mind to see things from a different perspective *smiles softly*

(And I have been a fan of your writing forever...'tis beautiful and evocative without being repetitive...so I will take any help you can offer)

And you are far too sweet! *blushes deeply* In comparison to most writers here I am just mediocre at best, but it is truly an amazing feeling to know that my writing doesn't go unnoticed and unread. So thank you so much Luna, you have made my day! *hugs Luna gently*

 

[Last_Rider]

clearly you're not reading the same stuff I am Shy, either that or you're far too critical of yourself. You're incredibly talented and I love reading your work.

 

[ShyMystica]

clearly you're not reading the same stuff I am Shy, either that or you're far too critical of yourself. You're incredibly talented and I love reading your work.

I had no idea. I know people read some of my stories when I post, but I didn't realise that anyone thought much of them. I just figured it was because they got curious...I am truly speechless and I have a tear. Thank you so much for your kind words.

*hugs both Luna and Rider gently*

 

[Light Ice]

I had no idea. I know people read some of my stories when I post, but I didn't realise that anyone thought much of them. I just figured it was because they got curious...I am truly speechless and I have a tear. Thank you so much for your kind words.

*hugs both Luna and Rider gently*

You're a tremendous talent. Don't get weepy with me, though. Else I'll grab you by the hair and drag you into my newest thread.

 

[ShyMystica]

You're a tremendous talent. Don't get weepy with me, though. Else I'll grab you by the hair and drag you into my newest thread.

Ummm...thank you Light Ice, I think. However, I'm not sure how I am supposed to react to the latter part of your statement. But feel free to join in the thread at any time

 

[Light Ice]

Ummm...thank you Light Ice, I think. However, I'm not sure how I am supposed to react to the latter part of your statement. But feel free to join in the thread at any time

It -was- a bit of an eccentric one. My apologies.

I'll double back upon the important part and remind you that I appreciate your talents. The rest of it was provoked by a bit of enthusiasm sparked by a sudden rush of talent into a new thread of mine.

I probably won't be a frequenter here but I might contribute now and again.

Thanks

-LI

 

[Last_Rider]

Take it as a compliment Shy, the talent in his new thread is very very good and you'd fit right in

 

[ShyMystica]

Take it as a compliment Shy, the talent in his new thread is very very good and you'd fit right in

Thank you Rider, I shall try.

I did have a look and his new thread is bursting with some of the better writers here. As for if I would fit in? Hmmm...as it is I am suffering from a little writer's block...well, little is a rather large understatement. *blushes deeply* But his thread will definitely be an interesting read.

 

[Last_Rider]

raises eyebrow

writers block? That's not good, we must find a way to fix this.

 

[ShyMystica]

Here is my little attempt. Note that this idea started from an idea I was helping a friend write a story for. Feel free to critique and comment, just be gentle as I am still torn in my writer's block. *smiles softly*

Themes: Sadness, hopelessness, silent contemplation

Characterisation: A young woman: recently married to a rather recluse yet wealthy man at the choice of her father. She didn't want to get married, but the wedding was out of her hands, for it was a matter of business. Several months had passed since their wedding, and not once has her husband touched her tenderly, or taken her as his wife. She sits upon the sill feeling a loss and neglect.

Paragraph:
Another night passed, another hope silently slipped from her soul as she watched in silence as the delicate moonbeams transformed magically into luminous morning rays. The soft morning glow streamed through the open window as the freshness of the morning breeze swept softly over her body. She had seen every rise of the sun over the estate since her wedding. Closing her eyes she allowed herself the luxury of being the audience to her daily beautiful a Capella…the rooster boasting his morning praises blending harmoniously with the faint twitter of distant birds. As she sat upon the windowsill, her eyes gazed softly over the male form that slept upon their bed, a sigh shuddering from her lips at the thought of another day without his tender touch.

 

[Last_Rider]

I actually wouldn't use hopelessness as a theme, your paragraph seems more to capture a feeling of longing rather than despair. Your first sentence seems a little halting, maybe something like :

Another night passed, another hope silently slipped from her soul as she watched in silence, the delicate moonbeams transforming magically into luminous morning rays.

That being said, you are incredible, even just coming out of writers block

 

[ShyMystica]

I actually wouldn't use hopelessness as a theme, your paragraph seems more to capture a feeling of longing rather than despair. Your first sentence seems a little halting, maybe something like :

Another night passed, another hope silently slipped from her soul as she watched in silence, the delicate moonbeams transforming magically into luminous morning rays.

Hmmm...yes...you are right Rider. Lol - I can't seem to get my emotions right it seems. And your sentence change is much nicer. I love how it flow.s

Thank you...isn't it to critique others?

 

[Last_Rider]

Critiquing takes more focus than I tend to have. It's not fair to just say something isn't right, doesn't flow, etc. you need to be able to help fix it. Usually my mind is running around too many places.

Though yours was easy, so little to tamper with.

 

[ShyMystica]

Exercise 3 - Brain Training for Description

Exercise 3 - Brain Training for Description

As some of you may be aware, I am currently in a little hole of writer's block. While researching on methods to crawl out of it, I came upon this exercise which I thought would be great to use here.

One of the key tools for an Erotica writer to have is description. As I have already seen from the first two exercises, many of you just spill with this ability. However, even the best descriptive writers fall into the 'trap' of using the same descriptions over and over again. I personally hate this as it makes the writing dull and it becomes hard to read. Basically, I just tune off and lose interest. And even the best writers at times struggle to put the evocative image from the mind into writing.

