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“God of War: Love & Strength”, is my first foray back into the genre of erotic fanfiction after a long hiatus. I am glad it is posted on Lit & disturbed that it currently has low reviews. I put a lot of effort into this story and previous reviews on other sites, also from my alpha reader, back up my belief in the story’s quality. I invite any fans I may have here, old & new, to review the story & overturn the low score if possible. I also encourage voting on all my stories, having faith they will shine despite opposition. Thank you.

https://www.literotica.com/s/god-of-war-love-and-strength
 
I just posted a new celebrity fan fiction story about Brie Larson and would love any thoughts or opinions. It's a lot longer and more ambitious than past stories I've written, and I've written so few and gotten them out so irregularly that I still don't feel super confident in my writing or really know what works or doesn't for people. I very much appreciate anyone taking the time to read it!

https://www.literotica.com/s/bries-blacked-birthday
 
Charlotte_Sin said:
"Kevin and Sister Charlotte's First Time"

https://www.literotica.com/s/kevin-and-sister-charlottes-first

Catholic school virgin nerd Kevin is used by a depraved nun.

It's my first attempt at erotica so any feedback would be most appreciated
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I find this well-written, with a good pace for a short story. It lacks some character, but as a simple version of a classic fantasy it works.

You should edit more closely though. Just reading at normal pace I saw at least 8 mistakes, which is too much distraction in such a short story.

I hope you had fun writing it and will write more. 🙂
 
ExploringSoul said:
I find this well-written, with a good pace for a short story. It lacks some character, but as a simple version of a classic fantasy it works.

You should edit more closely though. Just reading at normal pace I saw at least 8 mistakes, which is too much distraction in such a short story.

I hope you had fun writing it and will write more. 🙂
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Yeah thanks for the advice. I think next time I will edit better. This one was written on the note program of my phone so it was a lot harder than it should have been to edit haha. So next time I will actually use a word processing program on my PC.

The plan going forward is to characterize more as more encounters happen it was really meant to serve as an introduction.

The only thing I'm trying to figure out is if I should focus on it solely for now or post a few real life encounters of mine. Avatter brained adhd I guess haha
 
Charlotte_Sin said:
"Kevin and Sister Charlotte's First Time"

https://www.literotica.com/s/kevin-and-sister-charlottes-first

Catholic school virgin nerd Kevin is used by a depraved nun.

It's my first attempt at erotica so any feedback would be most appreciated
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You had me at "depraved nun". The story was WAY too short, it was such a little tease. Some typos and punctuation issues, but when you switch to a PC that should fix itself. I think you've got some writing chops and you should certainly continue. As for sticking with it, or moving on to a new subject, this depraved nun lover has an opinion, but it's ultimately your decision.

On the subject of real-life encounters, I recommend you still write them as a standard story. Stories that feel autobiographical can come off as the writer bragging and might not do very well. But your results may vary.
Welcome to LitE. I think you'll do fine.
 
Rob_Royale said:
You had me at "depraved nun". The story was WAY too short, it was such a little tease. Some typos and punctuation issues, but when you switch to a PC that should fix itself. I think you've got some writing chops and you should certainly continue. As for sticking with it, or moving on to a new subject, this depraved nun lover has an opinion, but it's ultimately your decision.

On the subject of real-life encounters, I recommend you still write them as a standard story. Stories that feel autobiographical can come off as the writer bragging and might not do very well. But your results may vary.
Welcome to LitE. I think you'll do fine.
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That's actually some really good advice about the life experience ones thank you.

As far as the shortness of the story I kind of wanted to get a feel for people's interest in it before committing to putting down more time on the ideas. Bc I do have a lot in mind for those 2.... ;)
 
Charlotte_Sin said:
That's actually some really good advice about the life experience ones thank you.

As far as the shortness of the story I kind of wanted to get a feel for people's interest in it before committing to putting down more time on the ideas. Bc I do have a lot in mind for those 2.... ;)
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dr_mabeuse said:
I don't write linearly at all. In other words, I don;t make myself finish story #1 before I go on to #2 and so on. At any time I may have a lot of stories hanging around in various stages of completion, from almost done to never-will-be-done.

I'd say strike while the iron is hot and the juice is up. Go with the new one while it's screaming for you to write it.

---dr.M.
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Nor do I.

I found myself burning out when I was writing just Star Trek stories in the RP section of my fleet.

Now I purposely skip around.
 
I've just dropped my first work in the FIRST TIME category. I'm on a quest to indulge in every category (this will be my 3rd) on Literotica to see if the readers can help me find my sweet spot.

This erotica entry is called MY VIRGIN SUMMER and tells the story of four teens who make a pact to lose their virginitys before heading off to college. It's a compact 3 literotica page read.

I love to deliver vivid sexuality in my stories, and this is no exception. Let your imagination wander as to what might happen when sexually charged teens have a house to themselves on the 4th of July. Then read the story, and hopefully, I took some unexpected paths to reach the climax. As always, your response (good or negative) is appreciated.
 
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WendyTrilby said:
I've just dropped my first work in the FIRST TIME category. I'm on a quest to indulge in every category (this will be my 3rd) on Literotica to see if the readers can help me find my sweet spot.

This erotica entry is called MY VIRGIN SUMMER and tells the story of four teens who make a pact to lose their respective virginity before heading off to college. It's a compact 3 literotica page read.

I love to deliver vivid sexuality in my stories, and this is no exception. Let your imagination wander as to what might happen when sexually charged teens have a house to themselves on the 4th of July. Then read the story, and hopefully, I took some unexpected paths to reach the climax. As always, your response (good or negative) is appreciated.
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Oh boy oh boy, Wendy’s at it again.
Bookmarked!
 
When Kitty Boyd was eight years old, her father, returning home from World War Two, gave her a pair of roller skates for her birthday. Her home life wasn't good and she didn't have friends. Skating became her life. When she grows and gets the opportunity to join a roller derby team, she fully realizes what had always made her so different, and that there are other girls like her...

Posted in Novels and Novellas
Lesbian themes
52.6k words.

Queen of the Roller Derby
 
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