New Poetry Recommendations

[twelveoone]

Do we need a New Poetry Unrecommendation thread? Oh well I don't wish to be rude but I do think Reckless is showing how to write a poem (?) using every cliché in the book

all these poem's have touched my soul's
Rofl
Good catch UYS - where was I?
I's
Second's
the Unrecommendation's= this has to be another put on.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

all these poem's have touched my soul's
Rofl
Good catch UYS - where was I?
I's
Second's
the Unrecommendation's= this has to be another put on.

you need to read 'The Voyeur' if you want an apostrophe overdose

 

[butters]

Katherine Spat by greenmountaineer ... offers an uncomfortable insight into the hearts of those still troubled by 'the troubles'. there's a passion here, that might be veiled for day-to-day society, but it's as part of this Katherine as breathing. relevant and topical, and written with an unflinching understanding of human nature.


Tomato Pie by ShannonNiggins ... fresh!

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

Slim pickings............

Perhaps I'm getting jaded - only two to recommend today, the silicon desert by seannelson and The diary of Cpt Picard by greenmountaineer but, as I said in one of my comments, it's these kinds of poems that keep me coming back.

 

[twelveoone]

slim pickens

Tess, this is
slim pickens

a joke
but on
who???

BTW
byTristesse2
has two

Spring Tide

and

Winter Kitchen

seasonal thngs...but better than the serial dumplings, from a host of non commentators

catch and release
byWillowedCabin
is interesting,
despite it being about puke

which is a sequeway for the long hot weekend if you're lucky, so in between your beers, remember poetry, because not only is prose poetry dead, all poetry is dead. No more. Like flat lined, baby. As flat as some of the brain waves around here. Hello, anon, a wink and a giggle.

Hey, where'd Major Kong go?

 

[twelveoone]

Hoo-ray

See they return
bySweetOblivion

three cheers
1. it's not spidey
2. it's not the same ol same ol goddam sonnet
3. it's not bad, how good is it? I haven't made up my mind

I am seconding my own recommend on

Spring Tide
byTristesse2
which is better than I thought (always a good thing when something bothers you enough to go back). This does a nice turn into unexpected territory. Pay attention new writers.

Peach
by101 (no relationship)
I'm giving the benefit of the doubt, it is simple, but the juxtaposition of the two stanzas does something.

Special mention to

simply__me
who has a series of new submissions, but does something unlike most. He(?) gets off his ass and comments.

Wow, what a novel idea.

Gawd, reading is such a chore
I'd rather write and be a bore
Until Literotica is no more
but a haven for cluster fuckers
and dainty gloved assplugs

 

[ishtat]

Tess, this is
slim pickens

a joke
but on
who???

BTW
byTristesse2
has two

Spring Tide

and

Winter Kitchen

seasonal thngs...but better than the serial dumplings, from a host of non commentators

catch and release
byWillowedCabin
is interesting,
despite it being about puke

which is a sequeway for the long hot weekend if you're lucky, so in between your beers, remember poetry, because not only is prose poetry dead, all poetry is dead. No more. Like flat lined, baby. As flat as some of the brain waves around here. Hello, anon, a wink and a giggle.

Hey, where'd Major Kong go?

Good recommendations 1201, I always read T2 but have not seen any of Willowed Cabin's writing before. I went through all her poems, Some of it is very very good, but (she?) is inconsistent, with one total stinker -- but definitely worth following.

 

[twelveoone]

BTW, thank you ishtat
for your comment on
byTristesse2's

On "Two Nudes"
Excerpt:
There is a lassitude in her flaccid breasts,
his wrinkled gut and listless cock,
tedium evident in his myopic eyes.

Ok, if that isn't a shiveler to start with...but sometimes the mark of a good poet is what you can get away with, do the words fit? (thank you again. ishtat)

Highly recommended, although I wouldn't advise emulation. Unless you are a careful as tristess.

Crone

byoneiria

an E

Is also recommended, although, I'm not going to pretend I understand it, I feel I'm missing something, which often is the case in things that are better then it seems.

I would also like to commend Desejo, who seems to have ramped up on his commentary. Thus scratching him off the serial dumper list. Keep up the good work.

 

[twelveoone]

Well, well, Poetry in New Poems.

greenmountaineer (who most would agree, is one of the better...)

Waiting for God at the Port Authority

offers one of his better, this one doesn't overreach, no false notes, all true, if a little gritty. You know how I hate gritty
excerpt:

Toe Jam who doesn't wear shoes in summer
has two black eyes and ankle chains
"and they broke my freakin' nose" he said
to the judge at Monday's arraignment.


