New Poetry Recommendations

[twelveoone]

Why am I recommending

bybogusagain's
contemplating silvia plath no.1

contemplating silvia plath no.2

contemplating silvia plath no.3

well after reading cult central's condemnation, it just seemed like the right thing to do..
I found all three to be irritating, but I found Plath the same way

seannelson's

Genius

Probably is, but who am I to say?

so
yippie-yi-yo-ki-yay
bycavu182

god I love Bruce Willis yippie-yi-yo-ki-yay, motherfucker
'n'
I'm outta here.

 

[butters]

greenmountaineer's Lament of the Children's Poet Laureate

worth reading for all it makes us consider, and more complex than its brevity would suggest.

do yourselves a favour. *nods*


sweet oblivion's Play No More is also worth anyone's time of day - cleverly constructed and quite sobering in its unflinching insight into the workings of a relationship that likely echoes so many.


Soppho's Ex Gratis is also definitely worth a mention... of their three i've just read, this is probably the strongest imo. i have some quibbles about the end lines, but enjoyed the way it was put together, the imagery, and choices of line-break. it also has a really cool phrase 'in the vertical howling' that tweaks my senses.


sandyb's acts is smartly done, making a list poem both musical and full of movement. clever little write despite it being made up of words we see over and over. her execution is what makes this work.

 

[PoetGuy]

greenmountaineer's Lament of the Children's Poet Laureate

worth reading for all it makes us consider, and more complex than its brevity would suggest.

do yourselves a favour. *nods*

Poet Guy would like to second this recommendation. He found greenmountaineer's poem one of the most interesting pieces he's read at Literotica. The structure of the poem aids the exposition of the theme--something that most poets typically ignore or if they attempt it, don't execute very well.

The poem has flaws, of course, but it is a poem worth studying, in Poet Guy's opinion.

 

[PoetGuy]

Poet Guy suggests you read

• Raincoat by oneiria--an unusual theme, handled well. Vaguely erotic, kind of, and appropriate for the 13th.
• stuff by bogusagain--kind of a rant, of course (one can't quite imagine bogusagain writing a sweet little poem about daffodils or puppies), but a good read with an excellent close.

Namaste.

 

[twelveoone]

The best of the weak?

Week till Saturday, I'm sure I missed some, but I'm picking five, from different perspectives.
From a neoformalist perspective

Lengths of Blue Rope
This is the only one, the others fail, Sonically, metrically, superb!!! It has the poetical pyrotechnics of a bottle rocket fizzling in the fog of self indulgence.

This is a third, remember that.
greenmountaineer's Lament of the Children's Poet Laureate
here is what Poetguy has to say:

Poet Guy would like to second this recommendation. He found greenmountaineer's poem one of the most interesting pieces he's read at Literotica. The structure of the poem aids the exposition of the theme--something that most poets typically ignore or if they attempt it, don't execute very well.

The poem has flaws, of course, but it is a poem worth studying, in Poet Guy's opinion.

OK, this one has the biggest reach, as such it has the most problems. It is my feeling the entire last stanza fails completely, just my opin, and the voicing doesn't seem natural. GM does rather well , considering, and it may be the second most original poem of the five.

Voicing is important for a reader's sense of truth.

This is a second:

Poet Guy suggests you read stuff by bogusagain--kind of a rant, of course (one can't quite imagine bogusagain writing a sweet little poem about daffodils or puppies), but a good read with an excellent close.

The first two stanzas can be read as a bit of a bogus rant, or taken as a contrast to what is driving off, that he lost. Bog, reworking of stock material is superb, as such it is best in that area. Voicing A, but it his voice. The human question A.

Stubbornness
by fridayam
Voicing A, but it his voice. The human question A. It is the only one that doesn't need something, more, less, editing. It is complete.

the fifth, is the most original, a deliberate affront to poetic panties. I even wonder if it is poetry. Here is what Poetguy said about greenmountaineer's poem "B]The structure of the poem aids the exposition of the theme--something that most poets typically ignore or if they attempt it, don't execute very well.[/B]"
hmmmmm, for mine to work at all, I would think...well fuck me
With Friends
it is need of editing, despite the effort to avoid more poetic phrasing, the edits I see it needs support the structure. Voicing...well I'm a comedian, WTF ya want?

