words that get on your nerves in erotica

[hmmnmm]

Wow, learning a lot here, but I'd like to make sure I understand something: the key word here would be 'erotica'. Correct? Like, if one is thinking Erotic, that one would be advised to put some of these words in the No-No Box. But if the thoughts shifted away from Erotic...?

 

[WickedEve]

Most lazy tell words are a source of squirms and fidgets. If the poet (or the story-teller) can't find words to make me share the experience described in the piece then what makes the author think I should read on?

That's all, otherwise, any word is fair game.

I agree.
I have words that aren't my first choice, but pretty much any word can work in a poem. The words aren't the problem -- it's the lame poets using them.

 

[WickedEve]

I have a few, but the ones that really get me back clicking are such as these-

splayed

sepia

Sepia? Sepia!
I have a non erotic poem with the phrase "a sepia moment." I love that phrase. lol

 

[Angeline]

Hey, could someone explain the last line? It's hit and miss for me. I don't like the grossness of the third stanza, breathing hole and matter.

Personally I think taking the hyphen out would help a lot. Once you link those words together with punctuation, you limit the way they can be interpreted. And I prefer the image of a hole that's breathing than something that sounds like you'd find it on a sperm whale. Then again if that hole is breathing, it's sort of problematic, isn't it? So maybe more metaphoric would be, well, more pleasant to envision.

 

[WickedEve]

Personally I think taking the hyphen out would help a lot. Once you link those words together with punctuation, you limit the way they can be interpreted. And I prefer the image of a hole that's breathing than something that sounds like you'd find it on a sperm whale. Then again if that hole is breathing, it's sort of problematic, isn't it? So maybe more metaphoric would be, well, more pleasant to envision.

bflagsst's post and your response are funny as shit. Ahh ha ha... sperm whales and grossness of breathing holes and matter.

 

[Angeline]

bflagsst's post and your response are funny as shit. Ahh ha ha... sperm whales and grossness of breathing holes and matter.

"Shit" being the operative term. I generally don't like erotic poems that go too over the top on metaphor, but I don't think there are many good ways to write about assholes. Any assholes. The literal or the figurative ones.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Anusses are erotic but graphic details of other functions are not!

 

[WickedEve]

"Shit" being the operative term. I generally don't like erotic poems that go too over the top on metaphor, but I don't think there are many good ways to write about assholes. Any assholes. The literal or the figurative ones.

I'm almost tempted to write an erotic poem about our friend the asshole, but I'll resist temptation. lol

 

[Angeline]

I'm almost tempted to write an erotic poem about our friend the asshole, but I'll resist temptation. lol

Which one? There are a few assholes I could write about. However my New Year's resolution is specifically not to spend too much time thinking about assholes. I have too many other things to do!

 

[WickedEve]

Which one? There are a few assholes I could write about. However my New Year's resolution is specifically not to spend too much time thinking about assholes. I have too many other things to do!

2010 will be asshole free -- as far as poetry goes. Maybe. Right now I'm working on a silly terzanelle about paper wasps... under a pillow... some man dies... a lot of men die in my poems.

 

[Angeline]

2010 will be asshole free -- as far as poetry goes. Maybe. Right now I'm working on a silly terzanelle about paper wasps... under a pillow... some man dies... a lot of men die in my poems.

I'm not writing about wasps either. Some of the biggest assholes I've known have been wasps.

I should write a poem, but I'm making lists. I have to go through everything and clean it and pack it and uh maybe I can make poems from the lists. I need a challenge. In fact I promised someone here a challenge. Maybe a same title one? Or the A to Z thing.

Azeleas bargained competing
daily, every flowering green
hindsight. I just knew lifelong
melancholy nevermind other
polemics, questions, reasons.
Such treacherous useless vanity,
wretched excess, your zeal.

I cheated on the X.

ETA: You write about spiders, snakes, wasps and men alot I've noticed.

 

[EroticOrogeny]

Not expecting to write about either, but who knows?
Still trying to complete this year's survivor challenge - just submitted my last form one.

 

[WickedEve]

ETA: You write about spiders, snakes, wasps and men alot I've noticed.

I have issues.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Awwwwwwwww and here was me addressing 'An Ode to the lonely asshole'

 

[Angeline]

Not expecting to write about either, but who knows?
Still trying to complete this year's survivor challenge - just submitted my last form one.

Congrats on finishing all those form poems!

I have issues.

You think I don't know this by now?

Awwwwwwwww and here was me addressing 'An Ode to the lonely asshole'

Honey you can write whatever you want here. Hey, you're the Survivor Queen aren't you?

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Congrats on finishing all those form poems!



You think I don't know this by now?



Honey you can write whatever you want here. Hey, you're the Survivor Queen aren't you?

not until it's official, I am still afraid somebody will snatch it away

 

[EroticOrogeny]

not until it's official, I am still afraid somebody will snatch it away

I know the feeling, my place (still trying to complete the triggers) likely secure, but a flurry of poems could come.

 

[Angeline]

not until it's official, I am still afraid somebody will snatch it away

Well heaven knows it won't be by me lol. I know Tzara has given you a run for your money, but you have more poems overall, I believe. And there's only a few days to go. I see a prize in your future.

 

[EroticOrogeny]

Well heaven knows it won't be by me lol. I know Tzara has given you a run for your money, but you have more poems overall, I believe. And there's only a few days to go. I see a prize in your future.

