Challenge: The perfect ten.

[Angeline]

sandy wet toes
cold bottle pressed
to my sweaty neck

*****

pink beach towel
yellow beatnik bag
baby oil with iodine

*****

ferris wheel nights
spinning wheels bright
lights prizes kisses
lemonade

 

[ruminator]

cotton candy glistens
crystallized confection
lasting longer now
hairbound.



..........what'd I tell you.?..........don't you listen?..........I swear I don't know why...



......c'mere,........stand still........give me that brush.....

 

[RhymeFairy]

water
showers

tempting the fates

drip
splash

wanna skinny dip...

 

[RhymeFairy]

loaded
with ice
slow
wet licks
goose bumps
arise
slick
(moans)

 

[MRWIGGLEWORM]

Tropical Heaven

orange blossoms
cypress knees
sawgrass shoots
honey bees
tropical heaven!

 

[MRWIGGLEWORM]

Work And Play

work:
worry!
want!
need!
rest!

play:
relax!
enjoy!
reflect!
rest!

 

[quietpoet]

A few haiku-senryu's

For some reason i have stopped writing these. There is true art to the short verse... Great topic!!!!


A rose's petal
reminds of silken fingers
silently talking

Counterfeit feelings
traverse the slippery path
of yesterday's truth

Monochromatic
contrasts fill the landscape.
God rests his palette

Solicitations...
Empty promises of more
that always give less

Deepest love creates
resonant echoes within
innermost chambers

Vistas penetrate
vision's one sided anchor
laughing at the lie

 

[ruminator]

For some reason i have stopped writing these. There is true art to the short verse... Great topic!!!!


A rose's petal
reminds of silken fingers
silently talking

Counterfeit feelings
traverse the slippery path
of yesterday's truth

Monochromatic
contrasts fill the landscape.
God rests his palette

Solicitations...
Empty promises of more
that always give less

Deepest love creates
resonant echoes within
innermost chambers

Vistas penetrate
vision's one sided anchor
laughing at the lie

I think this appeals to me for many of the qualities of short verse. The words have to be carefully chosen. Each word must carry more weight because it has fewer associates to help express it's meaning. I think that's done well here.

 

[RhymeFairy]

truth
truth
tell me
of truth
no more lies
please...

~~~~~~~~~~~~

beauty looks
beckons
from afar
glistenings
radiate
with sunshine
smiles

 

[Remec]

Standing
atop the crest
hoping I'll enjoy
the way down.

 

[Man Ray]

For you...

Your poetry is sublime
so much better
than mine
trendsetter

 

[RhymeFairy]

shaking beds
covers in a whirl
star-crossed loves
rockin'

 

[Remec]

shaking off the
night and slipping away
at dawn's light

 

[RhymeFairy]

dawn, ehh...

plaese shut tha curtains
darlin-hun

need sleep...

 

[Remec]

Nonsense. Come,
I'll energize
you--body, soul--
wake with me.

 

[RhymeFairy]

slow shimmy
body sneaks

pounces

traps

whatch gonna do
now~

 

[Man Ray]

Nude

can only be seen as crude
if you are a prude

 

[Solid Muldoon]

It can't be faked
the pleasure I've taked
being naked.

 

[OceanGoddess]

Delicate fragile silences
shattered by words unspoken,
destruction complete.




The dance of hearts begins,
I trip over your silence.


Telephone lines
can not replace
your face.

 

[Remec]

slow shimmy
body sneaks

pounces

traps

whatch gonna do
now~

put up token
resistance as a
free hand goes
wandering

 

[RhymeFairy]

eminent emotion
reigns supremely

withstanding

contemplations' hand,

stroking
firestorms'
embersome shaft

 

[Remec]

steady friction
stroking
stoking
getting ready fireplace,
kindling, and fuel

 

[Guest]

how can I say
exactly
how I feel
in ten?

 

[RhymeFairy]

cool clean
cotton sheets
tangled bumpings

shaved

endless

~ legs

glide

 

[Man Ray]

ten words
edited
compressed
reduced
trimmed
meaningful
`I like you...`