2010 Team Poetry Olympiad Extravaganza

[annaswirls]

you can call it what you want as long as it rhymes

you crack me up.

I am lonely. I miss my team emails. We need to do this again.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

you crack me up.

I am lonely. I miss my team emails. We need to do this again.

again? do you have a masochistic streaaaaaaaaaaaak?!!

 

[Epmd607]

This would be so much awesomer if along with the text of our poems we had each team reading their poem, a guy and girl reading each part to have a performance of poetry battle alongside the text battle. Cuz Bflagsst is just gonna read the poems like Bflagsst would read poems. We should help him out by performing the poems, with a song and dance.

 

[butters]

This would be so much awesomer if along with the text of our poems we had each team reading their poem, a guy and girl reading each part to have a performance of poetry battle alongside the text battle. Cuz Bflagsst is just gonna read the poems like Bflagsst would read poems. We should help him out by performing the poems, with a song and dance.

*step step,kick,flick ... jazz hands*

oh, was i meant to speak, too, at the same time? (*clears throat*


once upon a time .... *jazzhands!*
i compromised.

 

[bflagsst]

This would be so much awesomer if along with the text of our poems we had each team reading their poem, a guy and girl reading each part to have a performance of poetry battle alongside the text battle. Cuz Bflagsst is just gonna read the poems like Bflagsst would read poems. We should help him out by performing the poems, with a song and dance.

This is a pretty good idea, the part about performing the poems. My poetry reading comprehension will just have to do for tomorrow.

Guys and Dolls, you have 13 hours, a coven of hours to send me your poems. I'm glad I was not needed today because I had a boatload of work after shirking yesterday's duty. So, I'll post those poems on this thread once I get both entries. Anyone will be able to comment and criticize the poems tomorrow but I'll only count the votes and voices of people I recognize. You can send your poems via PM or ELECTRONIC MAIL if you think the format will get screwed up over Literotica. If either captain wants my email address PM me.

I look forward to each team's entry/exit.

 

[butters]

This is a pretty good idea, the part about performing the poems. My poetry reading comprehension will just have to do for tomorrow.

Guys and Dolls, you have 13 hours, a coven of hours to send me your poems. I'm glad I was not needed today because I had a boatload of work after shirking yesterday's duty. So, I'll post those poems on this thread once I get both entries. Anyone will be able to comment and criticize the poems tomorrow but I'll only count the votes and voices of people I recognize. You can send your poems via PM or ELECTRONIC MAIL if you think the format will get screwed up over Literotica. If either captain wants my email address PM me.

I look forward to each team's entry/exit.

*smirks*

lemmesee, that makes it finishing at 11am GMT.cool I'll be just about sitting down to a coffee in the cafe with the girls from my last vol jobbie. i'll raise a toast to team Awesome!

 

[butters]

goodnight poets, everywhere

 

[CharleyH]

This is a pretty good idea, the part about performing the poems. My poetry reading comprehension will just have to do for tomorrow.

Guys and Dolls, you have 13 hours, a coven of hours to send me your poems. I'm glad I was not needed today because I had a boatload of work after shirking yesterday's duty. So, I'll post those poems on this thread once I get both entries. Anyone will be able to comment and criticize the poems tomorrow but I'll only count the votes and voices of people I recognize. You can send your poems via PM or ELECTRONIC MAIL if you think the format will get screwed up over Literotica. If either captain wants my email address PM me.

I look forward to each team's entry/exit.

I am all for lending my voice. I have a good one.

This has been an interesting challenge so far, Blfag. I don't find the actual challenge too difficult. In fact, it would be quite simple if I wrote it on my own. However, I am not writing by myself and this is what makes it a challenge. We have put together a good poem, me thinks. I guess we will see how good tomorrow. Remind me what time I need to submit ours?

 

[UnderYourSpell]

*smirks*

lemmesee, that makes it finishing at 11am GMT.cool I'll be just about sitting down to a coffee in the cafe with the girls from my last vol jobbie. i'll raise a toast to team Awesome!

don't go burning your tongue ........ smiles sweetly

 

[bflagsst]

I am all for lending my voice. I have a good one.

This has been an interesting challenge so far, Blfag. I don't find the actual challenge too difficult. In fact, it would be quite simple if I wrote it on my own. However, I am not writing by myself and this is what makes it a challenge. We have put together a good poem, me thinks. I guess we will see how good tomorrow. Remind me what time I need to submit ours?

11 Hours from the time stamp to the left of this post should give you your due time. Which is 6am EST, 11 am British Time, I'm not sure about where you are.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

11 Hours from the time stamp to the left of this post should give you your due time. Which is 6am EST, 11 am British Time, I'm not sure about where you are.

she's in the Port of gals lol >>>>>>>>runs like hell

 

[annaswirls]

again? do you have a masochistic streaaaaaaaaaaaak?!!

um, you just figured that out? I must be further in the closet than I had imagined.

 

[butters]

don't go burning your tongue ........ smiles sweetly

meeeowww i would be toasting our team's participation, stamina, abilities, erm ...fingers .... erm ...yeah. all that stuff

 

[CharleyH]

OK - where do we post?

