Things done to death in stories

[Goldeniangel]

i would like to meet one of those guys who can fuck and cum all night.
lol.

my guy, depsite the fact that we are only 21, cannot do that. and he's at the height of his hormones, you know?

that whole thing always bothers me too. that and when girls cum over and over and over and over... i'm like, OMG. if i have THREE orgasms and ONE of them is multiple then i dont want ANYONE TO TOUCH ME. not for quite awhile... my body is just too sensitive. it starts to HURT. which is hot for a little bit but then it's just like, omg, if someone touches me i will die. usually i just curl up on the bed and can barely talk above a whisper... our bodies just aren't meant for that kind of stimulation. that's why sometimes girls pass out during sex if they're having too many orgasms. i hate it when girls just cum all night and it doesn't even bother them, i'm like, OMG OW! whenever i think about it. it seems to be a more prevalent problem in stories than the guys who can cum over and over again, without ever losing their erections.

i'll have my girls cum multiple times on occasion, but i always make sure that they end up hurting eventually! that or that they'rej ust like, "please stop..." cuz that's ME. lol.

 

[SpacegirlLynn]

I use the word Gush to describe and orgasm since that is how it feels to me.

Maybe Rush would be a better word to use.

I use the word as a way to describe the feeling and not a literal Gushing of fluid.

I am sure there is some fluid gushing but I can't say I ever had it running down my leg.

I do admit though if I am using a real life experience for the inspiration of the story I may exaggerate the Mans prowess a bit to Make it more interesting.

Stories about the guy who was so worked up he popped his load in less than 4 minutes do not make for good erotic stories usually. But there may be things about the situation that happened before those 4 minutes that make it a good base for the story. I just have to expanded the 4 minutes out a bit.


There is another thought I have on this.

Often guys can get hard again after a bit of rest so it's not too big a stretch for a story to have a guy getting back into the action after an orgasm. But there are limits and from personal experience guys never are as hard or cum as much on round two.

If your writing an erotic Fiction story wouldn't you just gloss over that fact even if it is based on Real life? Maybe just not mention the fact the guy wouldn't be as ready as the first round? Realism is one thing but there is a point where you can give too much detail.

 

[Bacteriophage68]

rewrewrewrwrewrewre

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

Let's not forget that most of the women have "perfect" bodies... there's never, ever a single flaw, and they're never uncomfortable at all being naked with someone the first time... (well, except in my stories... my men and women are real...)

Oh.. and although group sex is interesting... I've yet to read a story where a foursome of friends is sitting around and someone brings up group sex and one of the people says "ohhh, no way" and gets up and leaves. I'll bet that would happen 8 times out of 10... at least!

 

[mack_the_knife]

All women have perfect bodies. Some guys have imperfect perceptions.

 

[mrmgp]

All women have perfect bodies. Some guys have imperfect perceptions.

Okay, now you're just sucking up.

 

[mrmgp]

Let's not forget that most of the women have "perfect" bodies... there's never, ever a single flaw, and they're never uncomfortable at all being naked with someone the first time...

Yep, another tired cliche. No stretch marks, no scars, no wild growths of hair in places where the woman doesn't want hair. The woman is almost always in perfect shape (washboard abs and perfectly flat abdomens show up way too much), and her breasts are almost always described as perky.

Oh.. and although group sex is interesting... I've yet to read a story where a foursome of friends is sitting around and someone brings up group sex and one of the people says "ohhh, no way" and gets up and leaves. I'll bet that would happen 8 times out of 10... at least!

Yep, that's in line with another tired cliche. Somebody suggests exploring a "new frontier" of sexuality, and no one balks at the idea.

Man: "Honey, I've had this fantasy about flattening my turds into pancakes and serving them to a woman on a plate with a little butter and a lot of maple syrup on top, and she eats them while I fuck her from behind."

Woman [her pussy instantly going into faucet mode]: "Oh, my God, that's my number one fantasy: being fucked doggy-style by a man while I'm eating his turd pancakes!!!!!! Take me now, you hot stud! Give me a ten-stack and give me your ten inches!!!!"​

The author's lack of reality and the overuse of cliches is in direct proportion to how fast this reader hits the back button on his browser.

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

Yep, another tired cliche. No stretch marks, no scars, no wild growths of hair in places where the woman doesn't want hair. The woman is almost always in perfect shape (washboard abs and perfectly flat abdomens show up way too much), and her breasts are almost always described as perky.

