New Poetry Recommendations

[butters]

Up to now don't bother ..... check again later

hopefully a new crop will be along soon? it's a bad day so far...

 

[twelveoone]

Hey fuck off

I'm doing NPR, what's in it for me?
misanthropy
bybogusagain
who continues his was against the period, but seriously if he publishes I would buy the book.
and at least he leaves comments.

oneiria
has several in a sort of style
Mirage
Ancient Eyes
Thirst
A Beggar's Eyes
Snowflake
Winter Sun
the shotgun approach, some of which seem to work, and some don't. Sic poems and not a comment to be seen from above oneiria

so does rocker226, a shitload, no comments from said

back to serious, or Sirius, if you prefer
The Barn Loft
bypaul_chowder
too short to excerpt
but I like the second stanza

did I mention I was was pissed? did I mention, outside of my monetary pissed offedness, I really don't give a fuck?
thank you for your indulgence, your insolence and your idiocy
as long as you realize these thank yous are going to separate groups

 

[twelveoone]

paul_chowder reprises
Old Poets Hide Behind Glasses
very nicely done,
I like the zebra part.
this hits home for me...
My eyes

had to skip away.
although not his intention

and of course the typo king
responds

did I mention, I really don't give a fuck?
thank you for your indulgence, your insolence and your idiocy
as long as you realize these thank yous are going to separate groups

and laughs

 

[SeattleRain]

Don't Forget This One:

thie moment (iii) by twelveoone

Check out the sound patterns, how they are not obvious and distracting-- they add to the poem.

The last line will make you want to go back to the first. Careful, you might get stuck in a loop.

 

[twelveoone]

excuse the typos

New poems today.
It is unfortunate that some think (or don't, really) that writing poetry, is merely stringing endless sets of cliches together and then shotgunning them over as submissions.

But at least two new poems that have a bit of newness.
an amnesia poem
byseannelson
who does seem to have forgotten a thing or two
three out of four stanzas aren't bad

and Joe Strummer lives....
being English
bybogusagain
excerpt:
...the dead
slipping quietly down to Gravesend, you become one or leave
exiled from my psychosis, the fiction that is England

both poets I admit to being prejudiced in favour of, primarily because they work on the words. Thus they are interesting.

 

[vrosej10]

an amnesia poem by Seannelson
I really love this poem though I am not sure why it works for me.
http://www.literotica.com/p/an-amnesia-poem

Old Poets Hide Behind Glasses by paul_chowder
This is a ripping poem with quirky and cutting imagery.
http://www.literotica.com/p/old-poets-hide-behind-glasses


i know these are double recommends but they are worth reading.

 

[ishtat]

Bogus has an interesting poem today Being English. I think it's flawed but its interesting too, partly because of my perception of the flaws and partly because of some observant lines.

A challenging piece especially to the English.

 

[twelveoone]

Bogus has an interesting poem today Being English. I think it's flawed but its interesting too, partly because of my perception of the flaws and partly because of some observant lines.

A challenging piece especially to the English.

as he said
Being English
with the link, since I recommended it once, consider it now a second and a half

 

[twelveoone]

rhyming couplets, holy smoke
makes me want to fucking choke

well that was frigging easy
One new Poem Today
Mother Jones: March/April

by SeattleRain

SR has lately been working an interesting angle

...Something about that power suit

makes me want to strip you down to knees,
leech your boardroom power as my own.

on stanza continuity, a sort of enjambment.

although
Life in the 70s
byjulybear7
isn't that bad

Ah! We were immortal then!
Until that night--guys skinny dipping in the lake,
a carload of girls gawking, screaming;
one of us failed to re-surface.

and worth a read

The rest appear to be the typical
menage a twit
or on some cases
menage a twat
or meager mange
but as always, I could be wrong.
I should leave some comments before my anon imitation does.
see I can make enemies own by own bonzo, without any help from you

 

[twelveoone]

Another day that makes me wonder about human nature, whether you like it or not poetry is craft, not the expression of yourself. So what do I see, blogetry from a set of people in a form of lonely isolation from the work ethic. So I'm going to recommend a confessional poem. For two reasons, one it is the closest to a poem, and the other...well, because...