Chat
byDesejo

Be careful with this one, there may be a slight trick. If so, I question the effectiveness of it. But worth the time to read.


Weakness
byzack_constantine

A writer I am totally unfamiliar with, but piques my interest.

The others
his enormous cock (not a haiku)
byKaishaku
WTF??? Has to be something more to this. A political statement?

Such a wrench
by
serpentwrap
who has something turned off, for whatever reason.

AND no serial dumpers.

 

[ishtat]

Crone

byoneiria

an E

Is also recommended, although, I'm not going to pretend I understand it, I feel I'm missing something, which often is the case in things that are better then it seems.(end quote from 1201)

I'm pretty much with 1201 and Greenmountaineer on this one in thinking we don't quite understand. It's worth going through Onieria's other poems, there are some signposts there, this for example.

http://www.literotica.com/p/angels-8. "

There's also a bit of flotsam.

 

[butters]

Neon Subtlety's Noble Gas
a clever, light hand used in this write - neon's developed hand over fist since i first read him.

 

[twelveoone]

Neon Subtlety's Noble Gas
a clever, light hand used in this write - neon's developed hand over fist since i first read him.

Thank you chip, chemical background was stopping me cold. It deserved a second opin. Seconded, I guess. Noble gases are inert. With the possible exception of some fluorine compounds, they don't combine. Run a charge though them, you do get nice colours. And Radon just sits around and decays, killing you on the way. What comes in off the page always has unintended consequences. Chemical background stopped me cold.

Now with another disclaimer. The following, I do have a pro bias to.

What Now Canute!
bybogusagain
with the proviso it is worth looking up Canute, I am assuming most non-brits might not know.
Certainly more interesting than the Georgies.
excerpt:
what now? now this has been visited upon us!
much maligned Canute knew he couldn't hold back the tide

Penelope's Story
byPoissonSurLaLune
excerpt

Pleasing suitors leer about her
cunning crass and craven friends
ingratiators waiting, sneer
at the thought of truer ends.

the sugar boys
bysimply__me

well if you liked Sgt. Pepper's and the 60's...you might flashback

Personally I prefer coke and polyester, or Oxycontin and right wing radio

Seriously, a good poem, other people think so.

And without the bias disclaimer.
Shadows
byoneiria
oneria tried this trick once before ( I think) here it works. I've used it along time ago, You'll have to read it, to find out what the fuck I'm talking about
Highly recommended. I like it better than the E.

a feminist on her balcony
byWillowedCabin
disclaimer, I'm not a woman. I get an image of Mussolini with hair.

Hosanna in the highest!
it is the eastern gate,
and she, our Artemis,
dances
feral and abandoned,

I won't spoil the rest of the stanza, which stands out.

 

[twelveoone]

Some more mentions
Church Basement
bycavu182

and this person is worth a look, I think

and I'm sure I missed a few. One serial dumper that got visited by two anons, I usually only get one, I'm jealous. Spidey's back with one, I think he's getting better.
That's my agenda for the day.

 

[twelveoone]

let there be light
by chipbutty

this one bothers me, (always a good sign)
I am up against a double prejudice of mine (I admit)
here is an excerpt

waking in the dark
in the dead
in the heart-choke, breath-broke
night
blind

this section, typifies all that is right with the poem, sonics, a bit of ambiguity as to how it should be read. I am at a loss, outside of recommending it.

and taking the time to commend live4passion for what I perceive is an excellent suggestion on a new poets work. jthserra also, and the usual gang.

sometimes the comments are more important than the poetry

 

[twelveoone]

When I scanned New Poems, my first thought on seeing an author come over to poetry was "Oh God emotion laded tripe, with an adoring fan club"

Wrong, no fan club, at least not yet. I"m thinking about it though. When she learns to write poetry. She is a very good writer.

CeliaisAliena

Has three up, all three enjoyable reads. (Big mistake, CA, spread 'em out)
I left some repetitive blah, blah also know as comments on two of them.

Grad School Mixer

This one I just love.
I love it when I'm wrong.

 

[twelveoone]

I wish to talk about love, I have been feeling it, the love of my fellows.

And thereforth #1 on the love train

Dead End
byKaishaku

a man you can lose your head over.

samsara begins

Both of the above threaten to offload heaps of latent philosophical "truths" to the reader. Kaishaku may threaten to unload more, but that's just his name.

This one doesn't. I know that. Anon told me, most of the comment above was stolen from him. I agree this is a good poem.