The author's lack of reality and the overuse of cliche's is in direct proportion to how fast this reader hits the back button on his browser.

I think maybe that's the problem, though. Unsophisticated readers that want to believe that stuff really happens....

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

Oh... and MRMGP? *LMAO* That was so disgusting I couldn't read it very closely!!!!

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

Okay, now you're just sucking up.

Nothing wrong with a little sucking up!!

 

[mack_the_knife]

It's only sucking up when you do it to get ahead of someone else.
It's strategy when you do it to get atop someone else, or underneath them, depending on everyone's preferences.

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

It's only sucking up when you do it to get ahead of someone else.
It's strategy when you do it to get atop someone else, or underneath them, depending on everyone's preferences.

Most probably true.

 

[mrmgp]

Oh... and MRMGP? *LMAO* That was so disgusting I couldn't read it very closely!!!!

To coin a phrase uttered by a well-know and controversial radio talk show host, I was illustrating absurdity by being absurd.

You know, we've got to stop meeting in these threads. People are going to start talking.

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

To coin a phrase uttered by a well-know and controversial radio talk show host, I was illustrating absurdity by being absurd.

You know, we've got to stop meeting in these threads. People are going to start talking.

I tried, as a matter of principle, not to respond to this, but alas--my lesser nature has taken over.

I have felt a bit like a stalker this evening. lol* I promise, I'm not following you... but I have to admit, you've made me laugh more than anyone else tonight. Points awarded!

 

[mrmgp]

I tried, as a matter of principle, not to respond to this, but alas--my lesser nature has taken over.

I have felt a bit like a stalker this evening. lol* I promise, I'm not following you... but I have to admit, you've made me laugh more than anyone else tonight. Points awarded!

I did try to go to sleep after trading broadsides with that cockroach Kingterp over in the General Board thread about his comments on rape, but it's too damned hot to sleep, so I came back to Lit. It's getting to be my favorite hangout of late. I just wandered back into some of the old threads I've posted in or started, and found you here.

Feel free to stalk me any time. You'd be my first!

Right back at ya!

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

I did try to go to sleep after trading broadsides with that cockroach Kingterp over in the General Board thread about his comments on rape, but it's too damned hot to sleep, so I came back to Lit. It's getting to be my favorite hangout of late. I just wandered back into some of the old threads I've posted in or started, and found you here.

Feel free to stalk me any time. You'd be my first!




Right back at ya!

*swoon*

I don't feel the need to stalk you... since we keep turning up in the same places... but let me tell you... if I were going to be a stalker... I'd choose you as my first target!

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

Nite, my would-be victim.

 

[mrmgp]

*swoon*

I don't feel the need to stalk you... since we keep turning up in the same places... but let me tell you... if I were going to be a stalker... I'd choose you as my first target!

A much-needed ego boost. Thank you!

 

[marriedmanseeks]

The least the writers could do is give them back problems, for surely they have trouble walking with DDDD breasts and 13 inch cocks ;(

I always masturbate in front of the mirror. Is there some other place I could do it that surely requires the writer to utilise no imagination in providing a description of my cheerleader like body?

Hey, females can ejaculate too

There is nothing more arousing then getting a guy off and knowing he could also put out the fire in your hair if it accidentally gets set alight by a candle.

Not sure if this is relevant, but here goes. Long time ago (aren't most memories like this?) I had a girlfriend who claimed she ejaculated and sure enough during sex, she would, literally, soak the bed (have you ever noticed how rough a towel can feel against your knees?). This somehow didn't fit my limited knowledge of anatomy and it also jarred my curiosity. So she agreed to masturbate for me so I could see her gush. What I actually saw was her pussy spasm, her lips were well spread by her fingers, but in addition, I saw her peeing copiously upon orgasm, the pee hole was quite obvious the way she was lying, so in her case anyway I know "ejaculation" was peeing. I also know that some women get wetter than others and even the same woman varies and that a thoroughly wet panty crotch is nothing unusual (in this man's humble opinion).

Sorry for this intrusion into an authors' hangout by this avowedly voyeuristic reader.