While this exercise is used mainly for poetry, it is a useful tool for the erotica writer to harness, as it enables you to think creatively and outside-the-box, but also trains your mind to overcome the boundaries that are preventing you from moving forward as a descriptive writer. So this exercise should help train your mind to constantly think of new creative paths to put that image in your mind onto paper (or screen) and enhance your descriptive writing.

The exercise:
Finish each phrase with whatever metaphor or simile comes immediately to mind.

1. Blue paint spilled on the road like___________________________.

2. A spider under the rug is like___________________________.

3. Graffiti on the abandoned building like___________________________.

4. Nothing was the same, now that it was___________________________.

5. A child in _________________ is like a _______________ in _____________________.

6. _________________is like muscles stretched taut over bone.

7. The fog plumed through gunshot holes in the car windows like ________________________.

8. She held her life in her own hands as if it were___________________________.

9. She poured coffee down her throat as if __________________________.

10. If I should wake before I die,___________________________.

11. The security guard walks the lobby as if___________________________.

12. Music in the hallway like___________________________.

Once completed, post, and return later (a day or two) and repeat the exercise, but do not use the same answers. This is testing your ability to morph the descriptions you have in your mind and challenge them into new ones.

To really get the most of the exercise, don't worry about coming up with something good, just write. The whole idea is to get your subconscious to make connections in a new, more creative way. If you don't like these (admittedly, they were the examples from the original exercise) feel free to make up your own! I even encourage you to do so


I look forward to what you guys come up with.
Shy


Information - http://fictionwriting.about.com/od/writingexercises/qt/metaphorex.htm

 

[Last_Rider]

Lovely exercise Shy, my own writing muse seems to be hyper active, hopefully this can corral her.

1. Blood from an arterial spray.

2. cancer

3. half formed thoughts

4. out in the open.

5. trouble; red flag to a bull

6. tension

7. oil from a ruptured pipe.

8. a precious jewel

9. possessed

10. let me meet my enemies in the afterlife

11. zombified

12. warm honey flowing through your ears

 

[ShyMystica]

Lovely exercise Shy, my own writing muse seems to be hyper active, hopefully this can corral her.

1. Blood from an arterial spray.

2. cancer

3. half formed thoughts

4. out in the open.

5. trouble; red flag to a bull

6. tension

7. oil from a ruptured pipe.

8. a precious jewel

9. possessed

10. let me meet my enemies in the afterlife

11. zombified

12. warm honey flowing through your ears

Eeeep! You did that quickly! *applauds* Though, what is more intriguing to me is what you will come up with tomorrow when you look upon the same list and do it again with different answers *smiles warmly*

PS - zombified...brilliant!

 

[Last_Rider]

Then I'll be back after I sleep. Though a couple of those images are pretty fixed in my mind and probably wont deviate too much.

 

[ShyMystica]

Dear fellow writers,

I thought that I would pop this up again with a slightly new exercise. This exercise continues on from where 'Exercise 2: Characterised sexuality and the appropriate wording' took off from.

From that exercise you guys tapped into some amazing scenarios and characters and handled the 'aura' of the photographs amazingly while maintaining the characters that you created. This next exercise I hope to continue that skill but also (hopefully) help to you open your eyes to the ways you can start and continue sexual scenarios.

Exercise 4: "The Deed" while maintaining character

For me, being a fairly new SRP'er, the idea of starting a sex scene frightens me to no end. I know it is a funny idea considering the kind of website I am on, but the idea of ruining all the work I had started and all the build up work to get to this point by fumbling at the sex scene definitely is scary. It is important for me to maintain the character that I have, but also to write something creative and non-repetitive. I mean, even sex can be boring when it is done the same way over and over again. After reading a few of the stories I have come to the conclusion that there is no set format to continue. But I have also wondered how many other directions and ways it could have been created. So...here is the exercise:

The exercise:
1. Select an image from the few below (or one of your own)
2. Roughly create a character bio of one or both of the individuals involved
3. Establish a mood or aura the picture presents to you and reduce it to one or two words
4. Write a paragraph initiating a sex scene. It can involve the picture in the beginning, middle or end. As long as the scene in the picture is portrayed somewhere in the paragraph.
5. Repeat steps 3 and 4 but with a completely different 'aura' or mood.

Both paragraphs must keep the characterisation consistent and nothing within the 'scene' can be repeated. It is only the 'aura' or mood that is changing. If you get inspired, do not limit yourself to one paragraph. If you wish to write the entire sex scene, by all means do. Be creative, let your imagination run and have fun!

Best of luck and I look forward to seeing some of your work.

Happy writing,
Shy

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[yeishia]

Welcome back I love the images you posted here.

 

[ShyMystica]

Welcome back I love the images you posted here.

Awww thank you greatly sweet Yeisha. It is always a pleasure to hear from you. I hope you are well *hugs gently*

 

[princesssexci]

Question, does the scene have to be completed with the WHOLE sex scene or just an initiated sex scene?

 

[ShyMystica]

Question, does the scene have to be completed with the WHOLE sex scene or just an initiated sex scene?

Hmmm...I was thinking the whole sex scene but that may be hard to complete in a few paragraphs. So perhaps only the initated sex scene? What do you think?

 

[princesssexci]

Hmmm...I was thinking the whole sex scene but that may be hard to do complete in a few paragraphs. So perhaps only the initated sex scene? What do you think?

Sounds good, let me think something up and it can be a picture I chose as well, right?

 

[ShyMystica]

Sounds good, let me think something up and it can be a picture I chose as well, right?

Of course. I just ask (if it is possible) that you post the picture so we can see what you started with *smiles warmly*