Come to Me
byUnderYourSpell

simple, direct, understated, does not descend to the trite.

The following poem bothers me (always a good sign, means I pay attention more.)

Silence of the early morning
byPhxray54

This is not my type of poem, I do wish I was there. So it affects me.

_____________________________________________________

When I decide to do new poems, I do read what is out there. No more.

 

[greenmountaineer]

I think serpent wrap's Ode to HST is worth a visit. Too bad the poet isn't accepting comments.

I'm still trying to figure out what HST means (Hubble Space Telescope?)

 

[serpentwrap]

My bad. I should have put in an explanation of HST. For those who might not be familiar, HST is Hunter S Thompson, the famous writer who lived and wrote on his terms. He was one of teh prime exponents of what is known as Gonzo Journalism. In addition to being a journalist, he also wrote some books, the most famous of them bing Fear and Loathing series (Fear & Loathing In :Las Vagas, In Search of an American Dream, In the Campaign Trail, etc.) He partnered with a famous illustrator called Ralph Steadman whose work in Fear & Loathing series is absolutely delightful. They experimented with lots of drugs and substances and lived to tell the tale. He wrote brilliant columns towards his latter years. He had once declared that the day he felt he had grown old and that his creativity was on teh ebb, he would blow himself up with a shotgun. He was detected with cancer. A few years ago, one morning he went to teh kitchen, and shot himself to death with a shotgun. He lived and died on his terms. I'm a great fan of his. This ide was written while I was mourning his death.

I'm sorry; many of you must be extremely familiar with HST's work. This explanation is only for those who don't know of Hunter.

 

[bogusagain]

@serpentwrap Enjoyed the ride. One could say there is technically a lot wrong with your poem but to put the wrongs right would kill the poem stone dead and I'm no one to talk about things being technically correct. It doesn´t suffer from what Gombrich once called the fault of the faultless. The poem needs to be flawed to keep its energy.

BTW Isn't Gonzo Journalism a contradiction in terms? I still say Hunter T Thompson wasn't so much a journalist as a diarist come travel writer. You certainly couln't trust his analysis, if one can trust anyones come to that.

 

[serpentwrap]

Agreed on all counts, but boy wasn't he heady to read! He could take you through a roller-coaster ride of words and images and action that was inspiring to say the least... At least to me he was!

 

[lorencino]

Raining on your party

Sorry to have to play the grinch here serpentwrap and bogusagain BUT . . .

the place for this kind of chat is a thread called, somewhat pointedly,
"To keep the review thread clean..."

If you follow the above link, all will be explained

 

[simply__me]

This is good

viral words by bogusagain

Some of the comparisons are unique--stuff I haven't heard before. And the Batman line was fun.

I hope it links. Not too sure how to use some of the nuances of this place, yet.

Yes! It works, and I meant to add, if you read any poems today, this should be on your list.

 

[twelveoone]

I Strongy Recommend

and am a little dismayed, somebody else didn't

St. Mary's Amateur Minstrel Show
bygreenmountaineer

If you want to write vignettes, a scene, a setting, this is the way to do. Now I do think he may have to rethink the last few lines. Up to there what he shows, rather clearly, is a portrait of flawed humanity. I thought that is what poetry is about. No false idolization, demonization.
Stop here:
"Ave Maria" at mass.

Proceed, here is has to make a decision.

It was all rather démodé,

As it looks, he is passing judgment. Undoing a fine piece of work, by backing away from it. Hedging. If I understand, what he is trying to do, this is another voice. That needs to be made clearer here.

Now, I am one of the coldest cynical bastards that ever lived.

"a portrait of flawed humanity, false idolization, expectations"
simply__me
has two
Just a Chaotic Love Poem
and
Just a Simple Love Poem
and this is a contraian view
I prefer the more chaotic one. Both may be grievously flawed poetically, but if the object is to make the reader feel

Well, it did. Thank you, I had a wonderful day yesterday, that is what started it.

I'm glad to see others taking over. I hope this is my last post in NPR.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

But I like to read your comments

 

[twelveoone]

But I like to read your comments

Well, you'll love this one.
The second best one of today may have been inadvertently funny.
and speaking thereof
live4passion got one, I wish I had Kaishaku's sword
well, it will give him something to discuss with his friends

oneiria offers grade b horror porn, but not bad enough to be funny.

So the Winner, (with no competition), and really is good poem, is
greenmountaineer
with
Pascal's Wager

but he was the odds on favorite

so to keep you happy just this once, there

Now, if you don't mind I'm going to run off and look at my declining scores

Right fellows.