Words you hate in a sex story

[davion2308]

I'd pay $100 to never have to hear or see the written phrase "mommy-milkers" ever again.

If it's hot to you, cool. I accept you for who you are and what you like. It ain't for me.

 

[Codoc24]

Personally, I love the word cunt. In the right context, it can be so naughty and hot. I can't thing of a word that I don't like but one thing that I don't like is when an author has to say specifically that a man has an 8 inch cock and 12 inches or whatever. Same for the size of a woman's breast, like she has a D cup size breasts. Unless there is a reason to specifically say the size, I prefer them not to do that. I prefer to just say "he had a huge cock" or "she had very large breasts" or "she had small petite breasts". I don't really know why, maybe I like to leave something to the imagination? But that just bugs me when an author does that.

 

[EnonEMoose]

Personally, I love the word cunt. In the right context, it can be so naughty and hot. I can't thing of a word that I don't like but one thing that I don't like is when an author has to say specifically that a man has an 8 inch cock and 12 inches or whatever. Same for the size of a woman's breast, like she has a D cup size breasts. Unless there is a reason to specifically say the size, I prefer them not to do that. I prefer to just say "he had a huge cock" or "she had very large breasts" or "she had small petite breasts". I don't really know why, maybe I like to leave something to the imagination? But that just bugs me when an author does that.

Another one like that which I find amusing is when people write about women's underwear and more often than not describe it as Victoria's Secret. VS sell all different types of patterns and styles as do many other brands and it is rare to see the brand (with some exceptions) on the underwear except on the label. Why do they need to call out VS like it means anything? It's a brand like 100 others and not even a really good one.

 

[NakedNymph]

I know Victoria's secret
And, girl, you wouldn't believe
She's an old man who lives in Ohio
Making money off of girls like me

Cashin' in on body issues
Sellin' skin and bones with big boobs
I know Victoria's secret:
She was made up by a dude

 

[AwkwardlySet]

Mommy and Daddy, when used by adult characters as a sex slang... I understand it is a common fetish here, yet I can't stand to see it

 

[NakedNymph]

Mommy and Daddy, when used by adult characters as a sex slang... I understand it is a common fetish here, yet I can't stand to see it

For me, I feel awkward when they really could be a mommy or daddy. Calling an older man who's not my dad "daddy" - not my speed.

But calling a guy mommy or a girl daddy? Now you've got my attention....

 

[Rob_Royale]

Personally, I love the word cunt. In the right context, it can be so naughty and hot. I can't thing of a word that I don't like but one thing that I don't like is when an author has to say specifically that a man has an 8 inch cock and 12 inches or whatever. Same for the size of a woman's breast, like she has a D cup size breasts. Unless there is a reason to specifically say the size, I prefer them not to do that. I prefer to just say "he had a huge cock" or "she had very large breasts" or "she had small petite breasts". I don't really know why, maybe I like to leave something to the imagination? But that just bugs me when an author does that.

I quite agree. I also like to just use just an adjective like lovely, or beautiful and let the reader's mind decide what they look like.

 

[Rob_Royale]

Something else I find in my own work as well as others is the overuse of he, she, or it. Especially at the start of a sentence. In school, we were taught to limit the use of those words in favor of a proper noun, but I find it hard when I'm writing. When I'm proofreading I do a word search for each instance of the word and I'll see if it's appropriate in each case.

 

[SamScribble]

Something else I find in my own work as well as others is the overuse of he, she, or it. Especially at the start of a sentence. In school, we were taught to limit the use of those words in favor of a proper noun, but I find it hard when I'm writing. When I'm proofreading I do a word search for each instance of the word and I'll see if it's appropriate in each case.

Put aside 99 percent of all instruction you were given at school. If school teachers were writers, they would be writers rather than peddlers of opinion and out-dated 'rules'.

 

[Rob_Royale]

Put aside 99 percent of all instruction you were given at school. If school teachers were writers, they would be writers rather than peddlers of opinion and out-dated 'rules'.

