To keep the review thread clean...

[Syndra Lynn]

Oh! so happy!

Happy now?

May I have a taste oh, delicate one.

bowing humbly at your feet

 

[tarablackwood22]

Re: Oh! so happy!

May I have a taste oh, delicate one.

bowing humbly at your feet

Oh course, beautiful....but I'd better take it down before Tath sees it.....it will take weeks to shut him up!!!

.......and Fawnie, she'll be running into the woods to cut a whipping stick!!



death in a Sullivan St. alley

Hot Blood

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Re: Oh! so happy!

Oh course, beautiful....but I'd better take it down before Tath sees it.....it will take weeks to shut him up!!!

.......and Fawnie, she'll be running into the woods to cut a whipping stick!!



death in a Sullivan St. alley

Hot Blood

if it was really you i'll be pissed

were you wearing a big hat??

 

[tarablackwood22]

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if it was really you i'll be pissed

were you wearing a big hat??

no......just stringed panties.

 

[fawnie]

Re: Re: Oh! so happy!

Oh course, beautiful....but I'd better take it down before Tath sees it.....it will take weeks to shut him up!!!

.......and Fawnie, she'll be running into the woods to cut a whipping stick!!



death in a Sullivan St. alley

Hot Blood

damn..i'm always late for everything!!
whipping stick?,,haha..i did that yesterday!!

 

[Tathagata]

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no......just stringed panties.

eh.........
does nothin for me
ya need that hat

 

[tarablackwood22]

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eh.........
does nothin for me
ya need that hat

....Valerie Perrine, you mean?....a hat as big as a mattress?

......oh.....I get it.......mattress.

 

[Tathagata]

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....Valerie Perrine, you mean?....a hat as big as a mattress?

......oh.....I get it.......mattress.

we don't need no steenking mattress

 

[fawnie]

good morning!

ok 10 posts to go..i gotta make it quick bcuz today everything is getting shippied out..
oh i hate shutting down my pc..it's my favorite toy..well without batteries anyhow

 

[fawnie]

Re: good morning!

ok 10 posts to go..i gotta make it quick bcuz today everything is getting shippied out..
oh i hate shutting down my pc..it's my favorite toy..well without batteries anyhow

i need some coffee..i packed the coffe pot last night
i'm answering my own notes again..no i'm not a pathetic worm!
atleast i still have my banana to entertain me

 

[Syndra Lynn]

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eh.........
does nothin for me
ya need that hat

No, Tath. I don't think you understand. This was the finest ass I ever saw. It did something allright. And yo MISSED it?!? OMG!

Please put it back?

Syn

 

[Tathagata]

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No, Tath. I don't think you understand. This was the finest ass I ever saw. It did something allright. And yo MISSED it?!? OMG!

Please put it back?

Syn

oh well gee thanks
Lol

lemme get ya some salt to rub in my wounds

 

[JCSTREET]

REVIEWS THURSDAY JUNE 3 2004 (about 40 poems today)

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Eve wickedly tickles our funny bones and memories withUncle's Garden

Shoo! Out of my garden!
Don't tiptoe through the tomatoes
and radishes.
Leave the carrots be!

almost everyone had a relative who shooed them jocularly out of the way during their peurile explorations--but then it moves on to superstition (or is it fact?) - menstruating women should not be around growing things (hmmm!)

A woman's power flows between her thighs
and can strike down a sprout
struggling up through the soil.

well--hush my mouth--would never have occurred to me--

but then--already assumed her "wicked" mantle in her formative years Eve paid no heed and

killed all chances that summer
of a fresh salad.

(often wondered why those summer lettuce leaves drooped so quickly

-----

neonurotic once more maps the dark terrain of the road which the (perhaps apocryphal) rubber meets with
Rx Blowjobs

Swallow my misery along
with the bitterness
that rolls off your chin

and it's true that since the advent of the Net, women have come to realize the importance of fellatio to the equanimity of the stalwart yeomen of the shire (although with reciprocation implied)

AND!

equating the gushing of life-spawning seed to "misery" spawns a tense metaphor

as water is the universal solvent, so neo judges oral relief to be a universal salvent and mayhave more impressionable readers reaching for the Kleenex(T).

----

Uncle Pervey submits another paean to keeping it in the family and continues to spell "scary" with an "ey" thus affecting a solecism much beloved of the English--who feel--absent any evidence--that American English is somehow inferior to their own argot.

Jim Serra - whose emotions may sometimes range to the far, bleak places of the heart - always amazes with his economy - while explorers generally carry spare supplies, this poet carries no spare words - this concept of spareness is--in fact-- contained in the German word for poet (dichtjunst/dichtkunstler???) I was once told --and is the hardest concept to get across to emerging poets

His poem Your Immolation amazes and challenges and may require several readings to absorb - I wonder if it has anything to do with destructive, co-dependent (addictive) relationships - but that's just me.

---

I see your immolation
and feel the heat

coursing
from you

I see confusion
naked… your soul bared you a r e
c o n s u m e d in flame,

and I try to walk away,
but can't. I turn away… sobbing.

I can't remember lighting the match (spontaneous combustion?)