Pushkine (not Tzara) had been leading by a bit when he pulled out, with UnderYourSpell gaining on him. But even if he put all his poems back on scorecard I don't think he'd be close - he could only get to 110 points at most, plus whatever he could submit in the next few days, putting him in 2nd - maybe I should be worried about him, rather than current 3rd & 4th placeholders.

 

[Angeline]

Pushkine (not Tzara) had been leading by a bit when he pulled out, with UnderYourSpell gaining on him. But even if he put all his poems back on scorecard I don't think he'd be close - he could only get to 110 points at most, plus whatever he could submit in the next few days, putting him in 2nd - maybe I should be worried about him, rather than current 3rd & 4th placeholders.

I believe Pushkine and Tzara are well acquainted.

 

[butters]

Out by the cruel gust that turns them back ...... a fart?

cruel gusts and reddish clinkers

ewwww

Hey, could someone explain the last line? It's hit and miss for me. I don't like the grossness of the third stanza, breathing hole and matter.

Verlaine wrote the octet, Rimbauld the sestet, and I, too, prefer the earlier lines, most especially L1's description. How very poetic
As far as I am aware, the anus is also known in some circles as the guy's pussy, so perhaps it means that though it might also, at the same time, be a barbed dart aimed towards the females who promise but don't give up that particular 'prize'. For me, this starts out as erotic and ends up simply blue, but then it is from the Book of Blue Verse so is probably not pretending to be other than it is.

Wow, learning a lot here, but I'd like to make sure I understand something: the key word here would be 'erotica'. Correct? Like, if one is thinking Erotic, that one would be advised to put some of these words in the No-No Box. But if the thoughts shifted away from Erotic...?

yes. I would imagine so

Personally I think taking the hyphen out would help a lot. Once you link those words together with punctuation, you limit the way they can be interpreted. And I prefer the image of a hole that's breathing than something that sounds like you'd find it on a sperm whale. Then again if that hole is breathing, it's sort of problematic, isn't it? So maybe more metaphoric would be, well, more pleasant to envision.

I think there's another visual link there, Angeline, about the way the - how to put this delicately? - the gape and reactive opening/closing of the holes

lol

there's also some link there to the whale thing, to be found in another poem this time by Craig Raine; I don't know the time-lines so maybe it's a fashion-thing? He also uses a whale reference by incorporating the word ambergris into its last line, ambergris, of course, coming from the sperm whale. Did I just say coming? sigh.

 

[bflagsst]

cruel gusts and reddish clinkers

ewwww


Verlaine wrote the octet, Rimbauld the sestet, and I, too, prefer the earlier lines, most especially L1's description. How very poetic
As far as I am aware, the anus is also known in some circles as the guy's pussy, so perhaps it means that though it might also, at the same time, be a barbed dart aimed towards the females who promise but don't give up that particular 'prize'. For me, this starts out as erotic and ends up simply blue, but then it is from the Book of Blue Verse so is probably not pretending to be other than it is.


yes. I would imagine so

I think there's another visual link there, Angeline, about the way the - how to put this delicately? - the gape and reactive opening/closing of the holes

lol

there's also some link there to the whale thing, to be found in another poem this time by Craig Raine; I don't know the time-lines so maybe it's a fashion-thing? He also uses a whale reference by incorporating the word ambergris into its last line, ambergris, of course, coming from the sperm whale. Did I just say coming? sigh.

'ambergris' is probably the least erotic word

 

[butters]

'ambergris' is probably the least erotic word

lol.
and yet it is an exotic word, a perfumed word, a word for something quite eww but even Blumenthal has taken to using in a cooking extravaganza!

"I fed that famished mouth my ambergris."

from "Arsehole", by Craig Raine



ambergris - costs up to £10,000 per kilo. Heston said: "Pound for pound, ambergris is more expensive than gold."

Sperm whales create it to coat sharp food in their stomachs, then expel it into the sea.

The substance has also been used to make perfume.

Heston tested it on a panto's cast in a chocolate milkshake, then made ambergris and caviar for guests including comedian Arabella Weir and presenter Mariella Frostrup.

The feast was last seen during the reign of Charles II.

Heston said: "It will be the most expensive Christmas dish ever."

Read more: http://www.thesun.co.uk/sol/homepag...e-vomit-for-Christmas-show.html#ixzz0b4iKVMMG

 

[Epmd607]

lol.
and yet it is an exotic word, a perfumed word, a word for something quite eww but even Blumenthal has taken to using in a cooking extravaganza!

"I fed that famished mouth my ambergris."

from "Arsehole", by Craig Raine



ambergris - costs up to £10,000 per kilo. Heston said: "Pound for pound, ambergris is more expensive than gold."

Sperm whales create it to coat sharp food in their stomachs, then expel it into the sea.

The substance has also been used to make perfume.

Heston tested it on a panto's cast in a chocolate milkshake, then made ambergris and caviar for guests including comedian Arabella Weir and presenter Mariella Frostrup.

The feast was last seen during the reign of Charles II.

Heston said: "It will be the most expensive Christmas dish ever."

Read more: http://www.thesun.co.uk/sol/homepag...e-vomit-for-Christmas-show.html#ixzz0b4iKVMMG

Moby Dick is the only time I remember hearing 'ambergris' -- every other page.

"A Martian Sends a Postcard Home"! That was in my literature book in either middle or high school. I don't know what I think of Craig Raine, writing a-hole poems and also lew carroll enigma poems.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

anyone who harvests anything from whales is an arsehole