That doesn't make any sense to me. Proper grammar and spelling are the foundation of good writing. How can proper sentence structure and punctuation be outdated? It decides how your writing is understood. I'll continue doing what Mr. Lively beat into us in the 7th grade. It's the difference between good writing and bad.

 

[Lady2020]

Snake when referring to a cock.

 

[ThePitViper]

'Holes'.

Sorry, but a woman is more than a mere collection of holes. If you're too damned lazy to use better descriptions, I have no time for you.

 

[stonedinstilletos]

“Master” when it’s referring to a female dominant. I get some people use this, but it just feels wrong to me.

 

[stickygirl]

Has anyone attempted to write a sample erotic paragraph that avoids all these words? Could be new author's challenge...

 

[Demiurging]

Put aside 99 percent of all instruction you were given at school. If school teachers were writers, they would be writers rather than peddlers of opinion and out-dated 'rules'.

99% of the rules given by teachers are meant to make dozens upon dozens of homework submissions easier to grade. A great deal of it is in fact good advice, but one should cultivate their own understanding of prose to break those rules when it's appropriate to the work. I doubt most of the words in this thread would even be a problem to us if they were integrated well into the story; most of us quick readers don't end up properly reading every single word when we're running along anyway.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

Another one like that which I find amusing is when people write about women's underwear and more often than not describe it as Victoria's Secret. VS sell all different types of patterns and styles as do many other brands and it is rare to see the brand (with some exceptions) on the underwear except on the label. Why do they need to call out VS like it means anything? It's a brand like 100 others and not even a really good one.

Agreed. It's not just porn, loads of people refer to VS as the place to go to get nice-looking underwear in America.

I kind of assumed it would sell classy and slightly upmarket lingerie, like you'd like someone to buy you. Imagine my disappointment when I entered one, to find it full of tacky bright colours and artificial fabrics, and more like a cross between Marks & Spencer, Ann Summers and Tesco than say Rigby & Peller, Bravissimo, LaSenza or Intimissimi...

There's many words that can work once per story, but grate if used more than that IMO. Mounds. Love-button. Ass-pussy. Anal pussy (actually that last one I'm not sure worked even once, but over a dozen times a page...)

 

[Emilymcplugger]

most of us quick readers don't end up properly reading every single word when we're running along anyway.

I have no idea what you mean by that and will be discussing this filthy slander against my good name with my attorney.

 

[NakedNymph]

There's many words that can work once per story, but grate if used more than that IMO. Mounds. Love-button. Ass-pussy. Anal pussy (actually that last one I'm not sure worked even once, but over a dozen times a page...)

ngl the first time I ever heard the word asspussy was in a hentai and I assumed it was a quirk of the translation. I don't think it's ever worked for me

 

[FelHarper]

Mommy and Daddy, when used by adult characters as a sex slang... I understand it is a common fetish here, yet I can't stand to see it

My wife and I watched a BDSM scene where the submissive woman called the dom “Daddy”, something we hadn’t seen before. That really (really) turned my wife on and she started using it in the bedroom, so I soon came to enjoy it myself.

“Mommy”, not so much for me. “Mistress” just works so much better.

 

[EricasDreams]

Agreed. You delicately lick her sensitive pussy lovingly.

Then you pound her wet cunt to orgasm.

The only "beaver" referenced in a story better be building a dam.

Agreed. It should start out as a pretty pussy, and end up a dripping cunt.

 

[bestkeptsecret678]

I have several words I can't stand coming across in a sex story:

Mewled: There was a great series by a fantastic writer on another forum that I truly loved, except for his constant use of "mewled" or "mewling." It made me cringe every time.

Cooed: almost as bad as mewled, but not quite.

Rut / Rutted / Rutting: absolutely terrible term for sex.

Crotch: I just had to go back and edit this word out of one of my own stories. It's just a terrible, ugly word and only works if some asshole character is getting kicked in his.

What are some words you can't stand in your smut?

EDIT: Please don't take this too seriously. I'm not telling people what words they can or cannot use.