Father Keyboard
byseannelson

with the note to new writers:
Avoid the "I" as much as possible, seannelson has some justification here. The "I"is to be avoided, because it perpetuates that "lonely isolation" and sets up a barrier between the writer and the audience. Senna Jawa has wrote about this more than once. Seannelson's use of the "I" ,if you note, tells you what he did and didn't do, and avoids telling you how he feels. And since this is a confessional...

 

[twelveoone]

Check out this guy, three in new poems
WilliamButlerYeats

well worth the trip over

Others, like a SweetOblivion sonnet. I apologize, on the run.
I know, I know, links, but I'm out the door....
best 1201

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Check out this guy, three in new poems
WilliamButlerYeats

well worth the trip over

Others, like a SweetOblivion sonnet. I apologize, on the run.
I know, I know, links, but I'm out the door....
best 1201

Methinks he's too good to be someone who has just walked in off the street!

 

[bronzeage]

Mirage by oneiria

The analogy of the limo and the fox eyeball does not hold, so the metaphors and similes of this piece conflict and fall short.

 

[twelveoone]

again apologies.
The poetry:
SweetOblivion
has two from yesterday
the better one appears to be a sonnet entitled
Subliminally

first two lines:

Subliminally, she'd want something nice
And hard and thick, that is quite tangible;
and the last.
At her request, by a nice, thick, hard book.

nice to see someone into education

the other;
Pull You Push Me
copping a Lebroz, you decide.

Just Doesn't Feel Like Home
byMaria2394
probably qualifies as real poetry, in the fact that there is real emotion behind it, overlooking what I perceive is a bit of an error at the end, it is my favourite for the past two days.

from the 2nd stanza:

Azaleas and pink dogwood
are flowering in the yard
but they aren't my plants-

And we have the curious case of
WilliamButlerYeats
whom UYS thinks "he's too good to be someone who has just walked in off the street!" Ya thinks? He does know his tricks, as a matter of fact I think it is...

anyway he has 4!!!! in two days, all are pretty good, take nothing away from the guy. But he serves as an important lesson for new writers:
From least favourite to most.
Haemon and Antigone
title: is it worth looking up for what is there? my answer no.
pay attention to lines two and six. a semi reprise, a very good trick to use and he does.

The Language of My Friends
1st stanza
Pay attention to thew vowel sounds, good.
He cuts loose in S2
count the oo's
who knew?
In another thread someone had mentioned sound superseding meaning. This comes close to a textbook case. He does know the psychology of sound. Granted the "goose" could be something besides a goose.

The Canadian Geese At Cayuta Creek
this one is quite tricky, alliteration, assonance, repetition, and it says something. Repetition, working backwards
I know
I know
I know
I have
where have I seem that inverted pattern before?

Your Mother's Table
poetry at the simplest level is repetition and change. Here he works it to the concluding line, notice how similar the line is to one closer to the beginning.

As said textbook cases of what new writers should think about. There is a down side, most of it comes off as light verse, so it is missing the depth of his namesake who was considerably better at tricks.
If you haven't read, read. Well worth it.

 

[bronzeage]

ride me now by oneiria

Words do not have a shape, so shaped poems are an illusion. Justify to right or left and the diamonds become a sawtooth edge. Read one aloud and the audience has no idea what shape the lines take on the page. It could be called a contrivance, but no more so than haiku, tanka or other syllable count poems. It is not a negative criticism, just a technical description. This piece pushes the limits of contrivance. This many diamonds on a necklace would be called gaudy. There is a limit in every art.

I read this piece silently and then aloud. The meter is broken in the first line with "If you were only here". "If only you were here, reads smoother. Many of the following lines contain words which break the read in a similar way and seem to be inserted just to maintain the shape. The imagery suffers for it.

One part cannot be overlooked (pardon the reformatting into sawtooth):

"I take your
throbbing clit firmly in my
hot mouth, tugging it
like a great white
shark,"

No. Don't do that. Never combine a clitoris and a shark simile.

 

[butters]

"I take your
throbbing clit firmly in my
hot mouth, tugging it
like a great white
shark,"

No. Don't do that. Never combine a clitoris and a shark simile.

