snippets: short short stories

[Ferawyn]

only her
by elsol

Beautiful, ElSol.

 

[voyeuresse]

Okay... that was actually flash and the formatting takes things away that a short row lengths give

like this?

Undeniably, some instruments are better than others: voices that
move you, words that stir, but power is in the music. Otherwise,
it's raucous sound, off-key wailing, and rhyming words.

.

 

[elsol]

like this?

Undeniably, some instruments are better than others: voices that
move you, words that stir, but power is in the music. Otherwise,
it's raucous sound, off-key wailing, and rhyming words.

.

Yeap...

There's a tracking problem the wider the column gets... should have chopped the length of the structure down but that could also look funny.

Formatting!

*yeck*

Where's an editor when you them?!?

Sincerely,
elsol

 

[Dar~]

...and as far as this whole catfight thing...​

first of all, i thot my rejoinder to ~Punctuation! My head hurts!~ was hilarious. her first reaction to my post was to tell me i made her head hurt. so i thot it fitting to tell her my first reaction to her post... which is that her closeup of boobs made my eyes hurt. haha ...and it was a comment not on her physical appearance but rather on how overpowering those huge beautifully glowing moonlike globes were to this heterosexual female. i have seen way too many boobs ...lately... ...on here... to even be able to close my eyes at nite without them popping into my vision... thanks to the booby awards and show us your titties threads lately haha
secondly, i reacted like that to her post because im so tired of people only naysaying... engaging in destructive rather than constructive criticism. my last post explains that better i hope. we dont have to pussyfoot but can we not put claws out at first contact?
and finally... i really need some female friends.

soo... lets just everyone take a deep breath... sip some nice herbal tea... and enjoy each others offerings.

​

I wasn't intending to be rude, I sincerely had a small headache from trying to decipher meaning in the piece which, BTW, I read five times trying to understand. I do very much enjoy seeing newbies, and often times feel as if I still am one. EL, I appreciate your concern, but she did ask for opinions and mine was that if there were punctuation then it would be an inteligible story and not just a confounding mess. I often post work to this board expecting to have people give honest replies, but when they are harsh I assume it is because they are sincerely trying to help. If you have learned anything of my character while I have been posting, I would hope it is that I am not a bitchy person. If you do inteed think I am, I appologize for giving you the wrong impression of myself.

Cloudy and Sarah Thank you.

Voyeuresse, pleae do try punctuation, it is very hard to appreciate your "vehicle" when it is as extremely free form as yours is.

 

[Guest]

You're most welcome, Dar.

 

[voyeuresse]

okay... ive been here over a week now and im pretty bruised and battered. my spirit of adventure is dampened. i was very surprised to be the recipient of so much nastyness... and delighted by the kindnesses of some. i feel my interest flagging. my main impression so far is that if you all had known me before i started posting my experiments perhaps i would have been treated gentler and maybe even felt welcome. however not one person seems to have taken any delight in what i have to offer. and since im offering it to share my own delight... to delight others... then it is masochistic for me to continue and a cruelty to you. i am no poet. im not even a writer. im sincerely sorry for having barged in on you all.

 

[voyeuresse]

furthermore, i started on here with that spirit of free playful sharing, but i discovered over the last few days that i was starting to be concerned with your approval whenever i posted anything... even when putting up a word in a word association game. and i cant operate that way... being concerned that my behaviour will being judged. i just wanted to share and learn and be free.

and now i feel like such a fool. my stuff is chicken scratch compared to some of the amazing writing ive seen on here. i dont even feel worthy to say a single thing in any forum anymore. how could i have been so stupid as to think i had anything to offer in a real writers forum? or that anyone would be interested in what i thought. doh.

 

[Ferawyn]

I'm sorry that you feel that way. Personally, I think the only way to get people to know you is to just keep posting and joining in the fun. Even if you run into a few ankles along the way. Most of the people here are grown up enough to deal with it.

Your writing style is not my cup of tea, so I have refrained from commenting on it, but you have had a number of constructive criticisms. They just got mixed in with the responses to the bra comment, which probably made them seem harsher and more hostile then they were.

As another thread is saying, if you don't love yourself, you won't be able to love others and they won't be able to love you. If you write for praise or a reinforcement of your self esteem you are likely to get hurt wherever you go. As long as you enjoy your writing, write it, post it, and to hell with what anyone thinks about it!

Maybe you should just spend some more time looking around for more people who want to experiment with their writing? I know they are here.

<gives you a hug> Don't think too badly of us. We're only human.

 

[English Lady]

voyeuresse -It would be a shame to loose you. You have a place here, I'd hate to think of you being scared off, as really,we've all started off like you, over-awed by the other brilliant minds of the AH. Don't worry, you're imput is worth it.

I'm sirry i've not really addressed your work, honestly, I've been feeling under the weather and so my minds not been sharp enough for reading and commenting on people work. Be free to be yourself, I encourage you to be so in fact.

I also encourage you to roam around the different forums, many have different tones and although you might feel a little uneasy here, you might find yourself more at home in some of the other boards, i started off in the playground then gravitated over here. Don't be quick to jump ship it'd be a real shame if you did

 

[cloudy]

okay... ive been here over a week now and im pretty bruised and battered. my spirit of adventure is dampened. i was very surprised to be the recipient of so much nastyness... and delighted by the kindnesses of some. i feel my interest flagging. my main impression so far is that if you all had known me before i started posting my experiments perhaps i would have been treated gentler and maybe even felt welcome. however not one person seems to have taken any delight in what i have to offer. and since im offering it to share my own delight... to delight others... then it is masochistic for me to continue and a cruelty to you. i am no poet. im not even a writer. im sincerely sorry for having barged in on you all.

If you had not attacked Dar personally in one of your first posts, I think you would have found that sweetsubsarahh and I both are normally very welcoming and encouraging to new people. However, when you come in here so full of yourself that one of your first posts is to attack someone else, I don't think you can reasonably expect to find many friends or supporters.

Criticizing someone's work is very different from criticizing them personally.

My impression of you has nothing to do with what you've written, because I honestly couldn't read it in the form you presented it. You've also unfairly represented us (although not by name) in the Poetry forum.

I'm not hateful simply to be hateful. I am, however, a friend, and a friend does not sit idly by and watch someone they care about personally attacked. I found your reply to Dar to be not in the least bit funny....just rude.

'nuff said.

 

[Stella_Omega]

How about you put each other on your ignore lists- and we go on from there?
This thread has gotten horribly off topic, which was-
posting small snippets that made little stories.

 

[Dar~]

Can't we all just get along?

 

[Guest]

Can't we all just get along?

Someone oughtta paddle your butt.

 

[Dar~]

Someone oughtta paddle your butt.

Are you by any chance volunteering???