I turn back to you (feeling the heat)
and reach out
I touch the fire,
feel it sear my skin,
the pervasive scent
of our burning flesh
is so thick I taste it.

I smile now, tasting your fire
and walk away, sated,
until you burn again

---

RazzRajen's
For the Silent One pays court to a girl he loves

Strong as the oak , stronger than the wind,
Together they stood and do,
Against all odds,
All of life’s machinations.

There's no verbal machinations either - what you see is what you get

---

flyguy69 adopts a creative and delightful metaphor in
Paper Girl - equating his girl's skin to a tabula rasa on which what he writes becomes flesh

Words flowed from my fingertips and
spilled onto her parchment skin
Words like “caress” are too big for paper anyway

the bauty of this poem is its economy - how the poet crowbars a wealth of imagery into 12 lines - and manages to hold the metaphor tightly all the way through - not an easy task

And good words aren’t straight like standard rule
They curve like clavicles
and dimple like navels

it's one of the best metaphors I've ever seen I think

I used words that tickled and made her flinch

---

normal jean (is this a play on Norma Jean???) delivers the ending we begin to suspect when she begins her description of working class life in screen door silenced

Them kids are like sex, I heard Mama say
in and out, out and in, all damn day!
Why can't they just stay outside and play?

well . . . the kids pick up on that unspoken thought and

Saturday Night drunk fight, stop sign felled
~highway man don't work today~
You kids! Get in the yard and play!


OOOPPPSSS!!!!!!!

When did a kid ever listen?
Country roads breathe, wild summertime
kids on bikes, creek trek today
never stopping to think about
the big truck heading their way

Now Mama has nothing ( to worry about)
a screen door slam,how minor
with both of her babies taken away...
taken away, damned screen door!
slam my heart,
take this silence, this sadness away

the simple language of Jean's poem belies the stark, stomach-churning wind-up

I haven't seen Jean's work before - this has a rolling "cinema verite" flavor - it feels like oral history which sounds everyday to the neighbours - but a goldmine of fascinations to the outsider

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I didn't spot many of the usual suspects in today's round - I know most of you have been active since the last round-up but I see no opportunity to catch some of those good works today.

Looking at the rest of today's poems--most by ppl whom I haven't seen posting here I see some fuck poems - a genre which rarely ever works - some doggerel - and some poems which actually rhyme (what a confusing concept to a modernist).

I don't like to choose favorite poems because to me it's too subjective a call - favorite poems aren't necessarily the best poems--it could just be that I was too stupid to see the merit in an alternative if I tried to do that.

FINALLY - since we don't really know the extent of daily new poems till midnight on the relevant day I wonder if it makes sense for reviewers to cull the tail end of the previous day as well to cover this? I haven't done it today cuz my cable connect has been in and out so it's been a struggle to get this far.

so short and sweet--that's it for today.

Carl

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Oh! so happy!

oh well gee thanks
Lol

lemme get ya some salt to rub in my wounds

She's a big tease. She doesn't really love us. i can tell.

 

[Tathagata]

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She's a big tease. She doesn't really love us. i can tell.

Oh well i know that but i'd still like to see a great ass

 

[Tathagata]

Re: REVIEWS THURSDAY JUNE 3 2004 (about 40 poems today)

url=poem link copied and pasted from the address bar of the poem's page)Poem Title(/url)

so short and sweet--that's it for today.

Carl

hey, look who woke up

where ya been?
what's it elk milking season up there??

Welcome back

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Re: REVIEWS THURSDAY JUNE 3 2004 (about 40 poems today)

Um, nice review.

Wrong thread.

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Re: REVIEWS THURSDAY JUNE 3 2004 (about 40 poems today)

Um, nice review.

Wrong thread.

Syn don't sugar coat things













rofl

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Re: Re: Re: REVIEWS THURSDAY JUNE 3 2004 (about 40 poems today)

Syn don't sugar coat things

I love you!

Syn

 

[Tathagata]

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I love you!

Syn

yeah you just wantme to post tits and ass too




I love you too Sis

 

[tarablackwood22]

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She's a big tease. She doesn't really love us. i can tell.

you are relentless!!...you wonderful California girl.

don't the sun and wine and ocean quench those deep appetites of yours?


death in a Sullivan St. alley

Hot Blood

 

[fawnie]

Re: Re: Re: Re: REVIEWS THURSDAY JUNE 3 2004 (about 40 poems today)

I love you!

Syn

whewwww..i made it to 100..now if i can get my pc to function properly, i'll scan what i really want to post for an av..but this will do til i can.

reeally experienced???? this place is too funny!!

 

[fawnie]

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: REVIEWS THURSDAY JUNE 3 2004 (about 40 poems today)

whewwww..i made it to 100..now if i can get my pc to function properly, i'll scan what i really want to post for an av..but this will do til i can.

reeally experienced???? this place is too funny!!

oops i hit the wrong button!

 

[Syndra Lynn]

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yeah you just wantme to post tits and ass too




I love you too Sis

You promised us your cock and all we got was the big freeze.

And, Tara, I tease. I just want the whole world to be exhibitionists like me.

You can keep your pretty little ass hid if ya wanna. It's a free country.

Syn

 

[Tathagata]

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You promised us your cock and all we got was the big freeze.

at least it was big