Comments That Make Your Day

[StillStunned]

Two new comments on my most recent stories.

@Rob_Royale on Full Moon on Old Jack's Hill:

Supernaturally hot. Very enjoyable.

And @AlexFourways on The Dome 04: Mothers:

Very nice romantic and sexy scene with the Mothers and also that Mother may take her eye of the ball.
Also I like that there was a touching of base with Xero and Raurri, to tie this part into the story.
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Thanks for reading and commenting, both of you!

@ALEX: Earlier in the story I messed up the timing when skipping between characters, and I really wanted to show "the morning after" for Xero and Raurri. Chronologically it had to take place before the afternoon's events inside the Dome, so I had to include it here. But I agree with you that it ties everything together more closely. Next chapter will be mostly Xero, but also a Ro-Gara scene.

 

[MelissaBaby]

Last year, my story, If Only In My Dreams won the Winter Holiday contest. But the greater prize was the response I got from some very special readers.

The story takes place on Christmas Eve and Christmas morning in 1945. Joe, a lonely soldier just back from Europe, boards a train in Philadelphia, heading home to an uncertain future in Chicago. When the train makes a stop in Pittsburgh, Dorothy, a woman who has been working there in a defense plant, gets on the train. They meet and...well, go read the story.

I was overwhelmed by some of the comments I received. This Christmas, they have started to come again.

This is why I write. Not for money, or prizes. For this.

 

[sinfantasy]

My story "His Love Lost, His Pen Found" received a lot of hate. I think it's a good short piece for 1200 words but not up to the taste of L/W readers. Maybe I should have submitted it in some other category.

While I was feeling bad about the submission, the below comment assured me that at least a few people liked it for its creative flavor.

other2other1 - 2 months ago
It was a sad tale; he was an idiot, and likely, she had a lot of pride. That she ended up in the arms of her best friend shows that there was always a part of her heart that he never had.
Well written, and I liked the poem at the end.

EastCoaster12 months ago
Well played... a tale of ultimate self-destruction, capped off with a poem telling the tale in summary... and pain.

These few good comments helped to negate the other hateful comments there.

 

[StillStunned]

You had me at the tag "lesbian"... so was mildly disappointed that there wasn't much. Still, it was a tale well told.

Oops! Sorry, @THBGato!

 

[MillieDynamite]

Did someone say lesbian? I know a couple of those.

Oops! Sorry, @THBGato!

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Did someone say lesbian? I know a couple of those.

Yes you do. Good ones, too. I'd also recommend a perusal of stories by @onehitwanda

 

[THBGato]

Did someone say lesbian? I know a couple of those.

Think I've read (and commented) on yours already, haven't I?

Oops! Sorry, @THBGato

Hey, it was a very well written story. I don't expect all writers to cater to my whims, and I certainly don't feel like reading it was a waste of time.

 

[THBGato]

Yes you do. Good ones, too. I'd also recommend a perusal of stories by @onehitwanda

Very first author I followed. Read all of hers multiple times.

 

[MillieDynamite]

Probably, and more to the point, actually, yes, you did!!!

Think I've read (and commented) on yours already, haven't I?



Hey, it was a very well written story. I don't expect all writers to cater to my whims, and I certainly don't feel like reading it was a waste of time.

Yeah, I do, indeed... Oh, that makes me think of Stargate. "Indeed," Teal'c said.

Yes you do. Good ones, too. I'd also recommend a perusal of stories by @onehitwanda

 

[Rob_Royale]

This one made me smile today. It's like my whole goal as a writer of erotica.

Anonymous about 6 hours ago
Loved the end!!! Porn that tells a story!!!

 

[nice90sguy]

I probably worked harder on my story game that I've done on most of my stories, and was really suprised and pretty disappointed that it's got a really low rating. I think (hope) it's simply because findom kinks are a big turn-off for a lot of people, and not what people look for in an interactive story. It needed some bugfixes, balance adjustment and quite a few other changes, and I also promised a second part. But the effort required, coupled with the low rating, completely demotivated me to continue.

But then I get a comment like this, where someone "gets it", and it completely turns things around for me. So because of this one comment, I think "yeah, fuck the haters and the mehs, it was actually a pretty good piece of work":

This is the absolute hottest thing I think I have ever come across. This needs to be finished!! I absolutely love the daily grind and how it almost feels like being dominated and then all the messaging and money balance!! I love how the game finds little ways to dominate you, tagging the videos and typing the message both just get me so hard

It just goes to show that I care a lot more about comments and ratings that I admit to myself!

 

[StillStunned]

It's been a while since I got any feedback on The Walled Garden, but @Rob_Royale just left this:

That was hot as hell! Loved it.

