Writing Challenge ~ January 2011 ~ Reviews and Comments

[Vail_Indigo]

And Last Rider's was practically rated G

 

[Ausus_girl13]

At the very least, I did and Alana did

The woman's got a point.

 

[Ahren]

Just nevermind. Clearly my point was missed. Forget I brought it up and write whatever you want. I'll refrain from commenting.

 

[Noon_Shadow]

"I'm certainly not trying to pile on with anyone who might be attacking Ahren-I don't even know him because his time and mine here haven't overlapped much-, I just am not sure I get where he's coming from. Of the 12 entries that have been posted so far, I'd say 6 of them are heavily sexual, and the other 6 (counting JewelSkye's removed entry) have basically zero sexual content. I'd say it's a pretty good mixture, given the forum."

 

[Ausus_girl13]

No. Tell us what you were trying to say. Enunciate, please. (yes, I think I am hilarious)

 

[Last_Rider]

I like Ahren's point in many ways, personally since I started writing here I've found it a little more difficult to write non-sexually oriented things. Even my submission here, as tame as it was, was based on the pursuit of women/sex/personal gratification. For me that's mostly because the image invokes those kids of responses, and as I said I've been forever "corrupeted" in that much of even my personal writing is very sexually based.

I will happily take up the challenge though and do my absolute best to write something as sexually free as I can conjure.

 

[dave_L2LP]

Ok..I've submitted a piece, and I hope it goes down ok, and doesn't cause offense or upset as it is a subject dear to me, but ....well, I hope it's understood.
It's also not 2500 words long, rather short of 2000..I hope that's ok..I took the limit to be a limit, but not an amount to be reached, but it felt right to stop where I did, and not have it ramble on.

thanks

It's a beautifully written piece...if it had been in a magazine it'd be hard to put down without reading all the way throuh

 

[Britwitch]

Damn, you take a few hours sleep, take your eyes off your thread and look what happens...

Have taken this from the prompt page...

"...your submission can take whatever form you desire – poetry or prose, complete story or a vignette. Erotic or not, serious or light hearted, it’s whatever you want it to be!!"

I'm all for people wanting to challenge themselves as writers, hence setting up the challenge in the first place, but don't want people now thinking they have to only write non-sexual pieces because of a couple of earlier comments.

Write what you want people, whatever you want!

 

[Alana_]

Cosmic Knight just posted a poem, unnamed as of yet, but I think that actually adds to its intrigue.

I'm not into poetry, and don't read it much, so I'm not one to give a very meaningful critique, but I thought this was superb. I got the meaning, which I rarely do with poetry, and I just thought what a beautiful depiction of a girls deflowering. Really beautiful, and sensual.

 

[Cosmic Knight]

Thank you Alana

 

[Ausus_girl13]

CK!

I forgot to comment on yours, and wanted to cause it particularly resonated with me, but nicely done! Although I find the imagery a little hard to grasp, but the word choice and meter is excellent. Nicely done.

 

[Alana_]

I read JaneyRuth's piece, and while I enjoyed it, I didn't see where it tied in with the picture offered for the first exercise. Maybe I missed it, if so I apologize.

I did however like the piece. It was easy read. Simply put, ..nice flow, and the little kick at the end was enough to leave me feeling very sorry for the male lead. I just would have preferred to have seen a link to the picture and mask..But other than that, well done, and welcome to the thread.

 

[Vail_Indigo]

CK, I'd say something about your submission but I'm absolutely hopeless with poetry. It simply bounces off my forehead.
(except for The Waste Land, for some reason)

 

[fuckmeat]

As I'm a little late to this thread, everything I would have said about the entries has already been voiced by someone else. I've had ideas about the picture myself but they've both swiftly descended into predictable cliché.

le sigh

 

[Cosmic Knight]

CK, I'd say something about your submission but I'm absolutely hopeless with poetry. It simply bounces off my forehead.

Me too.

 

[Vail_Indigo]

Me too.

Actually, someone who DOES know poetry said that most contemporary poetry sucks because most contemporary poets don't read poetry.

 

[Cosmic Knight]

Actually, someone who DOES know poetry said that most contemporary poetry sucks because most contemporary poets don't read poetry.

I was just fooling with you to be honest, but, your friend may well be correct.

 

[Vail_Indigo]

I was just fooling with you to be honest, but, your friend may well be correct.

funny, though, I actually know someone who got a MacArthur grant for poetry.

 

[Last_Rider]

CK, that's actually a very good poem. The wording is evocative and flowing. I loved it.

I submitted another work, to the best of my knowledge it's non-sexual. It's very different from what I normally post here and comments/criticisms are welcome.

 

[Vail_Indigo]

(my apologies to all who have submitted recently that I haven't replied about...I've been fairly incapable of reading the past week or two, for some reason)

 

[Cosmic Knight]

If no one else is going to respond to your offering Sophie, then I will.

I really enjoyed your interpretation of the theme, it held me until the end, and I was most impressed.

 

[Last_Rider]

Sophie

I really enjoyed this. The take on the prompt was different, and the whole thing was very well constructed. Kept me interested the whole way through, and your characters weren't flat. Definitely very well done.

 

[SecretSophie]

Thank you both

 

[Britwitch]

Ahem, I have an announcement...

January's Challenge Is Now Closed!

No more pieces please!

February's Challenge Coming Soon!​

Thanks so much to all who joined in, either by writing something or by reading and reviewing. Working on a prompt for next month, if you have something you think could be interesting to use, PM me

Feel free to keep reviewing pieces already submitted... shifts guiltily ...I know I owe a few reviews for the latest submissions...

I had hoped to join in this month's challenge myself but found time and inspiration lacking with Baby Brit's adventures

Once again, thanks so so much to everyone for making my little challenge such a success...

 

[yeishia]

I thought that all of the entries were simply inspiring we have many exceptional writers in this forum, we are so lucky.

I did not feel qualified to comment or critique but have enjoyed every single piece.

I cannot wait to see what you have up your sleeve. as a source of inspiration to fire our respective imaginations for February.

This thread was such a nice idea.