 

[CharleyH]

alright then - sending the poems to Bflags PM ... need to format a couple of things, but I am here and doing it.

 

[bflagsst]

Exhibit A

Narcissus:

She shared his dreams year after year,
and loved him, even flaws and warts.
She left his side like wind blown straw,
now life is bleak without her there.

He heard the news without a tear,
and did not rage against a God,
nor neighbors nor a passing dog.
Each was spared the brunt of his fear;

All that's left a memory's spear,
a photograph sorrows emit
seeks each nuance and gaze each time
upon the face he holds so dear.

A flower frozen gaunt with fear
deafened by ego, blind to doom
he thirsts what was, to sate his mood
but only tastes the chasm near.

His consciousness will disappear
as life recedes to silent deeps
He comprehends with frightening speed
it is his face he sees so clear.


Echo:

A ghostly witness consciously
ignoring all his vain hubris
while looking over life’s debris
she longs to feel his touch once more.

Shadowed weavers leave off their loom,
and come to give an answer fair,
"Persuade him, you must show you care,
if you would both find joy again."

She whispers words into his dreams
but still he consciously evades her,
a crying heart now grows weaker
an eponym from far away.

He falls then grasps one final breath
She roars, 'Come love, life, come hither!'
His glance ablaze, her hopes on prayer
'Here', he echoes, his arm outstretched.

And finally it ends in death,
for the man whose soul is blinded,
trusting only hubris of mind,
for the unsought, is never found.

 

[bflagsst]

Exhibit B

Narcissus:

I longed for Love, a path to Bliss
And she became my sight, my pride;
I'm lonely now, she is no more
Than a fragrance as I reminisce.

If memory should fail and miss
No glass ball will lift the veils,
Instead I'll stare at my own eyes,
Pretend I'm her so we may kiss.

Some loss turns gain. Some terrors, this:
A purified love's memory
Fogged gracefully with age. But death
That's merely Death forms Hell's abyss.

Daffodil drops—flower phone, hear a hiss
No voice, no word, only waves of woe.
Reflect regret, silent stare, she's not there.
Recollect, bounce back, dismay dismiss.

Pussywillow soft! She left me like this?
My Perfection? A subtle hue gone gray.
Now knocked from center, my orbit sways
Alone, a cross without his criss.


Echo:

As I sought you I seek you still
Between purple petal and waterfall mist.
If wish were will then I am wisp,
Shadow of an echo nearly missed.

You kneel and stare in empty pool.
Eyes blank, no glisten; gaze on glass.
I am here, listen—mind our tryst.
Sense me still, see not only self.

The Dead live perfect recall, dream
Without resentment, unrepressed.
Their love lost history—entranced,
Pristine, long free of mystery.

Your Nemesis refuses me,
So bind your words upon my lips,
Speak that I might speak your wish,
Hear me! find me! Come, let us meet.

I had the choice to stay or leave,
I chose to stay as time permits,
Perchance your ear might pass my lips,
And lift your spirits as you grieve.

 

[bflagsst]

Those who didn't participate in the contest are welcome to give an opinion on whether they like the poems in Exhibit A or those in Exhibit B.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I need a holiday my brain hurts

 

[DrewberryLess]

I love both exhibits, but I am biased because I love poetry.

"Lift your spirits as you grieve" sounds twisty. It still echoes in my ear after I finished reading the poem.

Beautiful poems. Both teams should win! I like the Echo from the second exhibit a little more than the others.

 

[bflagsst]

Anyone is welcome to judge, say which set of poems above you liked best. The criteria for the poems is in the first post if you want to play super duper judge.

 

[LadynStFreknBed]

I thought I would check things out here. Don't have much time because I am in the process of setting up my new computer and banishing my vile, duct-taped laptop.

As far as the rhyme requirements, Exhibit B is much better. Exhibit A has some rhyme issues. I don't believe "year" and "there" are rhymes, much less true or perfect rhymes. To me, "hubris" and "debris" do not rhyme at all (except for being eye rhymes which I don't consider to be the same as slant or imperfect rhyme). Even so, hubris/debris and blinded/mind would not be considered slant rhymes of year/fear in my opinion.

The content of the poems is very good. The teams did a remarkable job with this challenge... and what a challenge! Well done, bflaggy. Both sets of poems have some strong stanzas and blend together very well. So, I have to vote for Exhibit B, because I feel they adhered more closely to the demands of the challenge and ended up with two exceptional poems.

 

[annaswirls]

hey you know you could start a new thread and make it be a voting thread iffin wanted to-- could have it so you could see who voted what to weed out the well, you know.

 

[butters]

I'd like to thank both team captains for what must have been a huge challenge - the co-ordinating of five different voices' to make two coherent poems. NOT an easy task at all.

srsly, guys, well done!

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

I don't even know who all was on the other team.......congrats to you all, whoever you are. X 25 plus for bflag who set the torture up.

x 60 (a dozen red each) for our team.

I hereby swear I will never again participate in a transatlantic challenge, it's just too stressful sitting here on the edge of the world.....