Thanks! It was particularly satisfying to write about women as the voyeurs.

 

[MrStill]

Going back to the tentacles for a moment, ages ago when the internet was fun there was the definitive tentacle sex illustrations collection hosted by, I think, an arty Swiss woman. On the chance that some vestige of it still exists, can anyone remember what it was called? Or perhaps, the URL?

 

[PennyThompson]

I've been super lucky and thankful to have some wonderful followers who have been giving me nice feedback, one that really made me grin recently was on my latest story, "You're a Switch, Penny Thompson!"

From @Migbird

That piece like the others uniquely interesting (understatement). You are surrounding Penny with an array of 3-dimensional, delightful characters — could easily envision as a sitcom with a message. And the sex revealing of message and characters, never gratuitous (which is not to say the sex wasn’t wonderfully erotic). Thanks for sharing your fertile imagination.

 

[Publius68]

So Anonny popped off this little gem:

"Is poor widdle Fwance still butthurt" is still my all time FAVORITE line on this Website!

I had so much fun with writing that scene myself... And the comment implies that they have read the story more than once.

Also, I corrected his/her quote when reproducing it here because I wanted to. So there.

 

[StillStunned]

@dontyouwishyouknew, clearly a reader of few words but impeccable taste, on The Dome 03: Over the Edge:

Great story!

And @Actingup, on Upstream:

Beautiful! Prog-era Genesis could have used this as a song intro…

(Now I can't stop thinking of the Spitting Image puppets.)

And on Full Moon on Old Jack's Hill:

Superbly erotic, with tentacled fun to boot! I love the way that you build the soundscape alongside the visuals. I suppose that you could argue that the tentacles don’t really ‘fit’ the atmospherics of the story, but on the other hand they fit the girls in terms of a warm-up for old Jack so… long may they reign,.

Yes, I was aware that the tentacles were a bit out of place, but they're silly fun. And they give the story a bit more meat, so to speak, than if it was just Old Jack.

Thanks for reading and commenting, both of you!

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

@dontyouwishyouknew, clearly a reader of few words but impeccable taste, on The Dome 03: Over the Edge:


And @Actingup, on Upstream:

(Now I can't stop thinking of the Spitting Image puppets.)

And on Full Moon on Old Jack's Hill:

Yes, I was aware that the tentacles were a bit out of place, but they're silly fun. And they give the story a bit more meat, so to speak, than if it was just Old Jack.

Thanks for reading and commenting, both of you!

RE: tentacles... We need a quick addendum, Cthulhu and Old Jack comparing notes on the offerings...

 

[StillStunned]

RE: tentacles... We need a quick addendum, Cthulhu and Old Jack comparing notes on the offerings...

Or perhaps Homer's lost epic the Tentacliad, about the tragic Greek hero Tentacles.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Or perhaps Homer's lost epic the Tentacliad, about the tragic Greek hero Tentacles.

I thought that Greek hero was Testicles

 

[StillStunned]

I thought that Greek hero was Testicles

That's a completely different Greek hero. Tentacles was an explorer, always venturing into places unknown. Testicles was more rounded, and quite vulnerable, but basically he just hung around.

 

[yowser]

I thought that Greek hero was Testicles

You're thinking of the Sword of Testocles.

 

[StillStunned]

There was also Hairitesticles. Although scholars believe he was just a Greekified version of the Phoenician hero Hairibal.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

That's a completely different Greek hero. Tentacles was an explorer, always venturing into places unknown. Testicles was more rounded, and quite vulnerable, but basically he just hung around.

I thought he was dipped in the river Styx and he and his brother penistocles did that whole Trojan thing...
I could be fucking it up though, or maybe taking a piss on the facts...

 

[StillStunned]

No, Fax was the legendary Gallic hero. Quite popular for a while, but forgotten by later generations.

 

[Actingup]

@dontyouwishyouknew, clearly a reader of few words but impeccable taste, on The Dome 03: Over the Edge:


And @Actingup, on Upstream:

(Now I can't stop thinking of the Spitting Image puppets.)

And on Full Moon on Old Jack's Hill:

Yes, I was aware that the tentacles were a bit out of place, but they're silly fun. And they give the story a bit more meat, so to speak, than if it was just Old Jack.

Thanks for reading and commenting, both of you!

I was probably being a bit cryptic on the Genesis comment!

I was somehow reminded of Peter Gabriel’s habit of telling short stories while the band retuned / reset (eg

), which also led me to thinking of the stories that he could have told around their song ‘The Lamia’, where the hero meets three mysterious women in a pool…