Why am I even recommending it? A comment
I love this sort of stuff and would buy it. As to whether it is good poetry as in "Good Poetry", I'm not sure and don't really care.

Five different, as perspective, how would I rate them as compared to the five best of the past two months. They Don't.

But as one is an Odyssey of one going though new poems for the past month, they do shine quite brightly.

And I do try to see them as all different.
Sunday's is not done, I mave have missed others.

 

[twelveoone]

Sunday
a sonnet!

A Single Kiss
bySweetOblivion

there is a good line
And let her eyes shine like the sea-wet stones
and consistency
and evidence of craft

I feel a little more time could be spent with words.

The Flowers
byoneiria

which is everything I expect a Flowers poem should be, different
first line.
When the flowers turn on us,

Monday, Monday
I think the Mamas and Papas said it better

One has a funny title

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

Since no one has stepped up, I'll give it a try...............

First I am not your friend by Desejo is a nice surprise. I nearly passed over it having read previous work by him/her, glad I didn't. This is lovely.

Divine Compass by bronzeage is one of two submitted today. I like this one the best.

My favourite of the 20th is fridayam's Kitchen for its originality.

Lastly Fragile by softsmile. A poem which suits the poet's name.

 

[butters]

i have to second Tess' recommendation of fridayam's Kitchen. original, has impact, loaded with imagery in a crisply written short.


also, Note Origami by Desejo - it has room for improvement but whose work doesn't? this has some magical moments where the reader and author (i believe) connect completely.

 

[butters]

not new, but i want to post this here as it deserves more views/comments

Deep Green EYes Thomas Fucking Jefferson

 

[twelveoone]

Well, mi' Lardies and Ladies some topical stuffing
to lose your heads over
A queen
which suffers much from lack of comment

 

[Neonurotic]

Imagery like a postcard in each stanza: Pier 1 bedroom by Desejo ©

 

[twelveoone]

Well , since you got off your ass Neo
Conjunction
by the reviginated neo himself
BTW Neo, I like the growth

and

Puta

bygreenmountaineer

which you should compare with the skunk hollow one.

Btw one of the reasons, I am avoiding doing NPR, seems retaliation isn't just on mine alone.

There are others...

 

[twelveoone]

Should I or should I not?

A quick lesson in reading:
I can't tell you what to like, you make that decision, you're decision is predicated on what?

Here is an comparison, three poems.

One link
written in 15 minutes

Two over in new poems:

A Way of Thinking

Octet

At this point I am asking, what am I missing? I do seem to miss so much.
Granted, both are so much better than some of the H's I've seen.
As said. I am avoiding doing New Poems Recommendations, this is a mention, and an invitation, show me what is new?

 

[bogusagain]

I had a little time on my hands so I'd thought I'd review a couple of powms and to my surprise, there is a distinct lack of porking poems today. In fact there is only one erotic poem which is The Sub In Me by SweetMaj, which is rather gentle and doesn't quite seem to know what it wants to be. Nothing like giving your longings a separate personality but it does distance the reader somewhat.

I Thought About You Today by julybear7 reminds me of the poems of Alan Jenkins, at least from his collection In The Hothouse for some reason. Of course, not as accomplished otherwise it would be published and Jenkings would be on here.

Then there is the minimalist or almost Oriental style Starbursts by oneiera. Not my style but I know it is some people's cup of tea. I often wonder about such poems, how little can you write and still have something meaningful to communicate but that's a purely personal view.

New Poems

 

[twelveoone]

Vincent 500
bybogusagain
is worth the ride, firstly he inverts the old guy on a bike routine.
Excepts:

Maggie with electric copper mane
brighter than fire, clad in black leather
animal skin stretched over animal

Now here is where it getting interesting, and I wish he develops it more.

the sodium street lights bent like sunflower heads
pollinating the dark suburban streets we cruised

Damn, I wished I had thought of that.

This is a recommendation, but wtf do I know, failing to see the genius that infests this place.

Q. What do you get when you soak a douche bag in water?

A. Sometimes a place on the top lists.

larf, larf.

 

[bronzeage]

Red Rose Petals by ASlaveToBeLoved

Prosetry?