 

[mrmgp]

Not sure if this is relevant, but here goes. Long time ago (aren't most memories like this?) I had a girlfriend who claimed she ejaculated and sure enough during sex, she would, literally, soak the bed (have you ever noticed how rough a towel can feel against your knees?). This somehow didn't fit my limited knowledge of anatomy and it also jarred my curiosity. So she agreed to masturbate for me so I could see her gush. What I actually saw was her pussy spasm, her lips were well spread by her fingers, but in addition, I saw her peeing copiously upon orgasm, the pee hole was quite obvious the way she was lying, so in her case anyway I know "ejaculation" was peeing. I also know that some women get wetter than others and even the same woman varies and that a thoroughly wet panty crotch is nothing unusual (in this man's humble opinion).

Sorry for this intrusion into an authors' hangout by this avowedly voyeuristic reader.

The only woman I've ever had gush was my last girlfriend. I was performing oral sex on her, and she climaxed, and since I love giving oral sex, I kept at it, hoping to give her another one. It took a while, but all of a sudden, her orgasm hit, and I could feel a rush of liquid hit my tongue. Her pussy was incredibly sweet, and this liquid was even sweeter. It wasn't salty or tangy, so it wasn't urine, and my tongue was, at the time, right at her vagina, the place the liquid seemed to be coming from. But she didn't soak the bed or even my face. I was so thrilled to be able to give her an orgasm like that. She had never gushed before, and I had never had anyone gush.

But I think that in most cases, like you discovered, it's not female ejactuation but urine.

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

A much-needed ego boost. Thank you!

It wasn't an intended ego-boost. Perhaps more of a "you'd better start the paperwork in triplicate for the restraining order."

 

[mrmgp]

It wasn't an intended ego-boost. Perhaps more of a "you'd better start the paperwork in triplicate for the restraining order."

But maybe I want to be stalked!

 

[JamesSD]

Man: "Honey, I've had this fantasy about flattening my turds into pancakes and serving them to a woman on a plate with a little butter and a lot of maple syrup on top, and she eats them while I fuck her from behind."

Woman [her pussy instantly going into faucet mode]: "Oh, my God, that's my number one fantasy: being fucked doggy-style by a man while I'm eating his turd pancakes!!!!!! Take me now, you hot stud! Give me a ten-stack and give me your ten inches!!!!"

Haha, that really made me laugh. I think you need to turn this into a short humor story


On other issues: I don't expect nor want perfect realism from my erotica. Unless they have reason not to be my characters are generally more sexually confident and more physically attractive than "normal" people. I suppose I tend to base the women on actual women I've been with, and describe them as how I might to a friend, accentuating the positives, glossing over the flaws. Spending a sentence talking about how I could see the faint outline of cellulite on her thigh doesn't add much to a story in my mind, nor would say "her legs obviously hadn't been shaved in a couple days and I could feel her stubble shredding my skin like dozens of tiny needles." My point is, that realism can be just as annoying and distracting as ridiculous perfection. Again, this is story dependant, I think in a character driven romance story flaws are much more interesting than in a more stroke type piece, but both need to strike a balance of sorts.


I can say from personal experience that I have had sex all night long (well, fell asleep, woke up to screw, fell asleep, repeat). Generally this has only happened the first or second time I sleep with a woman, but 3 or 4 times in a night isn't unusual for me especially if it's been a while. It takes longer and there is less ejaculate, but the erections are just as hard. I'm not sure how normal I am, I do know my sex drive is higher than most.

(God, I'm still laughing at the turd pancakes line. Thank you.)

 

[Erotic-Kiss]

But maybe I want to be stalked!

I'm sorry. Can you repeat that again? My lawyer didn't hear you. (For future use of course. )

 

[dr_mabeuse]

There are lots of cliches and overused devices in porn and they do get tiresome, but at the same time remember that porn is basically sexual propaganda. It's fairy tale. It's not sex as it is, it's sex as we wish it would be.

All the guys are studs, all the women are knock-outs. All the cocks are huge and hard, all the pussies are wet and tight. All the orgasms are earth-shattering and simultaneous, and incest is good clean fun. Secretaries love it when their bosses screw them on their desks, and all teachers are just dying to fuck their students. You can take a girl over your knee and spank her and she'll love it, and if you're ever caught shoplifting, it's for sure you'll have to fuck the security guard (and you'll love it).

What makes a bad story is failure of imagination. When the author can't think of a creative way to describe someone or something, he falls back on these cliches, and when that happens it's best to just back-click out of there and leave all the 12-inchers and double D's to their own devices.