I often am inclined to use crotch, as it refers to the entire area between someone's thighs, which has literary use. But to the point made here, its a terrible word; not sexy, not erotic... etc. Who's got a good replacement for "crotch"?

 

[bestkeptsecret678]

If it's in character, any word can work. A hard-boiled cynical type who falls in love against his/her will might well use cunt. Brits and Australians are much more likely to use it.

Some words work as descriptions better than synonyms - a woman's breasts might be 'cute little mounds' but 'her mounds' just sounds like molehills! Mound/mounds is definitely a max-once-per-story word, too. Like 'member'.

My pet hates are cutesy works like titties and panties and cunny, which always make me feel the man wants someone under-age.

Agreed, titties has no place in my work; but panties does. Have just begun to introduce boy shorts, as alternative. Someone said they're sexier, with which I concur. No cunny's for me.

 

[bestkeptsecret678]

I recently became aware of people’s aversion to panties. I actually went back and checked work I wrote, realising I don’t really use it. However, I never in a million years thought the term was anything other than technical. I’ve just always known 'panties' as the name for woman’s underwear and that’s what everyone calls them.

I guess I'm surprised to now learn that there's aversion to using "panties." Hmmm, I never knew.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

I often am inclined to use crotch, as it refers to the entire area between someone's thighs, which has literary use. But to the point made here, its a terrible word; not sexy, not erotic... etc. Who's got a good replacement for "crotch"?

I kinda like crotch. Crutch, no. Gusset, generally even worse. Groin? Or just "up between his/her legs"?

 

[EricasDreams]

It’s interesting reading dislikes. “Tummy” infantilizes? It can in context, I guess, like anything. It is perfect, though, to describe a fit woman’s flat, silky-smooth abdomen. Simply using “stomach” can also be quite evocative in the right context, though there is also the “upset stomach”. “Belly” usually works, too. On the other hand, there is the “potbelly”. I cannot think of any equally negative connotation for tummy. Regardless, they all work in proper context. Tummy is yummy!

Oops, I said “yummy”. Some hate that word, too. It can be good - like when an 18-year-old girl eats jizz for the first time and finds out it is sexy and exciting to gulp down hot, healthy semen. To move it around with one’s tongue, press the viscous clumps to the roof of one’s mouth, and then swallow them with slurping whimpers. It truly is sexy and exciting!

But, gosh, I said “jizz”! I really do NOT like the words “jizz” or ”jism”, except as a joke. Same with “spooge”, “baby-batter”, “man-milk“, etc. I like “semen”, “cum”, “ejaculate” and for the man who is very strong and virile, “seed”.

Seed belongs in a womb. Sperm in a uterus. Semen in a vagina. Cum in a cunt. Because once a beautiful pussy is fucked, stretched and filled until it is raw and splayed, it is a cunt. Of course sensitive variations are nice, too.

I don’t like “dicks”. Jerks in high school are dicks. Below average guys have dicks. I like cocks. Particularly thick, veiny, black cocks. A superior, beautiful cock that practically impregnates a woman on sight is a Phallus. And of course “penis” includes them all, and works well in generic and clinical ways.

The aversion to “panties” is beyond my comprehension. It’s just what they are! Bra and panties. Yes, there are underpants, aka boxer shorts or briefs. And the things old ladies wear. But the shear, slinky things that most women who are sexually active wear are usually called panties.

I even like “rape”, though real rape is horrible. I love for my husband to rape my throat with his tongue as he penetrates into my womb. As he takes me. I love to be violated. To have my pussy stretched. I love to be left raw and twitching, my deep-fucked cunt dripping cum. I love when he invades my body on all fronts. I love to see my my vulva, my labia, his life-giving phallus, battered with my cream, my womanly secretions. Frosted. Glazed. My wet, swollen snatch clinging tightly to his veiny shaft.

Probably the only term I really, really hate in all ways is “cunny”. It sounds absurd. It sounds like a word only a male, elderly pedo might use. I have only encountered it recently.