The line between prose and poetry is vague, but this piece is definitely on the prose side of the boundary. This is only a technical point. As prose, It needs editing. The punctuation jumbles the meaning in places and the wording is cluttered.

"With the rose she told me holding it out to me to take that there is no beauty on this earth that could ever compare than to the one that she sees in me."

*With the rose, she told me, holding it out to me to take, no beauty on this earth could compare to the one she sees in me.*

Still clumsy.

*With rose in hand, she tells me, no beauty on this earth could compare to the one she sees in me.*

Punch it again,

*With rose in hand, she says, no bloom on this earth compares to the beauty she sees in me.*

The boundary between prose and poetry exists only in the mind of the reader. Prose must be concise and clear in its imagery, in order to reveal the exact meaning. Poetry is allowed more latitude. While a good poem's imagery should also be clear and concise, it can open vast possibilities of meaning.

 

[bronzeage]

Roses by zombie8cupcake

This is a powerful piece, but it goes over very familiar ground. It is a simple narrative which tells the story, but does not go past being a cautionary tale. It would be much stronger if it explored the "why" of the situation.

 

[twelveoone]

Over in the wasteland (ordinarily I would have linked to my poem "With Friends")
lies a pleasant surprise.

First, no surprise:
byTristesse2 are two,
Recommend both
Northern Lights

and

He

Both of these have rare moments, tess trips a little in "He', but S2 alone is worth the trip.
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I really don't like this sort of thing, subject matter and serial dumping but

Not an Inferno
bybondagesubbie

did manage to answer a question of JUST what does a masochist want
I fooled this one, gave it a five, 'cause it's not bad.
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Now the surprise, an exchange between a serial dumper and yours truly, prompted me to go back and really look,

tango0919

Has seven in new poems
one is a loser, the other six will surprise you, visit at least three, get the feel, you will probably want to check out the rest.

 

[bronzeage]

At Last, Supper by bondagesubbie

The story of a Genitalman.

I suppose it is good to get all of that out of way, up front.

This is a cute piece with a nice light sing-song rhythm to the read.

 

[butters]

i'd like to recommend Masturbation.

behave

chici has written this short, and yet bigger on the inside than the outside. a bit of a tardis-crossed-with-a-walnut-whip poem.

 

[butters]

and greenmountaineer's done it again - achieved something that looks pretty simplistic and yet delivers... history, emotional engagement, borrowed sights/scents/sounds... borrowed, or piggybacking, either way he uses us, the readers, to fill in the gaps.

Wiffle Ball with Harvey Lauber

 

[butters]

Desejo's I shall have you is naughtily nautical, with some luscious phrasing. whilst not keen on the title - something shorter would have worked better, imo, like (for example) Mariner - i have a penchant for this salty ration.

 

[sandyb]

Strong recommend for Easy-Prey by Seattle Rain.

 

[twelveoone]

Strong recommend for Easy-Prey by Seattle Rain.

I second

plus

It's Perfectly Simple

bysteve porter

another writer from the "golden age" of literotica

get past the first couple of lines, which sound like Len Barry (somebody who you never heard of, and which you'll never hear of again)


and

Poetic World

byfridayam

around Line 10 he hits poetic high gear

of course

A Day in the Life of Big Daddy


bygreenmountaineer

who seems to do a demographic study of sorts before he writes.


Now to be perfectly brutal, there are others of some note
that I would feel more kindly too, if they were a little more involved, with something else besides themselves.
Ah, to be a Poet is to be an asshole. I'm just glad I'm not one as some poets have kindly pointed out.

Not that I don't know how..., but I can also do dishonourable mentions, like a poem that does have 12 I's right in a row. Symptomatic of the times. Now I wonder if the same anon, that graced SR, is even going to bother here.

Is the sarcasm just a little much? Collectively, try a little less cowardice, poseury, a little more involvement, and poetry.

i.e. if you write, there is no reason you can't comment.
Anon, I'm sure you have an account, because I'm sure you listed ur fav's Because there ain't that many here. (even less that really read)

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Do we need a New Poetry Unrecommendation thread? Oh well I don't wish to be rude but I do think Reckless is showing how to write a poem (?) using every cliché in the book