*bites lip*

sound advice.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

ride me now by oneiria

Words do not have a shape, so shaped poems are an illusion. Justify to right or left and the diamonds become a sawtooth edge. Read one aloud and the audience has no idea what shape the lines take on the page. It could be called a contrivance, but no more so than haiku, tanka or other syllable count poems. It is not a negative criticism, just a technical description. This piece pushes the limits of contrivance. This many diamonds on a necklace would be called gaudy. There is a limit in every art.

I read this piece silently and then aloud. The meter is broken in the first line with "If you were only here". "If only you were here, reads smoother. Many of the following lines contain words which break the read in a similar way and seem to be inserted just to maintain the shape. The imagery suffers for it.

One part cannot be overlooked (pardon the reformatting into sawtooth):

"I take your
throbbing clit firmly in my
hot mouth, tugging it
like a great white
shark,"

No. Don't do that. Never combine a clitoris and a shark simile.

*bites lip*

sound advice.

*crosses legs*

 

[bronzeage]

A Question/Challenge by rosesong

Some questions should not be asked, but we can't resist trying to find a new way. "Do you and how much do you love me?" is an irresistible question. The only way to know "how much" is to push past the breaking point. This piece proposes all sorts of limits, hoping to find love just a little over the line.

It is nicely done. I like the line:
"Love me because its simple and nothing else could be simpler than loving me" No matter how difficult love may be, it should feel simple.

 

[ishtat]

A pennance for Angeline

For your foolios, albeit a day late.

http://wwwliterotica.com/p/to-julia Estragon's To Julia

and whilst you're at it read his story called The Poem. It's quite short and worth a look.

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-poem

Next is a Tristesse2 poem which you cannot dislike. Fred's Dead

http://wwwliterotica.com/p/freds-dead

then WilliamButlerYeats with Roman Holiday.

http://wwwliterotica.com/p/roman-holiday-4

and another one, Sleepy Puella

http://www.literotica.com/p/sleepy-puella

And finally, the shy, but ever cuddly 1201, who gives us our Last Year on Earth

http://www.literotica.com/p/last-year-on-earth

There's some good and interesting stuff here.

 

[twelveoone]

One, two, three? definites
Medieval Woman
bygreenmountaineer

easily the most intelligent, and thus may be the least read, since we seem to be suffering from the invasion of the "authors"
excerpt:
"Men may become apothecaries
But women with unguents are witches,"
Alfreda said under her breath

Goodbye my Friend
byUnderYourSpell

simple, nice

Might These High Seas...
byWilliamButlerYeats

to be honest, I don't know what he is doing here, in comments he posted an earlier version, and new writers (and authours) should check him out for the sonics.

and for various forms of self indulgencey
there is always this

two comments on that, if you submit, you can comment, I expect it.
and if you want to write poetry read it, comment and try pushing the 5 button on the poets, who generally are better at this stuff than the "authours". "Tis a far, far, better thing than trolling. As for mine, don't think I didn't catch 'em, and you screwed up. Ha, ha, ha.

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

The poetry gremlins slept late - no new works to oggle today - so far.

A spin found this gem-

Sacrificial Pigeon

byjust pet©

The best looking bum I ever saw was pontifical
He scattered crumbly blessings
on the rainbow oiled pigeons
Their heads bowed in grumbled gratitude
Tiny feet tapping out a devoted tattoo
Dusky beaks seeking greasy droppings
from fingers cracked black
Gray ridged ragged nails
pierce tattered angry cuticles
swollen from neglect
Paws meaty, raw
caressing and teasing
the sacrament
from bread no longer holy
His intent congregation
gathers at his feet
cooing hymns
knowing well
the catechism

 

[theognis]

Today

I'm just recommending today as a good day to check out new poetry. I voted a lot of fives today, I know, but I think most of them were fully justified. I may have been a little generous here and there, but in my opinion there is an unusual amount of quality work to be found in the most recent postings.

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

I recommend Neoplasms- original and thoughtful.

 

[bronzeage]

Old Dick Young Chick by lovers66

This piece would benefit from a careful proof reading to catch the misspellings and typos. The images are vivid and there is no question about what is happening. The last line breaks the mood for no good reason.

 

[butters]

I don't know if anyone recommended this previously, but i was just reading Mike Ivy's Moths and found it quite thought-provoking. yes it has a few blemishes, but it has a kickass mid-section (imo) that felt new to me as a reader.