Companion to the 5 Senses Challenge

[Angeline]

Thanks, Angie, for the spontaneous night over at Motel Six.

'Steakhouse fucking'! That's bith at once, raw & well done?

More medium than well done imho, but how could I resist your eloquent plea for a poem?! I hope it can get the thread moving again.

 

[Piscator]

Bump

 

[todski28]

Calli that was so fucking good in all the right/wrong ways

Perfect roller coaster ride

 

[Lyricalli]

Calli that was so fucking good in all the right/wrong ways

Perfect roller coaster ride

Thank you. I haven't written much more than a grocery list in I don't know how long, but between what you wrote and your list, something clicked. Could've gone into live writes if I hadn't tweaked it in a couple places. Appreciate the nudge to my muse.

 

[Piscator]

Thank you. I haven't written much more than a grocery list in I don't know how long, but between what you wrote and your list, something clicked. Could've gone into live writes if I hadn't tweaked it in a couple places. Appreciate the nudge to my muse.

ditto

 

[Piscator]

Angie - I really liked Shakespeare but I'd trim the name to Shaky, asI read somewhere that dogs respond welll to two syllable names. We've just acquired Sunny ajust under 2 y old Border Collie/German Shepherd /?? mix who knows his name but really needs work on recall.

 

[Angeline]

Angie - I really liked Shakespeare but I'd trim the name to Shaky, asI read somewhere that dogs respond welll to two syllable names. We've just acquired Sunny ajust under 2 y old Border Collie/German Shepherd /?? mix who knows his name but really needs work on recall.

Thank you P'tor. I'm glad you liked the poem. It's basically true. I had a much-loved dog who I named Shakespeare (Shake for short). When I adopted him from a shelter, at seven weeks old, he was five pounds. He was a German Shepherd/Great Dane mix who grew to about 150 pounds. At that time I was living about four blocks from a lake, and Shake loved to escape our walks and race to the lake with me in hot pursuit. Then I'd have to coax/drag that big fool home. It was a workout lol. But he was a great dog, very chill, let my young kids climb all over him, even ride him a little!


Congrats on Sunny. I'll bet he's a real smartie, with that mix of breeds. I now have an image in my mind of him accompanying you on fishing trips!

 

[Angeline]

Todski your last entry is so damn good. I kind of want you to end it on the "fun" line cause it's such a gut punch, but I understand why you added the last bit. But...maybe that's already inherent across the poem. Just a thought.

 

[29wordsforsnow]

A Mid-alphabet Letter on Maude.

 

[todski28]

Todski your last entry is so damn good. I kind of want you to end it on the "fun" line cause it's such a gut punch, but I understand why you added the last bit. But...maybe that's already inherent across the poem. Just a thought.

I was reaching a bit in that last stanza, trying to do too much I think, I made some edits and put it in my trash thread in the poets hangout, I may try do something more with it, or it may just stay in the trash.

Thanks for the suggestions I’ll think on them for the future potential edits,

The use of the name “ashleigh” I was trying to tie it in to the beginning of the piece with wordplay on the word ashtray, but I think the middle overshadows my intention.

 

[Piscator]

Re: Canned Heat See a Green Flash

Damn, haven't thought of them for a long long while. I still have one of their albums somewhere in my well scratched vinyl collection.

 

[Lyricalli]

@Piscator
1960’s Family Road trip --- Really enjoyed the vivid story telling in this. Well done!

@Winter_Fare
The piece just before the above was lovely, and resonated quite deeply for me in some spots. A little Killing Me Softly in your poetry with that one.

 

[Winter_Fare]

@Piscator
1960’s Family Road trip --- Really enjoyed the vivid story telling in this. Well done!

Seconded!

@Winter_Fare
The piece just before the above was lovely, and resonated quite deeply for me in some spots. A little Killing Me Softly in your poetry with that one.

Glad you liked it. My poetry brain is on a go slow at the mo... It was nice to have a prompt.

 

[Lyricalli]

@29wordsforsnow Thanks for the Wow react on my 5 Senses piece.

 

[29wordsforsnow]

@29wordsforsnow Thanks for the Wow react on my 5 Senses piece.

The mental image your words inspired looked quite intense. So, definitely a 'WOW'.

 

[Lyricalli]

The mental image your words inspired looked quite intense. So, definitely a 'WOW'.

It's interesting the directions that those prompts can take you, based on the day you see them, the mood you're in, etc. It's one of my favorite threads for that reason.

 

[29wordsforsnow]

It's interesting the directions that those prompts can take you, based on the day you see them, the mood you're in, etc. It's one of my favorite threads for that reason.

Also looking at what people make of one's prompts...I'm always astonished about the results, very far - and so much better - from what came to my mind.

 

[Lyricalli]

Also looking at what people make of one's prompts...I'm always astonished about the results, very far - and so much better - from what came to my mind.

Yes, I love that. You have a sort of image of where a poem might go with the words you leave behind, then someone can come along and takes it in a direction you never would've imagined. It's a wonderful thread to go back and read from any point in time. It's one of the ones that I read in its entirety when I found my way to the poetry board, before I'd even started to write poetry. Pretty sure one of my earliest poems was done in 5 Senses.

 

[29wordsforsnow]

Munching on toasted pine nuts...

Damn, @Lyricalli, how to top this?
It was fun, erotic and so sensesational.
But the most important question, any chance to get that pesto recipe?

 

[Lyricalli]

Damn, @Lyricalli, how to top this?
It was fun, erotic and so sensesational.
But the most important question, any chance to get that pesto recipe?

You're too kind, but thank you

As to pesto.. I have no set recipe. I think most that you find on the net are pretty similar to start, then it's all to taste from there. It's never the same twice, and I probably use more garlic than many would find appealing.

 

[butters]

sounds
filtering through the edges of another
red-gold sunset

first off, so great to see remec back posting... can't recall the reason why but his name always conjures thoughts of cats and rain and oily blacktop

second, what a fantastic phrase, touching on that whole 'poetry's an attempt to capture a sense of a thing in words that's almost impossible to capture in words'

 

[29wordsforsnow]

Bright, hazed sun. Apple...

That was quite close to a five words poem, Voboy! You really set the stakes high for the shortest in that thread.

 

[Voboy]

That was quite close to a five words poem, Voboy! You really set the stakes high for the shortest in that thread.

Lol. I didn't know there was another thread for commentary.

Hi, all. This is a fun little exercise.

 

[Lyricalli]

Lol. I didn't know there was another thread for commentary.

Hi, all. This is a fun little exercise.

Since your first poem in Five Senses, I've wanted to welcome you to our little forum. I've got a lot to catch up on, and it's been slow going. It's one of my favorite threads, and it is a fun, interesting exercise. There's some really good stuff in it, and I'm glad to see it getting some attention and activity.

 

[Lyricalli]

Life At Eleven

Loved the sweetness and nostalgia in this. It brought back fond memories of my ten-speed and riding around the neighborhood oh so long ago.

Lighthouse, seagull, coconut, rope, pineapple

I really enjoyed the way you used all the prompt words in every stanza. It made the read quite playful.

beneath this starry, starry sky

I can't even explain why I liked this so much yet, but it really hit me, and has me pondering some things, like the decadence of suicide, for instance. Bit of a challenge to work through with "American Pie" playing in my head demanding attention.